The Sojourner's Home

Aha, another Petros story 😊 My character seems a bit Naziish and it’s fun to be thrown in at the deep end where I’m a murderous slaver. It’s nice to see I don’t discriminate in my murderous ways between my staff and my cargo. It’s nice to get a bit of job appreciation from the Dragoness. I like to take the diplomatic approach when I go slave-hunting so we’ll roll with that. I’m all up for stabbing my employer in the back but obviously Mind Prime is just out to get me so let’s backtrack and go in guns blazing. Hm, that doesn’t work either.

This is an interesting one. There are very few good endings (I found one where I become Fist of the Dragoness) but on the whole being a member of an evil organization there aren’t really any good ways out of it. It’s an original story, if a bit nihilistic, and it could have been developed more to give some more positive endings where I could overthrow the Dragoness (the branches might have been clipped into endings to meet a competition deadline). A fun and enjoyable read overall though, I think 5/8.

Enjoyable!

This story is well written and I enjoyed the humorous approach that the main character has with his world. I thought the characters were pretty well developed and were fun to explore the world with.

Seemed a little short and many of the endings a little sudden (most likely due to hitting the contest deadline). But I enjoyed the writing and wish it was longer to allow for more time to experience this world.

Overall a great job. Thanks Petros.

I found it to be a fun, humorous piece with lively characters, funny quips, and diverse branching. Petros does a great job establishing a solid backstory and worldbuilding without infodumping.

There are signs of it being rushed for the contest (occasional grammatical errors, abrupt gruesome deaths, etc), but those are things that can be revised and improved.

Very enjoyable read overall. Plenty of room to expand upon. Nice job!

The choices you can make as a morally-bankrupt slaver are pretty hilarious sometimes. Initially, I thought it was off-putting how ruthless the protagonist could be, but I got used to it pretty quickly. The story branches and endings are well-varied and I like the wackiness of the planets.

It’s a bit short, but it’s a fun ride!

Great story! Definitely a strong contender for this year's contest!