a Horror by EndMaster

Commended by EndMaster on 7/28/2019 5:33:21 AM

Player Rating6.05/8

"#63 overall, #6 for 2007"
based on 616 ratings since 12/02/2007
played 24,177 times (finished 917)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length5/8

"Not going to lose any sleep"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

Carnivals aren't all fun and games.

Additional Notes:

While there is only one spot that contains extra histories for this story, it's basically the background information of all the major characters and factions. It's strongly recommended that these are read due to the fact that your character will be interacting with most of these folks in his attempts to successfully accomplish his task(s).

This story has a very factional feel to it, so choose your allegiances carefully to get one of the better endings.

Player Comments

This is probably the second time I have read Geek, and just as I remembered it, it is a great and hilarious story, although not my favorite of EndMaster’s works.

There is no re-joining of branches in the story, but there are a few different ways to get to certain paths. However, the reader does not have to re-read anything unless he wants to, and he can still reach all endings. The endings themselves are quite varied for all having the same set-up: It’s a moonlit night after a show, and shit goes down. The premature endings are often quite entertaining as well.
Some endings are definitely better for the Geek than others, and the first ending I got in this playthrough was probably the best one, but they are not marked as wins or losses, and all are equally worth reading.

There were enough run-on sentences in some places to make the story seem a bit more rambly than it would otherwise have been, but the story was never less than easily readable.

The characters were all pretty great, which is especially good given the sort of story this is. The fortune teller lady was definitely a favorite of mine, and her relationship with Randal was amusing.
It’s easy to miss at first, but the pronouns used for the Ringmaster change back and forth between male and female constantly. That must have been a pain in the ass to write, but the results were pretty funny once I noticed them.
It was also entertaining to re-read the story with the knowledge of the Ringmaster’s true nature and see all the signs of that throughout.
It’s pretty fun to play as the disgusting loser of the carnival too, not going to lie.

“Aw hell. Hey guys! Someone get me another Geek! This one’s dead.”
Is a good line for summarizing the general tone of the story, and it made me laugh.
While I wasn’t laughing non-stop, Geek is hilarious and still among the top comedies on this site, by far. Who knew a story about carnie factions would be so funny?
This line in particular was one of my favorites: “Look Geek, I ain’t gonna lie to ya, not many of us like Charley, and sure, he’s a fucking tyrant, but he gets things done, I dunno he’s kinda like that guy in Germany, except shorter.”
My favorite scene was probably when he exposes the pinheads while telling them all about his act. Seeing them gradually lose patience as he talked about disgusting things he had eaten was pretty hilarious.

Overall, Geek is a story that I would definitely recommend to you faggot who reads reviews before stories for some odd reason…Unless you are ten years old and have a love for clowns you would like to keep. Then maybe don’t.
-- Cricket on 6/21/2019 6:57:51 PM with a score of 0
I quite enjoyed this storygame, and it's among my favorites on the site. It has a good length for the idea behind it and it has certain qualities that create a unique and interesting tone set by the author. It is one of the reasons EndMaster is my favorite writer on the site, because of the way he writes and the effort, quality, and time he puts in. I deeply respect him as an author and recommend his stories be read for educational purposes.

Geek is perfectly paced, with different scenarios flowing into each other by the great skill the author has. The first page of the story hooks the reader in, captivating them with the way each situation is introduced. Everything is nicely placed.

A few bits of the story could have been improved, starting with how the story progresses. I think that more background could have been placed before hitting the climax. I don't agree with how the killing scene played out, and could have been worded differently.

The story is very thorough in the matters of descriptive writing, (as are all of EndMaster's works) so I don't have much to say here, besides that I love it. It's the perfect amount of detail for a story along these margins.

Each character is nicely introduced, and End is very masterful at developing them so that us as readers can relate to them on a more deeper basis. This is one of the reasons it makes him such an excellent writer, and I look forward to his next work.

I've only played through one of the two main paths, so I can't say much about the linearity of the story, but I can say that on the one I chose, more options could have been available. Throughout the story, I only noticed one error in spelling ("of" should have been "off") but it did nothing to affect the story overall. Excellent writing, EndMaster.

