Bradok187, The Reader

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The Tome: The Journey To Discovery
unpublished

Follow a young man's life through the years as he goes on an unexpected adventure that will not only change him, but also the entire world.


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Help anyone? on 11/6/2012 5:13:18 AM

When comes down to writing in general most are written in third person, but for a game where you take the role of a character i think "you" would make it easier for the readers to follow the story then saying the protagonist's name if you understand what im saying.


Help anyone? on 11/6/2012 1:55:22 AM

I've always liked the classic narrator's story. By that i mean the omniscient narrator knows all and follows the protagonist on his journey. So it would write like "You walk into the room and see a frog."


Help anyone? on 11/6/2012 1:41:27 AM

Alright so i have been working on my first whenever i get a chance and its rolling along at about a snails pace, but at least its moving. However since i work pretty long hours i can only get on at night and sometimes that's pretty late. Today i took the time and instead ok continuing writing i stopped and read through what i wrote and i fixed and expanded all the stuff that i got lazy on. While doing that though i realized that a few of the choices may leave people not sure why this is happening. Like i said though the game changes a lot depending on your first choices. One you can do will lead you to fight in an actual war, where another will lead to making political and economical choices to help a city. Ive been working on this every night since i started it and i believe im up to 30 something pages and im not done with the second section yet. All that being said id like to move to the reason im writing this.

I get bored easy, so im thinking of starting a second story to write when i get bored of the first. I got an idea and i mapped it out the same way as the first, plotting major events in the world and such, but I just cant seem to get past the first page. I bet i have typed it out a dozen times but i end up erasing it after i read it, so heres the question.

If the character already knows something that is pretty much the basis of the story do i go ahead and say it or let it come naturally? 

Also if anyone is interested in co-writing with me please say so.


I need advice! on 11/3/2012 11:31:42 PM

Hey I'm fairly new too and am working on my first story of the same genre. When i started i was scarred to death and didn't even know where to begin,but once i started writing I found that it wasn't that big of a deal. So if there is any advice i can give you its this; if you write your story and you think its perfect then screw what everyone else says. Its your story and all that matters is that you like it.


"An Empty Throne" on 11/3/2012 3:29:32 AM

Alright, this is the first status update on my story "An Empty Throne". I received a lot of good advice from various people when i was still trying to get the basic outline of the story down. Due to the fact that im not very keen on death threads i decided that i would go a different route and make it where every nearly choice you make leads to a different arch in the story. To enhance this effect  instead of planning out the story step by step, i planned out the world events that take place in the story. This way while playing you will see a everything that happens a different way each play through you choose a different set of choices. For those of you out there thinking " Damn thats gonna be a lot of work!" your right. The fact being that with every choice leading to something new means that i have to write a whole new section, and that means it will take a little longer to finish than most stories that kill you if you do not choose correctly.

As of right now im done with the very first section of the story. I used this part of the story as a way to set up what would happen in the next section. The choices you make in this first section seem to be insignificant but your actions will determine the entirety of the next section. So even though the first section leaves more to be wanted, don't fret because in the next section ,no matter what you chose, everything around you will change.

The first section branches out to six different endings. I planned on making it eight but if i would have the eighth ending would have been half assed and not done well so i just scrapped it and went with the six i had already written and thought out. Every section will end with a set number of years passing. No matter what arch your in you'll know you've reached the end of the section when your choice is so X years pass.

I plan on having the next section finished in about a week or so, but seeing as how i will have to turn six into twelve endings i don't know how long it will take. I will however finish it as quickly as i can without messing up the quality of the story.

 

If anyone has and questions about the story or anything of that matter i would be glad to hear it.


Advice for a Nub? on 11/2/2012 1:11:44 AM

Yes ive plotted out the how the story will flow, as far as beginning, middle, end but as i said im trying to flesh it out. After all its a story game and i want to add multiple endings.

As far as why the eldest didn't inherit the throne, there was an uproar when the king's will was read and he did not name an heir. What the deal pretty much is, he loves all his kids but you were his favorite and he didn't want to pick your brother of you.

I like the idea about staying in the castle, like i said and you will see if you read everything has gone to shit. You and your little brothers tutor ,that pretty much raised you, has been struggling to keep people from manipulating you and your younger brother to gain the crown.

What  is different about this story is that all three have a claim to the throne because of what the will said.


Advice for a Nub? on 11/2/2012 12:44:00 AM

Alright so i finished the first and most of the second page but ive come to another block in the story. In the second page i showed how much castle life has changed due to the death of the king and how it has effected the protagonists' life. So im gonna summarize it basically and then throw out some ideas on how i should proceed and if any of you have some ideas id love to hear them.

Ok, with the death of the king the kingdom has been thrown into an age of unrest. You, who are the middle child, has came into adulthood and have been called for an audience with your mother who has taken the seat of power since no heir has been named.

Im stuck at why your mother has called you. So far ive came up with these.

-Your mother wants you to head to the Zalin province and secure that neutrality continues there between the kingdom and Geld.

-Your brother, who is the charge of Orlae, has stopped sending word to your mother and now she wants you to go see why.

-(and for those who posted above)Your mother wants you to go to the allied country of Geld and investigate the rumors of them gaining control of dragons.

If anyone has any other ideas let me hear them.


Advice for a Nub? on 10/31/2012 1:50:13 AM

Lol you are not going to believe me when i say it, but while i was waiting for a reply to this i went ahead on and wrote the starting page to the story and it has a few subtle hints about some of the things you said in it(mostly the fighting for power thing).

So basically the king dies but doesn't chose an heir and he has three sons. I plan to take it through all the stages of power progression and the things that involve ruling a kingdom.


Advice for a Nub? on 10/30/2012 10:05:21 PM

Hey, Im new here and i have read a few stories and i really like storygames. Im on of those people that play RPGS for the story and every since i played the first one with a branching story i have loved the concept, but as many of you most likely know there isn't a very wide selection of games that fit that criteria out there. So i went online and started playing game books, but a gamebook can only provide so much entertainment seeing as how the tend to be old and most are not very imaginative. I eventually found my way to Choice Of Games and from there i found this site.

I made an account on here but up until now ive still been hesitant of beginning a story, but im having the same drawbacks as i did when i decided to start. WHAT DO I WRITE ABOUT!!!???? I love medieval stuff and im a fan of Tolkien but its been done so many times i have no faith in my self that i will be able to stay completely original. Im gonna try my hand it it anyway so heres what i got so far.

 

The king of the land has died and now his underage child has been charged with ruling the Empire. Thats the basic theme anyhow. Its been kinda hard to flesh out though. If anyone has any ideas that will help me along with this i would gladly accept any advice, im gonna try to get the beginning at least typed out and then ill post again so i can get your opinions on that.

So ok thanks i hope when its finished you enjoy.