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10 years ago

We've had one here before...but that was over a year ago. So, there are some new users, some old ones who've abandoned us, and so I figured, why not? (this is mostly copy/paste with some changes from the last rules.)

 

 

1) Must be a Shakespearean, English sonnet. This has 14 lines written in iambic pentameter, which basically means 10 syllables each line. The lines rhyme as follows: a-b-a-b, c-d-c-d, e-f-e-f, g-g. You'll notice the last two lines are a rhyming couplet. So, to illustrate, here's a sonnet Madglee wrote as the last example:

Shall I suppose the Eye forever shines? (a)

   A mark, a rune, a desperate sweat of (b)

   Madness; raging pleasure, hatred divine (a)

   And You! Ought fly away O blackened dove, (b)

   Foul, untamed carrier of what was mine, (c)

   Corrupt another’s sky, soar high above! (d)

   The circle of death: an infinite line; (c)

   A rote path so sheer I climb, yet you shove (d)

   Me as before below...dead in your eyes. (e)

   Alas, cruel nature’s vice hath made my heart (f)

   Divide; an empty well, a thirst for lies, (e)

   Its rhythm faded by your poisoned part, (f)

   A prismatic split, a moaning abyss (g)

   A broken love, and a final dead kiss. (g)

See how the a's rhyme, the d's rhyme, etc?

2) Must be about some sort of dark theme. Death, insanity, apocalypse (of any kind), war, dark magic, etc.  

3) Must also include a romantic interest, male, female, neutral, or otherwise. Romantic interest is not necessarily sex or love.

4) EXPLAIN how there is a love/romantic interest and dark theme occurs if it is not obvious, as so many sonnets/poems can be vague.

5) PM me your entries once you're done.

6) Must be original, and cannot have been used in the last contest.

7) If someone wants to be a judge as well, pm me. Judges cannot enter.

8) No working with other users. It must be done completely on your own.

 

 

At the end, all sonnets entered will be posted, and the winning ones labeled as so.

 

 

Due date will be 10 days from now, at midnight by the site time. I'm not sure if this is too much time, or too little. If you have objections and reasons why, post them and if I agree, the due date may be adjusted.

 

Admins, would it be possible for there to be point prizes for winners?

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10 years ago

I don't mind you starting contests if you write your own sonnet as an example. 

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10 years ago

Working on it.

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10 years ago

Looking forward to it. Or make it different, and broader. Let the authors choose, as they demanded during the site contest.

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10 years ago

Oooh, I'm in!

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10 years ago

Yeah, I want to enter. I never write anymore. Stimulate me.

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10 years ago

(probably isn't the best example, being my first sonnet.)

A promise that I seek, I'll never share, (a)

I'll never keep. To my grave the secret (b)

goes. A promised hell, a man without care, (a)

an ugly sight I can never forget (b)

awaits thee. Oh, but I cannot say how (c)

much it irks me that I can neither tell (d)

nor conceal the future, where all will bow (c)

and kiss thy artless feet and try to sell (d)

what meager possessions they call their own (e)

to earn enough to live a day longer. (f)

A man sells his wife, his child, to postpone (e)

death. Stricken down, we cannot grow stronger. (f)

I seek to promise her my love, my life (g)

but if known, this secret will cause much strife. (g)

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10 years ago

Hahah, great! I don't like the last line/rhyme, but other than that it is wonderful. Not to detract from it, but this is why I used to get shouted down during college when I said poetry was too easy. People got violent. I always claimed prose needed to be crafted and any creative person could write poetry. 

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10 years ago

I was trying to figure out how to tie the ending back with the starting, like my language arts teacher says to do with stories. '>_> It's also a bit hard to rhyme with life. Either that, or testing for a couple weeks straight fried my brain.

Some people end up getting hung up on phrasing the beginning of a line one way, and then trying to find a word that both rhymes accordingly and makes sense with the rest of the line, and don't open themselves to the possibility of changing the first section of a line of poetry or a verse of song lyrics.

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10 years ago

The last line doesn't scan properly, but it's overall a good effort. 

