this story is at a stand still. . . help!!
"okay time to wake up Ethan." the voice was loud and irritating. Ethan covered his ears, "five more minutes!" he shouted. the speaker wasn't listening, "get up!" he was now over Ethan. Ethan looked up, only to his surprise to see a girl standing over him. "you have a very manly voice. . ." Ethan said, Ethan immediately covered his mouth when he realized that he had said that out loud. she blushed and looked down somewhat ashamed, she walked away as fast as she could to avoid talking to him any more. Ethan jumped up and started after her, "wait Sara don't go!" he yelled after her. . . . .
what should happen next?
I assume that this is a storygame that you're working on? It's not too bad of a start, but I would work on things like structure and capitalization.
Such things are essential, y'know?
this is not a game but more of a follow along story. but yes you are right I'll work on those. . .
Oh, so this is a basically meant to be a collaborative story? I don't think this belongs here either, then..
What plot or setting or characters have you come up with, exactly?
I'm not so much worrying about grammar and punctuation as I am about the story itself. . . because you see it's easy to fix punctuation and grammar, but to create an entire world; a story about even a couple of characters is a lot harder than it might appear.
If you have no plot, or world, or characters, you have nothing but a shitty opening and should give up and stop writing.
you didn't let me reply! : (
I'm in class 'ya know. so I can't reply very fast.
but to reply to Steve the setting is present day in a laboratory: a steel/metallic look to it. in a bunk-bed room with multiple other attendants. . .Ethan, who is the main character, is a subject of an experiment that his younger brother has put together.
Yeah, gonna need a shit ton more detail if you want any worthwhile input.
k then. . .
See, this is the point where you tell us the detail, such as "What the experiment is?", "Who the girl character is?" or "The plot".
I under stand this but I'm in the prosses of typing these elements down off of my notebook (it's taking me some time so be patient).
Hence, a more appropriate response is "Let me get that for you" or "I don't have time to tell you now, I'll show you later" rather than "K then".
read the post above ^
i meant the one I made before all that.
I'm so sorry for the confusion I cause. . .
no just the next scene (like his next action/move)
a plot is a story line,kind of "who does what" and "what goes where" thing.
I'm still typing that out I'll PM you the full "stuff" (plot)
Okay. How about when he runs into the hallway, he finds her in the act of secretly taking off her human skin to reveal that she is indeed a wolf. They then have kinky furry sex while listening to the Power Rangers movie soundtrack. Roll extremely fast scrolling credits.
Seems plausible enough with the context you've provided.
holy cow that's creepy (but a good plot twist)
Please don't do that unless it actually makes sense with the story...
but really to get every one on the same page this is not the whole story this is just where I got stuck. I thought giving you only this little bit, you would come up with a bunch of random scenarios that I could translate into the story(changeing the Idea slightly to fit the story).
good to know. . .I shall work on that. . .
So this is really "Fuck it, I don't have a plot. Experiments or some shit? Think something up for me.".
Here's an idea, we will be much better equipped to help you if you answer these questions:
1. Who is Ethan (age, skills or talents, strengths or disabilities, equipment and items he owns, his relevance to the plot, etcetera)?
2. Who is Sara (see above)?
3. What is the general setting (fantasy world or real world, modern or historical setting, any plot character becoming king or prime minister recently, where do these two people live)?
4. What is our hero's quest (save the world, uncover a conspiracy, stay alive while disaster happens, make mountains of money, find a suitable mate and reproduce like a typical mammal)?
5. Anything not covered in 1-4 that we should know like some crazy stuff happening in Act Two?
But it's the thought that counts... right?
As far as I know armyman isn't banned, unless someone else banned him.
Of course its also possible I banned him and forgot because all the idiots start running together at this point.
i'm not banned just forgot about site for a little...