Player Comments on The Palio

This was some pretty good writing. It was engaging and I didn't encounter any obvious errors with the grammar, so good work on some rather precise and cohesive writing. The choices were interesting, requiring some thought and strategy as to what would be the more favorable choice to pick for victory.

But something that I did notice were how similar the paths were overall,I would have liked to see all of my choices leading towards the race having a bigger impact on the day of the race. It seemed like only the last few choices determined the result of the race, so it really feels like there's an illusion of choice in this storygame and that's somewhat unfortunate, because the writing is quite enjoyable.

I enjoyed the use of pictures in this storygame, they fit well with both the setting and story. And although this isn't the longest story by any means, its definitely one that feels complete in its presentation.

My only suggestion would be to make the choices feel more impactful at the end of your story, because as far as the technical sense goes with writing and setting up a tone for the story, you indeed do those things well.

Overall, this was an enjoyable storygame in my opinion.

This was an enjoyable quick game! I like the variety of choices along with learning about something new. 6/8

This was honestly pretty fun. Very short but a fine five minute diversion.

This was a fun story

Yaay! I'm the bomb diggety! I won. Lotta fun! Ty, game auhor!

very enjoyable. it wasn't at all obvious what answer to pick. I had a lot of fun playing this

That was great. I won!!!

It was a lot of fun and I loved it. I think that maybe you could have added the player to be a little bit more involved in the actual race.

I loved how the way to win is to trust noone

I love how you can influence your placing by the choices you make! I got second!

Woah. Simple - normally would have hated it. But you, my friend, are one of the very few people who can use the quality of their content to render everything else moot. I salute you.

I am a horse lover and I liked it very much

An interesting game, I learned something new and I won :) Good writing style.

I was sad I lost but otherwise it was great!

I really enjoyed it. It offered a lot of meaningful choices and had a decent length. Really, I don't have many complaints.

Good game. Not really interested in horses but good game.

Strange, 44/8. Anyways I won

I pretty much agree with Briar_Rose - I thought it was interesting, clever, and fun to try and think before I leapt. Personally I would have liked more description in the storygame, but I do like how the pictures on every page help set the stage. I'm also glad that I now know what the Palio is...!

I love the Italian words.

Yey! I won! Really liked this game by the way. Thought it was pretty clever and did my best to think carefully about the choices and how they could backfire on me before I made them.

Seth says MEH!

Not bad, fun and engaging

Only one word for this-

'WOW'

I won. It was confusing though

by a nose :)

Wow. I really gotta admit this was pretty great. I gave an 8/8 for this one. Best one I've seen in weeks!

simple but pleasant

Very well written. No mistakes about this story. I will happily give you a 5/8 for this good story!

I thoroughly enjoyed this one! The story was concise and clear. More importantly, the choices made sense, the goal was laid out, and the language was largely free of ambiguity and errors.
Good job (and fun)!

MUaHHAHAHAHA LE SNAIL WON!!!!!!!!!!

bo approves

I felt like this went more along the lines of a game rather than an elaborate story (like a lot of the stories on here seem to be). But the story you did have was really interesting and I liked how you set it up. Great job:)

Pretty cool! An interesting premise for the game, and although a little short, it doesn't seem like it really needs to be any longer. Not boring at all.

Eh! I won! Balk, Balk!

Hurray! Victory for the snail!!!!

Wow, I never knew that this event existed.

It wasn't that good, maybe I just wasn't paying much attention. I drifted off after the first five or so pages.

I don't see why other people said this game was boring. I thought it was very well written and gave rational choice outcomes. I liked it just fine.

Boring.

Beautifully written. Well thought out with nice pictures. Great work!

Fantastic game! I see you have a knack for great spelling and grammar! Keep it up!

that was a boring story

THE WORST GAME EVER... IT PUT ME TO SLEEP IT WAS SOOOOOOOOOO BORINGG!

I don't like this game

TERRIBLE GAME!

good enough to poop on

Very good. One of the better short games on the site!

It's a pretty original concept for a CYOA game. There's a lot more to the world of horse racing than I imagined.

Great game! The snail wins the race!

This was fun and the situations seemed really realistic to what it must have been like (and probably is still like) around this race

great story and grammar. i did notice that certain links dont always work together though. one minute a horse is fast aproaching and the next it finishes in 6th. but still one of the best on the site.

It was relatively fun and tacticfull 7.10

interesting. never thought that horse racing could hold my attention. but you sure did. congrats, one of the better games on here.

Hmmm pretty fun game. Kindof easy on which link to choose, but entertaining! Good game.

I enjoyed the game - I was in Sienna this past fall - so I could really relate to it!

Fabulous Game, I tried all the different options! Highly Recommended!! Thanks for the great game!<br>march

!!!!<br>wait a second I have to play that again!!!<br>

I won!

really cool game, I ended up winning, I hope not everybody wins, I think my strategy was a good one. My people they love me.

Pheonomenal Game I really don't know how the games could get any better now! Very well thought out

Very cool game. I'm really impressed by the amount of time put into it, and the amount of options give to reach a win. Very nice. I recommend the game.