Camp Massacre: 1990
A
horror
storygame by
Reeseyb14
Player Rating
4.26/8
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
Based on
16 ratings
since 06/21/2024
Played 274 times (finished 16)
Story Difficulty
4/8
"March in the swamp"
Play Length
6/8
"It'll be a while, better grab a Snickers®"
Maturity Level
4/8
"Need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.
Tags
Female Protagonist
Horror
Humor
Multiple Protagonists
Part of Series
(This is a serious game) You play as a group of campers who are attending a summer camp that closed down. Five years ago the summer camp had numerous grisley murders that resulted in its closing, now in the year 1990, they are reopening the summer camp. Will the events repeat?
Player Comments
Ok so I need not explain to you that spoilers are coming up, so if you haven't played the game yet, please do.
I think I'm going to start with plot first since I think it merits it , plus I didn't really see any grammar issues.
What's most interesting, in some ways, is how much detail is put into describing the garb of the campers, I would almost call it obsessive detail. It's not necessarily a bad thing exactly, it does add to the story and gives you a good picture to keep in your head.
I think the game could, in many ways be a lot shorter, since a lot of it is background stuff. Interesting to be sure, and it does give you a lot of personality for the characters, which does tend to be helpful in visualizing in my head the sceens more clearly. On the other hand, much of this could have easily been kept to one page, since I felt I had to press continue, continuously just to get through a particular sceen. Note to self, and any others reading this, if there little or no use in paging through, keep it to a minimum of pages. The script itself wasn't bad, don't get me wrong, but the point of choose your story, is to have choices that matter.
Some think that the game could have been cut in half, or more, but I ththink that in some ways the things that were there, left behind a different experience, where you managed to see a part of their lives before it was ruinously ended.
Mostly my frustration was with having to constantly press continue for no reason.
Other than that, it was fine. Perhaps it was a little fluffed up with some things that were unnecessary, but over all, I did like it.
It had a classic horror feeling that you find in movies like Halloween, and perhaps Friday the thirteenth as well, although I never saw those so I'm not sure about that.
Not bad over all, and while there were some issues, I thought it was good.
Hope this helps.
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Thfinalevent77
on 7/12/2024 2:00:43 PM with a score of 0
Ok, this story was an interesting one. In terms of tone foreshadowing isn’t the word – unanimous expectation of an inevitable massacre seems to be the theme throughout from the beginning. I never mind linearity much (which is good because I don’t think any of the choices really matter at all at any stage of the story) but the number of characters and the level of detail about them is very unnecessary, particularly the weirdly detailed descriptions of appearance and clothes.
Chapter 1 was literally just people walking through the camp’s entrance and took about 1,000 words and 20 pages. It might have been nice to have a bit more action a bit earlier in the story rather than just promises that something interesting will eventually happen at some distant future point to give those of us who aren’t professional fashion stylists more reasons for reading... at one point we got a detailed paragraph-long description of someone unpacking a box of tinned vegetables in a kitchen. At that stage I started hoping for a seriously deranged and successful serial killer to root for. Also, any time any character makes the smallest joke everyone roars with laughter for a couple of paragraphs.
The extreme emotions make the story a bit odd. Someone called someone a “dipface” and the person responded with an all-caps death threat (which reminded me of Trump for some reason). Then we heard a car and everyone was scared for five pages but it’s ok because it turns out to be a guy whose hair “cascades down his neck in gentle waves” so he fits right in. There were some unexpectedly fun metaphors in places but it’s a bit weird that the smallest action always seems to trigger an extreme emotional reaction from the characters, although that could just be because they’re teenagers.
I got a bit more hopeful that the inevitable massacre would happen soon when the lone adult in charge of the camp of children randomly takes off (no explanation provided), someone calls someone “old man”, this is described as “quick wit” and then someone finds the case of beer left for the unsupervised children in a basement. Then A MURDER HAPPENS (which is about 10% as long as the description of everyone having breakfast) because one of the characters finally goes to get the beers and gets killed but we cut away from all the gory detail (“oh my gosh” exclaims the character who discovers her before also getting chopped) and the moral seems to be you drink alcohol you basically deserve to be disemboweled.
