SpitefullyInnocuous, The Reader

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Hey there! My name is SpitefullyInnocuous, you can call me faggot, noob, pleb, cunt, or anything else that suits you. It'll happen anyway. I'm currently attempting to write my very first story game, so I won't be reading/rating much, though I'll try to help some of the newer ones get the ratings they need to be ranked. My favorite genres are SciFi and realistic fiction, though I by no means dislike the others. Feel free to message me, if for whatever reason you get the urge. I can be a pretty decent person sometimes. Yes, I've been on here before, but that was a year ago and things were different. Now I'm looking forward to being a contributing member. That's sort of becoming my motto at this point. I like to think I have a good sense of humor and can take a joke, which is a skill I lacked on my last venture into this site. Thanks for reading y'all.


Dead Woman’s Child

Years have passed since the Retopia General came to restore peace and order to a damaged world. The start was rocky, to say the least, but now Earth is a utopian world with enough resources for everyone... however, as is the case with all science fiction stories, this "perfection" comes at a cost.

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Dead Woman’s Child: a prologue for maybe a story on 4/21/2022 8:12:21 AM

Thanks for your help. I'll definitely use it when I rewrite it for the story.

Dead Woman’s Child: a prologue for maybe a story on 4/20/2022 10:06:33 PM

Here, I'll try to explain what's happening so you can help me get that point across, even though it IS supposed to be a "what's going on here" moment that you figure out as you read. Actually, it's modeled after one of my favorite books. After a scene in "Matched" by Ally Condie.

The Retopia General is a potential oligarchy attempting to overtake the world after it has descended into virtually The Purge. All that's left of humankind is gathered before them to protest, hence the woman and her child. They are prone to violent outbreaks because of being raised in a lawless and anything-goes environment. Fighting breaks out because of their heightened emotions and predescribed violent tendencies. 

Eventually, the riot gets out of hand, with one of the mob brandishing a gun. They pull the trigger randomly, perhaps even accidentally, and it hits the mother of the child. 

Though I think the idea of it being from her perspective is intriguing.

Dead Woman’s Child: a prologue for maybe a story on 4/20/2022 11:36:31 AM
It’s a prologue- not to introduce characters, but to set the tone. The actual story has characters and that kind of thing, but not this part. It just gets i in your head that the Retopia General are actually the bad guys, or at least not great, before the main character of the story tries to tell you they’re wonderful and the saviors of mankind. Does that make any kind of sense?

Dead Woman’s Child: a prologue for maybe a story on 4/20/2022 8:25:27 AM
Lol, no. Is there any way you could help me make it better? Maybe less gay?

Introductions on 4/20/2022 8:24:36 AM
Cringey troll, for sure. And thanks!

Introductions on 4/19/2022 10:15:00 PM
Sorry, it was the first image I had that fit. And no. I don’t even know who that person is

Introductions on 4/19/2022 12:14:41 PM
Hi there. I know most of you already, but some of you are actually new to me. It’s been awhile. I’ve matured. My old account(s) are banned (not a good sign, I know), so this username is different. Obviously. If I seem familiar to any of you or you care enough to do any actual digging to see who I was, I’m just gonna say right here that I’m not like that anymore. I swear. Anything new in the last year? I looked for a contest to enter and found that I was just slightly too late. Darn. It’s fun catching up on some new conversations in the threads, and I’m looking forward to reading the newest big time hits in the story game world. I’m even trying to leave reviews and maybe succeed at writing a story myself. Be a contributing member, for once. In summary, hello again!

Dead Woman’s Child: a prologue for maybe a story on 4/19/2022 9:40:12 AM
“Humankind will never change!” came the first shout. Instantly, thousands of voices began screaming, as if this one person had pulled the cork keeping all their opinions inside… “This is ludicrous!” “We have rights!” “You can’t do this!” “It’ll never work!” so on and so forth, late into the night. Eventually, the fighting began, as the Retopia General knew it would. They knew humanity like no other, every impulse, every thought. They knew it, and they had created a solution. Now they awaited the inevitable realization and submission. BANG! The sound rang out over the crowd. Some jumped at the noise, startled, while others froze in terror. “Mommy! Mommy!” the voice of a small child cried out. “Mommy, no!” Suddenly, the fighting ceased as the crowd realized what they had done. The Retopia General, every member, watched with smug smiles as the people backed away in revulsion. There, in the middle of them all, was a young woman bent over on the ground, her child next to her, a little boy with dark hair matted with his mother’s blood and bright green eyes overtaken with tears. “Mommy…” he said, shaking her shoulder. A bullet lay deep and deadly near the center of her chest. The crowd seemed to hold its collective breath as they waited for the young woman to open her eyes, to talk to her child and show the world she was not dead, they had not killed her. She never did… she never would. As the crowd slowly dissipated, the only noise heard was the heartbroken sobs of the dead woman’s child.