Find the King

Alright then...

The first option I chose in this storygame made me restart, so there really is no point in that choice being there. I mean, it's on the first page. Hat's quite pointless since it just takes you back one single page.

There was a decent amount if links, but not really many choices at all. On just about every page there's the option to stand up, but for no real reason I feel dizzy and pass out. That's not the best way to write something.

The length was a bit dissapointing, but what made it even worse was the fact that there was only two sentences on each page. More detail would have been great.

For example, it says I was in a forest. What did this forest look like? Was it snowy? Rainy? Sunny? For all I know, this forest could have had chocolate trees.

I noticed about zero branching, and there were a ton of links that simply said "that was pointless" or "you pass out" and just take me backwards. If you're gonna out choices like that in the game, don't throw them on every second page.

Then there was some page were I had to find out which way was north. I chose "North" and then it said something like, "You found the king!" "Really?" "No, not really."
So... is there a reason I didn't find the king other then the author trolling me?

Every so often in this story you can choose a link, but then there's one sentence saying "Oh no you're so stupid you have to do this one!" Then forcing me to choose another one. Don't put "choices" like that. It's annoying.

This plot didn't make much sense to me. Waking up in a forest. Going on a quest to find a king. Deliver a potion. Save some girl. It's pretty much a cliche book with lolrandom humor every few pages.

Overall, 1/8. Try harder, please.

Where was the story in this again? You start out by not knowing anything and get killed for just putting on a watch. After a while of trying to look for a different ending, I forgot what the story was supposed to be and ended up just killing myself by putting the watch on again. I feel like there's no direction, and the sequence of events is completely unclear. There's no way to compare what's supposed to be happening to what's actually happening because I've seen no King, girl, or potion to speak of.

You were trying to be funny, and honestly it was at certain points, but you kind of failed at that overall. The weird speaking scenes, along with the fact that the narrator kept talking which made it confusing to read, and the overall story kind of held this game back.

"Find the king, get a potion, and rescue a girl." Where's the plot? I mean, it needs something more because I feel that this has been done before.

Finally, I died for stupid reasons at times. I put on a watch and I get a bullet in my head? Why? Who fired the gun in the first place?(Because you never explained that.)

Overall, you did have decent options to choose from and it was funny at times. This could have been a 6/8 game but the things I just stated really held this game back.

4/8

On a scale of 1 to Awesome, you're Super Great!

Ends super abruplty

Horrible game wth

I won within a minute
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Died from watch. I win.

An interesting story but a mish-mash of different things... they seem quite good things individually like the writing or the humour but I'd prefer these things together in something recognisable as a story. Pieces were good though.

I loved the humor (I love lost xD), it certainly made the game a lot better. The objective was linear and easy in my opinion.