Can you give a bit more explanation as to what you mean by "romantic interest" that isn't love or sex?

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10 years ago
She could be referring to Romanticism, in which case a "romantic interest" could be anything "marked by the imaginative or emotional appeal of what is heroic, adventurous, remote, mysterious, or idealized".

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10 years ago

I'll bump this up after around 24 hours have gone by with no replies.

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10 years ago

I'm down.

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10 years ago
I'm in, either as a participant or a judge, whichever you need more.

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10 years ago

Well, I've already submitted mine, soo ... I'm in the contest, I guess.

I, uh, haven't written poetry in ages and my last sonnet before this one was never-ago. :P So. Yeah. >.> Not expecting to win. 

I'm glad to be participating, though.

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10 years ago

So who's in it? Is the prize $100?

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10 years ago
Hey, you will have plenty of time to criticize our mercenary attitudes after the contest.

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10 years ago

I might be in mattering what the rewards are haha.

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10 years ago

I was thinking 75 points for first, 50 for second, 25 for third.

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10 years ago

You're giving away 150 points? That's more than half of your points o_O.

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10 years ago

*shrugs* What else are they used for? I know about the deal with it upping your opinion with rating, but I haven't read that many stories lately and half the time, I don't rate them. I've got the wolf on rps, I'm good for now. ^-^

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10 years ago

Shun the heretic!

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10 years ago

I'll donate 25 points for first place. 

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10 years ago

Edit: Nevermind

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10 years ago

Eh, what the heck. I'll give it a go!

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10 years ago

Let's see a list of entrants and a deadline.

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10 years ago

Deadline; 7 days, 22 hours, 36 minutes.

 

                          Entrants;

       People who have already submitted;

Kiel_Farren, ISentinielPenguinI,

       People who say they want to participate;

Madglee, Romulus, betaband, jamescoker (?), Tanstaafl (?), Leoscales7.

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10 years ago

Don't know if you're going to care, but iambic pentameter isn't just "ten syllables in a line."

An iamb is an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable.

There's other kinds of pentameter, like trochaic and dactyl.

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10 years ago

Probably stupid question: doesn't that only have application to how it's spoken, not how it's written?

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10 years ago

Eh. I don't know if Tacocat wants iambic pentameter or 10 syllables.

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10 years ago

But ... iambic pentameter is 10 syllables, Seth was just explaining that it's more than that.

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10 years ago

Yeah, I know, but in the requirements taco said that iambic pentameter was just 10 syllables so I don't know whether to do that, or the actual definition.

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10 years ago

Uh ...

@TacocaT

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10 years ago

Go by the 10 syllables per line.

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10 years ago

That sonnet he posted by me is iambic pentameter. Seth is correct.

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10 years ago

... Maybe post a revision of the rules, then? @TacocaT

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10 years ago
Actually, I think it best you stick to the traditional iambic pentameter. Otherwise, you're going to get sonnets that don't read like sonnets.

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10 years ago

Probably, but Taco may be concerned about driving off people by making the rules too strict...?
 

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10 years ago

So if I already created a sonnet, but not in iambic pentameter, I should submit a different one?

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10 years ago

^ then technically, you've not actually created a sonnet. XD

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10 years ago

Seth is right, but the rules of the contest changed, so ... it no longer matters.

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10 years ago

Dactylic pentameter can look like this when it's written:

Half a league, half a league,

Half a league onward,

All in the valley of Death

   Rode the six hundred.

“Forward, the Light Brigade!

Charge for the guns!” he said.

Into the valley of Death

   Rode the six hundred.

I suppose you could claim that any set of words equaling 10 syllables can theoretically be mangled into iambic pentameter, but you'd have to mispronunciate some of the words.

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10 years ago

xD ... Eh, as far as Shakespeare's day and age is concerned, we're mispronouncing a lot of words already, right?

(Also, on the subject of your example: Ahh, Tennyson. I like that one.)

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10 years ago

Hahah, mispronunciate.

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10 years ago

No.

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10 years ago

xD I beat you to the punch by looking it up and refreshing my memory a few hours ago, but thanks.

