"Too few ratings to be ranked"
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"march in the swamp"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.
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Everyday life. Eat.Sleep.Kill.Repeat. Can you survive?
on 6/5/2016 7:47:57 AM with a score of 0
This is something that totes discribes me tough but kind to save the girl
on 7/6/2015 8:17:26 PM with a score of 0
-- anoymus on 6/3/2015 9:59:36 PM with a score of 0
Well that was short.
There was a semblance of a plot but it ended too soon for anything to happen.......?
on 5/30/2015 7:11:09 AM with a score of 0
It was good! I liked it!
on 5/28/2015 1:47:46 PM with a score of 0
This is scrubby. You think Death Song is bad? Then read and rate your story. You put a space after commas. This is way too short as well, and cutting a terrible story like this into parts, is a bad idea. Don't, it won't work. What kind of a plot does this have. Oh, I know, none!
on 5/23/2015 9:46:39 AM with a score of 0
Well, if we're rating by your standards, and you believe that the EndMaster's storygame, 'Death Song'...
"Ugh. This sucks" - Fiercerose123's comment on Death Song
... Right back at ya. ^-^
Didn't know if you have high standards, but now... This is ten times worse than 'Death Song', which was a beautiful piece of writing.
on 5/23/2015 9:03:58 AM with a score of 0
on 5/22/2015 8:36:06 PM with a score of 0
Pretty boring, and needs more detail.
on 5/22/2015 4:13:23 PM with a score of 0
A simple thing you could do with the next story would be to space out the paragraphs. Right now you've got giant solid blocks of text for each page, which is tough to read.
on 5/22/2015 3:09:17 PM with a score of 0
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