We then have a 6-page hunt for a box of matches, a girl gets ready a romantic moment while the guy reads a Wolverine comic, we get foreshadowing in spades with “little did they know” used on three pages in a row, some more characters get killed (rendering all the attempts to define their individual personalities fairly pointless) but depressingly we are reminded there are still more living characters somewhere else. I tried getting them killed deliberately but the story wouldn’t let me: I got told I sucked at making choices (“whelp!”was the actual word used) and was forced to choose a route where they all live and then we got to The Final Showdown.
The incredibly stereotypical killer (who is unlike any real-life serial killer and more like the bad guy from the first Scary Movie film) and the main character have a weird conversation after which the killer falls out of a window and dies after swinging an axe at and missing, and then the writer kindly told me any review is great so here you are.
To be fair this story has good points: it is well-structured with good grammar and spelling, incredibly detailed and some stuff did eventually happen. Unfortunately, it badly needs massive editing: the pace and detail were bizarrely inconsistent, nothing really happened for the first 80% of the story and I didn’t really get the killer’s motivations beyond “I’m crazy!” This story only needed to be about half as long as it was because there wasn’t a huge amount of plot beyond cliches but a lot of detail about what everyone was wearing. I’d recommend trying short and impactful more often but for a first effort, as you took care to remind us, it’s not a bad try but it is quite a challenge just to read through in its entirety. Happily, I have a free evening and an uncluttered social life and I’m feeling generous so here’s your review and your 6/8 rating.
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Will11
on 6/24/2024 10:43:46 AM with a score of 0
Decent story but very confusing. You never know if you were playing the part of a certain character in the story or deciding the decisions of multiple characters. Lots of detailed descriptions of the physical appearance and clothing of the characters. Not bad that way but still a confusing story. I give it a c+ or a b-
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— Mrwheelbarow on 7/19/2024 8:12:36 AM with a score of 0
While this story starts off as a bit cringey, once the killer shows up the story picks up quite a bit, giving me '80s horror flick vibes. Although reset links instead of proper death endings seemed like a waste. Maybe instead, the story ending could've changed depending on who survived until the final chapter?
Sean was predictable, I honestly figured it was him or Mr. Peterson. Scream does a good job at making this trope effective, so maybe more motivation then "I had this darkness inside me." would have been efficient.
Despite these criticisms, this was a well written story game. Grammar was good. My only issue is that there's an awful lot that could've been done with this story to make it more memorable.
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benholman44
on 7/5/2024 7:33:38 PM with a score of 0
It looks like a bit of work went into writing this, and the story seems to have decent grammar, spelling and structure.
But dude. I got bored way before anything interesting happened and it was just linear clicking to the next page. A massacre would have been nice. I feel cheated.
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DBNB
on 6/24/2024 2:34:20 PM with a score of 0
Was not in the mood to pay attention much so my feedback won't be very detailed...
I didn't even finish one route though due to too much linearity and over explaining clothing details. (I actually don't mind this when its done sparingly or for just a few characters...but when your constantly doing it for everyone its impossible to get a good image of everyone due to information overload. Details need to be purposeful in some way...not every way but at least some way.)
Also there doesn't seem to be any definitive point of view character...the description says you play as Regina but the first choice I made involved Reggie doing something. Even if this was supposed to be a linear story (which it kinda is from what I played) there's too much head hopping going on too quickly.
DM me if you want me to give this another try later or if there's a specific part you want critiqued in more detail. But for now...I can say there's a decent idea here that seems to be bogged down by a lack of proper structure...and being too linear obviously.
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Alienrun
on 6/21/2024 10:27:37 PM with a score of 0
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