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10 years ago

I submitted a thing, because I want to do this!

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10 years ago

Trochaic octameter.

Once upon a midnight dreary, while I pondered, weak and weary,

Over many a quaint and curious volume of forgotten lore—

    While I nodded, nearly napping, suddenly there came a tapping,

As of some one gently rapping, rapping at my chamber door.

“’Tis some visitor,” I muttered, “tapping at my chamber door—

            Only this and nothing more.”

 

    Ah, distinctly I remember it was in the bleak December;

And each separate dying ember wrought its ghost upon the floor.

    Eagerly I wished the morrow;—vainly I had sought to borrow

    From my books surcease of sorrow—sorrow for the lost Lenore—

For the rare and radiant maiden whom the angels name Lenore—

            Nameless here for evermore.

 

    And the silken, sad, uncertain rustling of each purple curtain

Thrilled me—filled me with fantastic terrors never felt before;

    So that now, to still the beating of my heart, I stood repeating

    “’Tis some visitor entreating entrance at my chamber door—

Some late visitor entreating entrance at my chamber door;—

            This it is and nothing more.”

 

    Presently my soul grew stronger; hesitating then no longer,

“Sir,” said I, “or Madam, truly your forgiveness I implore;

    But the fact is I was napping, and so gently you came rapping,

    And so faintly you came tapping, tapping at my chamber door,

That I scarce was sure I heard you”—here I opened wide the door;—

            Darkness there and nothing more.

 

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing,

Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before;

    But the silence was unbroken, and the stillness gave no token,

    And the only word there spoken was the whispered word, “Lenore?”

This I whispered, and an echo murmured back the word, “Lenore!”—

            Merely this and nothing more.

 

    Back into the chamber turning, all my soul within me burning,

Soon again I heard a tapping somewhat louder than before.

    “Surely,” said I, “surely that is something at my window lattice;

      Let me see, then, what thereat is, and this mystery explore—

Let my heart be still a moment and this mystery explore;—

            ’Tis the wind and nothing more!”

 

    Open here I flung the shutter, when, with many a flirt and flutter,

In there stepped a stately Raven of the saintly days of yore;

    Not the least obeisance made he; not a minute stopped or stayed he;

    But, with mien of lord or lady, perched above my chamber door—

Perched upon a bust of Pallas just above my chamber door—

            Perched, and sat, and nothing more.

 

Then this ebony bird beguiling my sad fancy into smiling,

By the grave and stern decorum of the countenance it wore,

“Though thy crest be shorn and shaven, thou,” I said, “art sure no craven,

Ghastly grim and ancient Raven wandering from the Nightly shore—

Tell me what thy lordly name is on the Night’s Plutonian shore!”

            Quoth the Raven “Nevermore.”

 

    Much I marvelled this ungainly fowl to hear discourse so plainly,

Though its answer little meaning—little relevancy bore;

    For we cannot help agreeing that no living human being

    Ever yet was blessed with seeing bird above his chamber door—

Bird or beast upon the sculptured bust above his chamber door,

            With such name as “Nevermore.”

 

    But the Raven, sitting lonely on the placid bust, spoke only

That one word, as if his soul in that one word he did outpour.

    Nothing farther then he uttered—not a feather then he fluttered—

    Till I scarcely more than muttered “Other friends have flown before—

On the morrow he will leave me, as my Hopes have flown before.”

            Then the bird said “Nevermore.”

 

    Startled at the stillness broken by reply so aptly spoken,

“Doubtless,” said I, “what it utters is its only stock and store

    Caught from some unhappy master whom unmerciful Disaster

    Followed fast and followed faster till his songs one burden bore—

Till the dirges of his Hope that melancholy burden bore

            Of ‘Never—nevermore’.”

 

    But the Raven still beguiling all my fancy into smiling,

Straight I wheeled a cushioned seat in front of bird, and bust and door;

    Then, upon the velvet sinking, I betook myself to linking

    Fancy unto fancy, thinking what this ominous bird of yore—

What this grim, ungainly, ghastly, gaunt, and ominous bird of yore

            Meant in croaking “Nevermore.”

