Highschool Lockdown

I had a little trouble believing how some of choices played out, although I admit that my opinion is biased from the start because I found the premise rather problematic given how many tragedies have involved guns and schools. It really didn't work for me as the setting of, what I assume, was supposed to be a wryly humorous adventure, and I really didn't have it in me to explore all the paths.

That being said, what's there is decently written, if in need of a little bit of proofreading and some more plot development. If you don't have a problem with the premise, it isn't all too long, has a couple of unique endings, and might be worth a playthrough or two.

Hm. This didn't have a lot in common with the way people would genuinely feel when caught during a genuine terrorist incident (I remember going to the scene of the Luxor Massacre in Egypt and seeing bloody fingerprints on the walls...) but it did have a lot in common with how people would react in a computer game... I think a greater degree of realism and a few checks for grammar mistakes would be useful (you should never have questions like "you see 3 guys patrolling what do you do" because that leads to a distinctive "meh" reaction).
I think you have a good premise and some promising alternative choices worked out here but from a random reader I'd recommend revamping the writing to make it more gritty, more sensory (talk about individual actions, reader's responses, the emotions of other people in dramatic terms etc) and generally more lifelike, then you'd have something a lot stronger here :)
Also there seemed a distinct indifference on the part of the author every time I died. It's bad enough dying, it's worse if the omniscient narrator doesn't care much about it :P

Okay. This game does not take itself seriously. This is a fairly big problem since the plot is about school shootings and gun violence. If you're wanting something serious, this isn't it.

I'll start with the grammar since that's the biggest flaw. The author often mistakes "Your" and "You're" (Your is possessive, meaning an object is yours, and you're means you are). Other than that; I don't see any spelling errors, but the author does write quite unprofessionally.

Writing: The story uses way too many references for my liking, and although I am all for using humor in CYS games, using references should not be used as a crutch; This game does that unintentionally or not. The game is short and it could have done better to be longer with more detailed environments

The choices are great. Easily the best part of the game is the different endings and choices, with few of them looping back to each other. That being said, the game has good choices, but I wish it had more.

Despite all these flaws, I found myself consistently enjoying this story and I can't wait to see what the author does next. Worth every cent

hello

pretty much me to a T

Yeah, we honestly love the ending. No school! Yay!

awesome

It was fun.

Wow just bad

I funny story i really liked the crime syndicate ending