Dead space

Player Rating3.56/8

"#636 overall, #68 for 2014"
based on 172 ratings since 06/09/2014
played 1,789 times (finished 203)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length1/8

"Make sure not to blink"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

You are an explorer who has traveled to outer space. Your ship has all of a sudden stopped and you have been awoken by the computer before you have reached your destination. It is up to you space explorer to discover what has happen. Good luck!

Player Comments

This was pretty interesting, and there seems to be much promise with this storygame. Issues with grammar were present, but nothing too terrible. For a short story this storygame was able to keep me curious about where it may have been going with each page that I've read.

Still, this does feels like something that would have perhaps benefited with more in terms of story. Maybe another 500 words or so could have been added in delving more into the setting, and even helped in setting the tone more. I must however say that the pictures helped in providing some decent visual enjoyment, as they fit with the actual scenes in which they were presented and didn't feel forced one bit.

For what this was, this was rather decent. There's some things that are left to be desired in term presentation, but the effort to make something to be enjoyed for those that happen to find themselves reading this storygame is there. I feel that the writer's voice is conveyed well enough at the end of the day, and that is something that I feel is to be valued when all is said and done.

Good work, ervol1.
-- TharaApples on 2/15/2018 7:13:50 PM with a score of 0
Okay, this really did leave want for more. I finished this in about 5 minutes, and I'm not convinved it took you much longer than that to write. Seriously, if it's less than a thousand words and isn't either a short story (which I didn't get the feeling this is), or a poem (which I hope for your sake this wasn't an attempt at), then don't think about publishing until you've got at least another 5000 words under your belt.
However, this could be good! You've got pictures that actually did create atmosphere, even if it probably took you longer to find and upload them than write the story. I have to say I'm personally a sucker for a tale revolving around spaceships and all that stuff, but I was a little disappointing. Your writing was fairly good, though could do with some more compound sentences and explosive language to vamp it up (maybe that's just me having my own stylistic, convoluted taste though).
A deserved 4/8
-- AzBaz on 6/16/2017 5:24:28 PM with a score of 0
Please add more! I finished it in like 30 seconds! I just wanted to get the bad out of my way so on with the awards and happiness! I was actually working on a Dead Space game as well until I found this. I deleted my game and then read yours thinking that this site did not need another game like that. When I found that this was a small game I remade it and fixed my mistakes and even made it better so, add more or make a sequel. Thanks for helping me improve my story and keep working on these stories. I must go now, my people need me.
-- fullmetalfan890 on 11/4/2015 3:00:46 PM with a score of 0
I loved the style of this game, which is sleeker and less narrative than most. It meant that this one has a high rate of decisions, which makes for a fast-paced game.

I liked the vibe of exploring the spaceship and the decisions made sense.

The real downside is how short this game is, I would have loved to see more of the ship and understand what has happened. As a result everything that happens after the armory seems a bit rushed and tagged on haphazardly.

-- Northwind on 12/10/2020 5:57:52 AM with a score of 0
eh, it was ok. 4 out of 8, but look forward for the next one.
-- orangatan on 11/21/2020 11:33:26 PM with a score of 0
I love the story and it is pretty difficult, overall good game.
-- Brady on 8/5/2020 4:50:39 PM with a score of 0
I am sorry for saying so, but, I didn't understand a thing that had happened.
-- tonyflamingo on 3/15/2020 6:54:50 AM with a score of 0
I feel like I write this for every review I do, but this seriously needs to be longer. There's just no room for a good story.

The description and atmosphere setting was excellent and made me want to read a whole story about this. I really liked the way you built the environment around the player, and I'd love to see a full-length story from you. That is, of course, with some fixing of grammar and punctuation issues. They were definitely noticeable, but they didn't make the writing incomprehensible.

Overall, there's not much to say on this one except that you need to put more effort in and work to make a higher quality story. You have potential as a writer, you just need to work to fully achieve it.
-- Megumeme on 12/27/2019 12:04:14 AM with a score of 0
It's pretty short but offers promising continuation. Think of it as a short introduction to the possible main story.
-- ChuckShirley on 11/19/2018 7:12:42 AM with a score of 0
I enjoyed this, but it could be longer.
-- MusicalNerd7 on 11/13/2018 12:01:29 PM with a score of 0
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