 

    This I sat engaged in guessing, but no syllable expressing

To the fowl whose fiery eyes now burned into my bosom’s core;

    This and more I sat divining, with my head at ease reclining

    On the cushion’s velvet lining that the lamp-light gloated o’er,

But whose velvet-violet lining with the lamp-light gloating o’er,

            She shall press, ah, nevermore!

 

    Then, methought, the air grew denser, perfumed from an unseen censer

Swung by Seraphim whose foot-falls tinkled on the tufted floor.

    “Wretch,” I cried, “thy God hath lent thee—by these angels he hath sent thee

    Respite—respite and nepenthe from thy memories of Lenore;

Quaff, oh quaff this kind nepenthe and forget this lost Lenore!”

            Quoth the Raven “Nevermore.”

 

    “Prophet!” said I, “thing of evil!—prophet still, if bird or devil!—

Whether Tempter sent, or whether tempest tossed thee here ashore,

    Desolate yet all undaunted, on this desert land enchanted—

    On this home by Horror haunted—tell me truly, I implore—

Is there—is there balm in Gilead?—tell me—tell me, I implore!”

            Quoth the Raven “Nevermore.”

 

    “Prophet!” said I, “thing of evil!—prophet still, if bird or devil!

By that Heaven that bends above us—by that God we both adore—

    Tell this soul with sorrow laden if, within the distant Aidenn,

    It shall clasp a sainted maiden whom the angels name Lenore—

Clasp a rare and radiant maiden whom the angels name Lenore.”

            Quoth the Raven “Nevermore.”

 

    “Be that word our sign of parting, bird or fiend!” I shrieked, upstarting—

“Get thee back into the tempest and the Night’s Plutonian shore!

    Leave no black plume as a token of that lie thy soul hath spoken!

    Leave my loneliness unbroken!—quit the bust above my door!

Take thy beak from out my heart, and take thy form from off my door!”

            Quoth the Raven “Nevermore.”

 

    And the Raven, never flitting, still is sitting, still is sitting

On the pallid bust of Pallas just above my chamber door;

    And his eyes have all the seeming of a demon’s that is dreaming,

    And the lamp-light o’er him streaming throws his shadow on the floor;

And my soul from out that shadow that lies floating on the floor

            Shall be lifted—nevermore!

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10 years ago

I recognize that. Isn't it 'The Raven' by Edgar (Owens?)

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10 years ago

Edgar Allen Poe, you mean, right?

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10 years ago

I wrote that. No clue what you're talking about. hahaha. Yes, it's the best poet in history. Note his use of alliteration to trip everyone out. In school, we actually had to use the accents so we could see the various "feet" and what not. It's been a long time, but there are dipthongs and all sorts of fun.

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10 years ago

Haha, I was actually thinking about using The Raven as an example of a poem with a rhythm that is an essential part of its effect, and would also be difficult to warp into some other meter.

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10 years ago

Right? I'm not a big fan of poetry, but it is seriously so good. I love reading about the pallid bust of Pallas.

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10 years ago

My favorite poem of his is Elderado. 

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10 years ago

EldORado. It's not bad. The Raven is his masterpiece without question. Then again, how does one judge poetry? Easy shit. Lyrics. Easy. Sometimes I wonder if I have always disdained poetry because it is easy for me. I think not, though, it must be fairly easy for everyone.

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10 years ago
Dude seemed to have an obsession with hiding bodies inside walls.

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See that's where I disagree. I feel that the raven is phenomenal, but it's definitely not his best. I could hear the argument that The Bells is his best work, though I personally feel that EldOrado is the best, just because it conveys the misery of Poe's life succiently and masterfully. 

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10 years ago

Good points. Could be true. Poe's mastery was the idea of perversity. I actually wrote an essay on that at some point. He was dead sober, too, despite the fact that one newsman slandered him as a drug addict and alcoholic.

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Yeah, I doubted that he was a drunk. Could be true though, history is fickle like that. Definitely crazy, but I feel that comes with brilliance.

