Falling Asleep

I liked this story. It was short but for the context of what was happening, it worked out well. I also liked that we really don't know if it was his dreams in the end OR if it was real. The coffee shop could be a dream for all we know!

The writing style is great, and it communicates the story well. If you decide to make a sequel out of this you should definitely add more background (what else is happening outside of the story?) and character development (who is the main character? What does he do? etc.).

It's good, especially if it's your first. The text has a nice flow to it and it has a blending quality between dreaming and reality. I would have liked (perhaps it is simply the ending I got) to go deeper into the plot. Why is the main character having these dreams? What exactly do they mean? Are they insane? Or is it something deeper? If anything I would say that you may even be able to pull a sequel out of this. Good job, keep writing.

Pretty good game, I did a bit of exploration and I think I found all the paths. It's not very long, and I loved the jump at the end, and it's kind of cool how this could be a reality for someone. Not the best thing I've read, certainly not the worst.

This was pretty good but definitely could’ve had something more interesting happen at the end.

mixed feelings

Pretty good for a first game.

The story has a very nice atmosphere, although a couple titles seem a little silly and out of place.

You got a nom! on the nomnom scale! You did a great job describing the scenes/setting, but my only complaint is that it's kinda short and didn't grab my attention. Good writing skills and keep up the good work!
Conversion Chart:
yuk!=0-1 stars
eh!=1-1.9 stars
meh...=2-2.9 stars
nom=3-3.9 stars
nomnom=4-4.9
nomnomnom!=5-6

It was good. I liked the writing style; it was very engaging. But that's the reason for my low rating. Nothing I chose to do mattered. It all ended with rape and murder. Because I suffer from PTSD from an incident I won't discuss, the subject matter was particularly triggering for me. If I was warned before playing, I wouldn't have (although I didn't need to finish the game, but I also have OCD issues). If you made a game that was less traumatic and dark, I'd play it. :)