Will You Rat Them Out?

Hey, congrats on publishing your first story!

I think you're really good at writing dialogue, but you might want to take a look at some more stories before publishing.

I think the idea of a curse where you're compelled to snitch on people is quite compelling actually. In fact, the premise sort of reminds me of Ella Enchanted, and that was a really fun movie.

But you end it too soon. So from what I can tell, you wake up, either resist the compulsion to tattle and run away with your sister Kacy, or you tattle on her.

The tattling path ends prematurely, with your mom mysteriously falling out of a window. I feel like you have to give it some build up, and actually write a few more events leading up to the conclusion.

And that's the major issue. Things sort of happen, but I would definetly like to see a more gradual progression.

Overall, not bad and it's commendable that you published for your first time, but you can do better.