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10 years ago
Taco, no offense, but you make me want to cry sometimes.

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10 years ago

How so? What'd I do?

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10 years ago
Edgar Allan Poe

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10 years ago

He's upset that you didn't remember the man's name. :P Shaaame.

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10 years ago

At least I remembered his first name. I'm not good with last names.

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I was only teasing. (I can't speak for James, though he might've been.) It's just that a lot of people consider him one of the greats.
 

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10 years ago

He's my favorite drunken poet.

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10 years ago

The flow of 'The Raven' is just ... perfect. It's hard not to read it aloud when I see it.

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10 years ago

That is my all-time favorite, but there is another poem that can conjure even more emotion ... The Song of Hiawatha by Henry Wadsworth Longfellow.

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10 years ago

This is my entry. Totally not a sonnet and completely fails to meet any criteria. Still, I like it. I'll write a real sonnet for the contest.

right angles

 

The street cramped, I walked 

   a right angle  (always move in a straight line)

industrial coordinate systematic grid

between rows of dilapidated apartments

in which grey people lounged fiending or high,

pasty skin and sunken eyes, shells of reason

-sp’anging since they haven’t eaten 

today or any day, really, but they need it

 (to cure itself) 

  and landed here-

pungent stink of urine and something like chicken

hanging.

They watched me walk, 

their glazed eyes and configured distance

-staring at me, past me and then

a girl with leather skin asked for a smoke and I gave it to her.

“Sit down?”

All right I did (though I really shouldn’t) 

crouched next to her, rubbed my nose

asked if she had (yes, I’ve seen you before)

more; 

her pigtails bobbed-

I watched her 

pleasure

and then scooped some out and

up it went, pleasant warmth and 

as liquid

hot fluidic nonsensical awareness

slipped 

   from my skin 

   watched a man walking

   past with a cane, 

   heard his clacking on the

   broken cobblestones and wondered

   how I came to be on

   this street with this girl in summer

   and why it was fine to be wrong-

 

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10 years ago

^ This is why we're going to lose.

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In the old days, a poet was a craftsman, sculpting
rhythm and meter from untamed syllables.
These days, kids think making a sentence
break in the middle qualifies it as art.

 

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10 years ago

Do we PM you our sonnet? Or post them here?

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10 years ago

Pm me when you finish.

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10 years ago

@madglee @jamescoker1226 @Leoscales7

@Romulus @betaband @tanstaafl

?There's about 4 more days left, guys.

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10 years ago

I'm not entering this. AP's turning out to be more of a behemoth than I thought haha.

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Deadline

1 days, 13 hours, 22 minutes. Updated at 5/7/15 at 10:38 AM according to site time.

Participants

Already submitted; ISentinelPenguinI, kiel_farren, betaband,  Leoscales7

Need to submit;  Madglee, Romulus, jamescoker (?)

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10 years ago

Wait, so do we also have to write them in 'real' iambic pentameter? So, with feet and all?

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@ISentinelPenguinI @TacocaT

To Sentinel: Yes, I am aware of the fact that there are only a short amount of days left.

To Tacocat: I have the same question as Romulus. Do we need iambic pentameter, or does it not matter as long as the rhyme scheme is in tact? For these reasons, I have not submitted anything (though I have already finished a sonnet without the "IP" and am working on with it).

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10 years ago

Rhyming scheme and 10 syllables a line, that's all you need to worry about.

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10 years ago

Finished.

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10 years ago

Finished, I have.

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10 years ago

Do we have any other judges?

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10 years ago

Not yet. James could end up being a judge or a participant though.

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10 years ago
I will judge, with your consent.

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10 years ago

1 days, 13 hours, 22 minutes. Updated at 5/7/15 at 10:38 AM according to site time.

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10 years ago

I hope I didn't screw this up...

Time grows nigh...

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10 years ago
I remember doing one of those for the last story-game contest, but madglee kept pushing the date back.

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10 years ago

Update?

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10 years ago

I've sent James the entries to help judge. Results should be back soon.