Psychopath society

Your story is too poor in quality to remain published and by your own admission, it is also incomplete. Please do not publish again until you have written something more substantial and of better quality.

I will agree with the person below me, there is a lot of room for improvement. However, I'll be a little bit more optimistic. This has the potential to be a great premise for a game if it is beefed up. Go back in time to stop the holocaust from even happening.

If you do decide to beef up this story, I'll be extremely excited to read your updates :)

No.

Okay, after a replay, I shot the Nazi in the gut, and what happens? I gurgle on my own blood and the medic shoots me in the head.
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What?

I don't think I was supposed to blow a grenade up in my face, I don't know what made this character do that, but okay...

This is lazily written. More importantly, a certain word that starts with F should not be in a storygame with a 3/8 maturity level. I give you a grade of an F-. (This is probably one of the worst I have seen over the past few weeks.)

Haha...

... No.

I'll be positive: this has a lot of room for improvement to the extent everything in it can be improved :)