Priesthood

I have not read many stories on this site, so I cannot really compare this to anything else.
However, I was asked to read and comment, and so I shall.
I see that many others have rated this highly, with enthusiastic praise, and I am sorry, but I am unable to give such a glowing recommendation.
The writing is very sloppy, with many spelling mistakes and little care for grammar or sentence structure.
There seems to be an attempt on your part to use a large, complex vocabulary, however "vestigeal" is not a word, and if you meant "vestigial" then you have used it incorrectly.
I do not find the story particularly original or unique, but you do seem to have made an effort.
Are you a child? In that case, I would give you high marks for the attempt.
Overall, it is the writing of someone who has been told by others that they possess skill, but not someone who has consistently honed their craf

Whenever I am being too hard on myself, I like to read things like this.

I'm sure there's a story here somewhere. I'm sure, if you took away all the grammar mistakes, all the punctuation mistakes, all the capitilization mistakes, there's a story here worth reading.

Or not.

2/8

I am far too trusting

This was a good story Descriptive and engaging. It is let down slightly by poor SPG (spelling, punctuation and grammer). All in all a decent short story.

Boring, short, bad grammar and awful.

Eh, this one I was disappointed with. It seemed a bit of a stretch. Helpful hint, try copying and pasting your story into a Word document before submitting. Hope to see more from you, especially more random adventures! :D

so so

Okay.

It's pretty good, needs a little work though; the capitalization is a bit iffy, and also, it's "vows", not "vowels".
With a little practice, you could be great.