-- Nyctophilia on 2/24/2017 8:01:59 PM with a score of 0
Geek is a grim, gritty, fascinating delve into a thoroughly imagined world of carnival intrigue and conflict. I was absolutely captivated, and I loved reading about the wild variety of characters.
This is phenomenally structured and developed. In order to find fodder for constructive criticism, I had to dig pretty deep (nitpick). I hope it helps.
Some specific praise and criticism:
This story has a killer opening. I don’t think I have ever been so intrigued by the first three pages of any other Storygame.
The dry, staccato sentences about what a ‘terrible thing’ it is to be sober were funny and well-executed.
The vagueness surrounding the protagonist’s act was also a cool plot device, but I felt like it was never capitalized upon. Maybe a scene during the show that night where the gruesome act is described in more detail would add a lot to the story.
I often noticed sentences which were poorly structured, a flaw which could be fixed by reading them aloud to hear the rhythm, for example “I’ve done all I’ve can” and “more than they might normally would”.
The alternating pronouns was a very clever way to handle the mysterious ring-master.
Placing the action in the midst of the dialogue by putting it in parentheses is kind of lazy writing, for example, “Of course…(Sniff sniff) you really…” That is more at home in a script or screenplay than in this format.
The story didn’t do a lot of justice to the female characters. They were relegated to an abused girlfriend, a tattooed hooker, a crazy gypsy, and a bearded lady.
I would say my greatest complaint was that the intriguing setup was truly excellent, but the content did not deliver from there. The climax was exciting, but the tension was not well built-up beforehand. One moment the reader is running errands, and the next everybody is killing one another. More description of the scene and gradual building of the excitement would make the conclusion more satisfying for the reader.
All told, this story is really exceptional. I gave a 7/8.
-- dueconsideration on 3/29/2016 3:22:30 PM with a score of 0
This is a short choose your own adventure about turning a small community on it's ear from the very bottom rung. Maybe you climb up to be the second maybe you get tossed out or killed. It's all about the choices you make much like the name of this website implies. Give it a read.
-- DerPrussen on 5/24/2020 2:16:35 AM with a score of 0
Geek was a pretty fun game. I wouldn’t say it was my favorite out of the endmaster games, though it still is a EndMaster game, meaning that this is one of the best games on this site. I have always been a fan of the way endmaster does his little background pages, and while this game only has one, or three depends on how you count it, it is quite lengthy, and I would agree that it is necessary to enjoying this game. While I am giving advice you should take, and before I go into spoilers, I think this is a perfect time to address you people. I am putting the deplorable people who read reviews before playing the game center stage. If you are not bothered by mature content, THEN READ THIS GAME. Don’t read any other review, or anything just read it now. Now that all of them are gone, let's get into the main event.

First off, I liked the branching in this story, though some things put me off. As with any of endmaster’s stories, the branching is great. This one is mainly split up into three paths, the Ringmaster path, the Randal path, and the Charlie path. They are all good, and if I’m not mistaken they all contain 2 “epilogues” of sorts. These were a problem for me. With a story this short, having six endings that revolve around an event that changes with your choices up to this point, it makes it seem like there is less branching. Still an amazing game, though it made it feel more liner because of them all ending up on the same event with death scattered around in between.

Besides the branching there isn’t much else I can say I dislike about the story. I love the main character as he just feels great. He reminds me of the protag of TRASH in a lot of ways. I also hate Charlie, though I don’t think he is a bad character, just someone you are supposed to hate. I also like the RIngmaster. Their character interested me, and it was sort of a gut punch to never know their true gender.

In conclusion, this game is pretty good. I hold it in high regard, though not as much as some other games, so I can’t give it a perfect score. It is one of the best horror games on the site however, and I think that if anyone can stand mature content, then they should read this.

7 out of 8
-- MicroPen on 11/14/2019 9:15:00 PM with a score of 0
It's a testimony to EndMaster's skill that a concept that would otherwise be my last choice for a choose-your-story -- being a geek at a circus -- turned out to be very entertaining and engaging. I'm a fan, what can I say.
-- Mystima on 8/30/2019 3:32:02 AM with a score of 0
it was fun, confusing but fun
-- Curtis Bowerman on 8/29/2019 4:05:57 PM with a score of 0
just kinda blue since i didn't get to do any fighting. it might be based on my choices, for i do not really read the opportunities at the beginning, for i believe it ruins the story for me. but i must admit, you are quite an author! i wish you luck on your future pieces.
-- keylee on 12/23/2018 1:05:41 PM with a score of 0
Wow. What an inappropriate, awesome story! It was hard to get a good ending. I enjoyed and was repulsed by it!
-- Quorrah on 7/20/2018 5:58:37 PM with a score of 0
The fact that this is only rated a 5.84 is a travesty.
-- 3iguy on 6/9/2018 6:19:54 PM with a score of 0
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