Love & Dating
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
played times (finished )
"no possible way to lose"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
A story about what i would do for a real life girl
Eh, I'm not seeing anything that warrants calling you a "disgusting pervert". I don't know; maybe I missed a path. There are a few problems, though. "Your" is possessive; "you're" is a contraction. "Football" is one word. In dialogue, you need a comma between the tag line and the dialogue.
on 5/3/2015 6:45:19 PM with a score of 0
You need help.
on 5/3/2015 11:12:11 AM with a score of 0
Pointed in one way. Bad grammer. Otherwise pretty good
on 4/22/2015 9:56:12 PM with a score of 0
I like the way getting shot in the arm made nurses think I was brain damaged but possibly they read this story and assumed I wrote it. If there’s one thing worse than reading someone else’s fantasy it’s reading it without punctuation. Rather than writing any love stories I’d strongly recommend vocally expressing your admiration of Maranda to her rather than us. On the plus side this is cute in a sort of Forrest Gump meets Dumb and Dumber way.
on 2/1/2015 10:21:26 AM with a score of 0
Yeah, fuck this story. Weird ass pervert...
on 12/7/2014 7:12:26 PM with a score of 0
I can't even begin... what is wrong with you?
on 11/23/2014 6:19:45 PM with a score of 0
Wow, friend. You need to get yourself a lady. This seems like either a troll story or a call for help.
Should I be irritated or concerned? =D
on 10/10/2014 11:02:13 PM with a score of 0
It's bad. The spelling makes it difficult to enjoy the story. If you can't spell use a spell checker! Also learn how to use capital letters and other basics of the English language.
The plot isn't great - it lacks credibility. Gameplay is non existant as game is linear and if you pick an option the author couldn't be bothered to expand upon it just asks you to pick the other instead.
-- Jordi P on 10/3/2014 12:36:31 PM with a score of 0
I didn't know girls would kiss me after shooting someone, how did I find them? I followed the magical sand that was located in school and kept footprints from days before.
The plot was bad and the grammar wasn't any better.
on 7/26/2014 8:21:42 AM with a score of 0
The writing is sub-par, the premise is a bit creepy, the lack of effort is evident, and it was all around uninteresting to me.
on 4/20/2014 8:00:54 PM with a score of 0
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