Player Comments on A Mutt's Purpose

I mostly skimmed this story and it told me all I needed to know. It's a cliched dog that meets people and serves its purpose by being with humans?

It just seemed like a kid wrote this since the plot is one-dimensional with you either mating and raising a wolf pack or your true purpose according to this author by protecting the kids. Also, you die of insanity if you don't fulfill your purpose what kind of writing is that?

I mean honestly, if this story was longer and had more thought put into it I would care but this is just kind of boring to read. Also, the loops back to the beginning and the annoying links were unnecessary.

This story was coherent, but it was trash.

First off, was it really so hard to write some new pages or take away some of the options after they had been chosen already so that there weren't all these endless loops? For example, if the dog runs into the forest after being with the people, they have an option to go back to the road, which leads to the same exact situation with the people as before. That could have easily been fixed if the author had just taken a little extra time to write a new page where the dog decides to go back to the people instead of starting the whole interaction over again.

And that same choice is labelled, "I've played this game before!" Although it usually is not, fourth wall breaking can be pulled off and can be funny. This was not one of those situations. It was annoying and cringy and the first thing that really brought out my contempt for this story. In fact, just thinking about it wants me to go lower my rating. I'm going to do that after this is posted.


If you don't go with the humans, this becomes a wolf-imitation story. Sure, I was almost amused when the dog ate the nuts *hehe* and didn't like them, but the story was too far gone for moments like that to be of any use.


And the dog gives its puppy a "proper burial"? Since when do dogs give one another proper burials? Did it make sure to bury it on consecrated ground? What the hell is that?


Then there's a dreadful romance page that if you don't go along with you end up dying of insanity because you have no purpose. You just successfully raised several pups to adulthood. Why is guarding some human children a true purpose but not raising your own puppies?


And what's with the apology for gender-locking. Of all the things in this story worth apologizing for, that was not one of them.


Don't bother with this. The grammar could have been worse, but everything else could have been far, far better.

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Don't apologize, even ironically, for the gender of your protag. That's foolish.

Honestly, that was a cute story and had a nice concept. However, there were some problems.
One, it kept changing from "you" to "I". Try keeping one POV, either "you" or "I".
Two, it said I was a boy, then I was a girl? Make sure to check and know what the reader's gender will be.
Other than that, this was a pretty good short story.

Is it just me, or did my gender change a couple times throughout the reading of this story? First I was a she, then on the next page I was a he, then a she again. This story was short and sweet, I won't quibble with it too much because at least the author wrote something and I haven't even begun to contemplate writing my own story yet. But this story was just okay.

Rogseath does not approve, and neither do I.

This was a cute story. It was pretty short. I would like to see you add more detail and back story.

I loved this!especially the reference from warriors! Thank you for this amazing story! i just wish it was longer.

There was a lot to read and it overall the story was very short. So it was kind of a let down. I wanted this story that I was going to grow and do a lot with but instead I got this story that's about as long as a piece of grass.

SO SAD AND HAPPY AT THE SAME TIME! SAPPY! HAD!

This is very fun! I love dogs!

Firstly, you shouldn't have to apologise to your readers that your protagonist is female. They're female, big deal. It's your story.

The game itself went over way too quickly and I was able to enter the forest multiple times, thus experiencing the same conversation with the family infinitely until I eventually gave in and walked inside the house.

There also wasn't much going on. It was enjoyable enough, I guess, but I just chased after my dog family and they all ran away, so I just ended up with a human one. No real twists there.

So is it a story about just being a dog? I spent no more than 3 pages being a dog, not counting the temporary loop, so I didn't really get much out of it.

It was pretty good! There could have been more detail (like more of a storyline) but other than that it was decent and fun to play.

Not Bad. Although One Thing Is That Its WAY Too Easy To Know What To Pick To Have A Happy Life With Molly. But Its Still Good.

There Ismail a Ethan in my class he also rapes everyone I am FeMale.

A good story, it's fairly short I got the pack ending :D

This was pretty boring.

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it sucks dude

Ten is not seventy in dog years, and thus I must rate this story a 1/8 due to this inaccuracy.

It was fine. It could use with a bit more options though.

Just like a wc fanfic 1/8.

Short and choppy, with very limited options. Also not too thrilled about the "ultimate purposes" provided.

Awesome! Now I will try being owned!!!!!!!

It was okay, it just needs to be longer and have a lot more events and choices.
Also, if the den was the only one for miles around, why wouldn't another pack challenge you for it? Also shouldn't there have been a pack living in the nice, safe cave already, especially since it's easy to spot? Just a couple thoughts.

Your stories really have potential. All you need to do is make them longer and more interesting.

Ok game. I was confused by the switching of genders. At first I was male then female.

Great time passer, but kind of repetitive.

The part where you go into the forest and encounter the dogs is exactly like The Rise of Scourge. Is that where you got it from?

The story was interesting around the beginning, but it became a little boring after I lived with the people. I am guessing that I made different choices than most who played this game, and I ended up living with some people until I die. I got confused in a part of the story where it said I was male, and there were only a few options. The story did seem to have detail and correct grammar though.

The story is mostly random. First, I was chasing my mother through the forest, and then I was completely uninterested and would rather hunt or start a random clan? Why? I see a cave in the distance, and yet you tell me I only saw a mountain in the distance?

Well, at least it wasn't as bad as DarkScar's porn.

Hmm...well. You can only fulfill your purpose by allowing a male to mate with you? That seems a little sexist. Regardless, there are a lot of inconsistencies in the game that need to be worked out. As Sethaniel mentioned, there was some ambiguity as to the gender of the PC. I also have to agree that there is no reason why you couldn't have given the player the option of being male or female, unless you were just dying to drive in your idea that females exist only to produce offspring. On another note, I can't give this story any points for originality. There have been at least half a dozen "wolf / feral dog" sims on this site, and this one didn't really bring anything new or interesting to the table. Still, the story didn't appear to be littered with horrific grammar, and you managed to steer clear of the squickier aspects of canine reproduction. So, I'll give you a little credit and bestow upon you a rating of 4.

Although the description insists the player-character is female, Mom and the little girl refer to the PC as "him" (I suppose they could just be incorrect?) Also, I didn't encounter any explanation for why the story would be "ruined" if the PC wasn't female.
At one point, the story switches from second-person to first person.
Overall, it felt extremely reminiscent of a typical Warrior Cats fanfic, just with a dog instead.

The beggining was difficult to understand. It could definitly use more detail. I didn't understand why player's mother just suddenly leaves. I got bored quickly and just skipped to the end.

Inconsistent, poorly explained, odd... and I literally saw no reason for your statement "the story would be ruined if you were a male."

Actually IBV, if you visit the Warriors website (I did that in my spare time), you'll see the author wrote a series called Saviors, which is basically Warriors, but with dogs. The more you know! *Insert a rainbow here*

Not very long and not much of a plot line. Apparently warrior cats are now warrior dogs.

D'awwhhh. That's cute.