Host

Very eerie and creepy, I liked it. Your ability to create tense and horrifying situations is remarkable. I never truly felt safe for a single second, and this made me only want to escape to somewhere safe even more.

It also helped that the descriptions of the hosts were creative. Rather than being a typical zombie game in which nothing is explained as to why the undead are suddenly attacking, this subverts it and I liked that aspect. While some tried and true cliches were present, this was written well enough that such minor detriments were not an issue in spoiling my enjoyment of the story.

Bravo! :)

Still, it sucks when things end a bit abruptly. You certainly have plenty of talent to make something enjoyable and unique from the zombie genre, and it certainly would have been a positive if this was a bit longer. As a standalone storygame, this is written well. It's a rather impressive introduction when all things are considered, but one that leaves a slightly bittersweet taste.

Overall, this is something that I would like to see continued.

Although this game was rather short, it was enjoyable. I felt that the plot was a bit cliche (rather similar to a zombie survival story), but you did a good job making your story unique. The descriptions of the scenes were well-written, and you included the right amount of details - enough so that I could see what was going on without growing bored or overwhelmed. I also liked the choices you gave us. You provided enough so that I felt like I was a part of the story and had the ability to control its flow. The fact that you had good grammar and spelling was a bonus - it becomes frustrating when I see a good story, but it's barely readable due to many mistakes. I encourage you to continue writing. 6/8

Not bad, I like your style of writing and the tension is there. Unfortunately this is still a zombie apocalypse game with a twist and those are a dime a dozen so if you're going to go down this well-worn road you need to do something to really stand out otherwise the whole story feels fairly predictable. This was a good start but if you write a sequel I think you should get much more ambitious :)

As the first storygame I'm ever reviewing, I'll say that while it's not very long, it's got good writing, conveys more than enough details about the scene to help me picture it in my head, and the writing is believable and interesting. A deeper exploration of the world and a larger endgoal besides escaping would be the things that I'd really like to see in a sequel, if there ever is one. All in all, cool story!

Okay, I in the process of completing and rating every horror game on this website, and this is definitely in my top five for best at delivering an uncomfortable, suspenseful, and genuinely horrific atmosphere. Bravo!

I escaped lol, cool :) looking forward to a sequel!

Awesome story :). But, There is a lot of swearing. That’s not necessarily Bad, it’s just a little unpleasant. But other than that, great story!
(I got into the Subaru and best ending :). I’m working on a zombie game with Nose119. I’m also working on a story about raindrops.)

I thought it was very good, but very short. I really got into the story and then it was over 1-2 pages later. A sequel would be cool, but maybe expand on this game a bit first? Or release a couple short sequels so the story can progress. In terms of what was actually there it was very creepy and suspenseful! I like the idea and premise. The olny thing I don’t get: why do the worms kill some people and exit, while others are taken over as “hosts?” For example the mechanic, shouldn’t the worm take over him and attack using him? Maybe it drops the gun, because it doesn’t know how to use one, but then the mechanic should attack. After you kill him, perhaps the worm comes out and you proceed to the battle with it? It would make the story longer and more consistent. Also the last page, “this is the best possible ending...” I am not sure if this is unfinished or if this was intended to be like a note after the story, but it felt out of place. Just have an ending and let the reader play around to find out if it’s the “best” ending or not. I might have played again to check out other options!

keep it going!

Written well, but a bit more depth in endings would have made it feel more like a story and less like a see if you can survive the night kinda game. Basically you either live or die. Overall it was a creepy little story. The part where the parasite was trying to get into your characters mouth is definitely the moment which sticks out for me as the creepiest.