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Warden

I have no idea what I'm doing here.

Spiders have an interesting duality. People are naturally afraid and disturbed by them, but they do a lot of good in the world by keeping other pests in check. I've decided the dark elf goddess appears simply as a beautiful woman, now being held in check by a spider spirit created by the sun god. All the religious factions around her focus on the way she might be freed. There is one in particular going the route of breeding their own spider to take on the sun spider. In the storygame the player will encounter them the most due to their need for a steady supply of slaves.

Thanks. I still feel the most comfortable with 3rd person.

Is there a major preference for second person over third person here? I know second is what most authors are doing, but do readers mind when it's third person for instance?

I'm sorry but all our income is already going to Cthulhu and Mehrunes Dagon and we have no say in the matter. The Church of Endmaster will have to take it up with them in court.

I ended up getting rid of the spider goddess and changing a few other things, mostly based on Endmaster's post. I've been writing this out more as a novel and I've got loads of setting notes for areas it hasn't even touched on yet, but I still plan to convert it all into a storygame someday. This will also be a much larger story than originally planned as I decided to have a whole path where you can adventure aboveground. I wanted to avoid that to avoid comparisons to a certain famous dark elf, but after a couple of roleplay campaigns as the main character is turns out this was much too fun to leave out. Writing progress is still a little slow, because I'm married now and have two stepsons. It's been an eventful few months!

The only "grievance" the Hamas have ever had is that Jews exist. Israel is bombing these so called civilian areas because that's where the rockets aimed at their capital are always coming from. What's happening now is long overdue.

Since I feel like this may not be as clear to other people, I wanted to spell it out: QAnon was a delusion sent because these people were arrogant and hateful and turned away from God, while misusing His name and the name of His son to back up their completely un-Christian actions. In addition to whatever they get charged with on Earth, all these "Christians" who attacked the country because of their insane worship of a president and of flags and symbols are guilty of idolatry. That put all their faith in the wrong things and will be going to Hell unless they humble themselves and repent. This is exactly how Hitler happened and how the Antichrist will rise to power. You may be reading this and not believe me now, but try to remember it later.

I just want to be sure before I start it. There will be an underground dark elf city, it's a slave holding society that can't stand sunlight and worships a spider goddess. I will not make them overly matriarchal except having a queen and priestesses, and not ~everyone~ will be super evil just because. But is this still too specific? I don't know if dark elves are generic enough that you can use them just anywhere like regular elves.

We were supposed to read in school a few years ago but I didn't and basically just bullshitted my way through because I was playing Red Dead Redemption all the time instead. I have decided to dutifully complete my education. Has anyone else read this? Am I supposed to hate the main character, because I do. I really really do. It's very well written though, I can see why it's a classic.

That sure was a different time...