Buried

This was okay it wasn’t excellent but it wasn’t as bad as some of the trash you see on this website. The story line and the descriptive writing was really good. I liked the way you wrote and how you described everything. You obviously put a lot of effort into this and wrote a whole lot, I liked the “plot twist” but the hints where there. It was a good storyline and was great but just like everything it wasn’t perfect so here’s what was wrong with the game.

I liked how you used items and unlike most had custom sprites for them. But the one thing I did not like about the items was how many there where. I understand how there so many on purpose but at times it became overwhelming which item to use. Using a lot of items in your game is okay if you give the readers a little incentive where to and when to use them. A lot of times I had to randomly click items then go back till I used the wright one which was annoying, having that happen slightly is perfect but a lot of the time is pretty annoying.

One last thing I think is wrong with your story, which a lot of writers do so its not that bad. Is your story was a little to confidential, this one is really hard to balance out what is too coincidental and what isn’t and it varies for every type of story but there is a point where its annoying but you barely crossed the line. For the most part it wasn’t coincidental until we got to the end, where random things which all seemed to help the character out happened simultaneously. I understand you had to give the character a way to win somehow but still it was really pushing it.

But for the most part I think your story was really good the story line was good the writing was good, the only reason why I rated it so low because how annoyed I was with randomly selecting items, it might just be me, but it really is annoying. But overall good job.

I have not rated a story 7 in a long time. Since I am not a loose rater, 7 is very good and I have only ever rated one or two storygames 8.

The flaw in this game was that it was way too hard to beat and took forever. Otherwise, I'd have given it an 8. I found the good ending, but not the secret pink ending. There are also way too many methods of dying and lots of clues that mean nothing to readers, and can be understood only by the author.

It was one of the few games that could actually immerse me, giving the feeling that the author could actually write a book if they needed to. Items were used well, but some places were confusing and items could not be used when they should have been able to.

As stated above, a wonderful game. 7/8.

Good:
1. Creativity of plot- suspenseful thrillers are rare on CYS
2. Puzzles using items
3. Good balance between open freedom and restrictions
4. Pictures

Bad:
1. A few spelling errors

Ugly:
1. The link design needs to be redone. For example, even if I never got into the excavator, I would see the page where the excavator knocked down the fence after I got out. Also, many times there were situations where I shouldn't just see the exact same text after I did an action, since I just changed the environment, but I did

2. Character motivation a little underdeveloped

nice

Very good game it took me forever to get out of the box though lol if you were wondering it has something to do with the lighter

THIS WAS SO GOOD!!! Some of the puzzles are really difficult (it took me forever to get out of the box too lmao) but its super fun and suspenseful. I love how the photo of Mina is used. The good ending could use some work, it's kind of abrupt, but overall an amazing story. :)

Really dark. I love it!

Well I killed myself with water, and it wasn't a completely oblivious choice either. Got really uninterested and decided to test my luck to see how early I could kill myself, GG.

Great, but i got to the pink ending!!

I died? On my wedding day? Because of a PRANK?!? Weow