The Gods are Angered

Well, this story definitely stands out as one that’s very different from all the rest. Instead of taking one story and running with it, it’s an episodic exploration of several different religious stories. Overall, it was fun if a little disjointed at times

The main thing that was a big plus to this story was the fact that it made itself fun. As it is more of an episodic kind of adventure, the reader isn’t invested in the characters enough for it to pull off being serious. The story does well in riding the line between tastefully silly and outright ridiculous while still telling the stories. I can certainly say that I know a little more about Sumerian mythology than I did before I read it.

SPOILERS AHEAD.

As Yummyfood hinted before I reviewed, using the same method to kill Goliath that David did in the Bible didn’t work. At first, this kind of annoyed me as well, because I was thinking of it as a kind of quiz to test my knowledge. As the stories went on though, a pattern emerged. It was not about repeating the methods of others, but of accomplishing the same task without the good graces of the gods. This theme probably wasn’t presented in a clear enough way in all if them, but I enjoyed the idea nonetheless.

The story game was quite unpolished though. There are several typos throughout. The most egregious I found would have to be calling the Philistines Philippines. While several Pacific islands fighting Israel is hilarious, it would probably have been better fixed.

There’s also the issue that most of the end descriptions are just the same thing. I get the idea, but even just having the “cloaked figure” offer some commentary on whatever specific stupid thing you just did would have made the story much more entertaining.

Another issue is whoever the narrator is. It’s not described anywhere I can find, but every once in a while, the protagonist comes home and the narrator directly interacts with them. It seems like that might be an important relationship to establish.

The last critique I have is the fact that most of the characters, but most notably the protagonist don’t get much characterization. I know that this story was likely rushed at least a little, so a little time might have fixed it, but some personality in the characters would help it out.

I did very much enjoy the “true ending,” and the idea that if I don’t write, people will die. My favorite ending by far wad the Bard of Death, and the Bard of Death or Death of Bard choice made me laugh aloud which is a Herculean task in and of itself.

I look forward to this author’s future work and development.

I really, really liked this game. It's fun and humorous, while still being in-depth and detailed.

Oh yeah, an aside, turns out Hades is also a synonym for the Greek Underworld, so I withdraw my previous comment on that!

Oh yeah, as an side, more people should read the story, so it can get properly rated!

Haha, the ending tho, you got me so excited what God it would be and left me hanging out there. Oh yeah, one little inaccuracy was perhaps what angry Athena says to you "Rot in Hades." Yeahhh, I think you meant "Rot in the Tartaros." Hades is the God of the Underworld, not a place.

I did like what you got going on there with the different myths that clash with the modern sensibilities of the protagonist. The funniest was I guess David and Goliath with the stone.

I think the weakest part of the story is that we spent so little time in each myth that I felt that I've seen a lot, but not a lot stuck with me or was very memorable. In short, okay at everything, master of none. This lack of caring about the individual myths was probably very evident in my performance with Athena's quiz, poor lady got very angry at me.

It's a fun little story. I like all of the failing upwards the protagonist can do to achieve the goal of a mission at times. It certainly keeps an entertaining pace throughout its beginning to the very last page. There's also some degree of wit and cunning the player will have to employ at times to proceed as well, or at times they can take an easy way out. But where is the fun in doing something like that in a story like this?

Overall, not a bad read by any means.

Great story with a super unique concept, combining many different religions into a single tale. Amazing especially for a first CYOS

Not bad! Pretty good for a first storygame.

For a gauntlet style game, I enjoyed that a lot of effort was put into each task/episode. Also, I liked the bodystealing concept for the game, where the MC is still the MC, but that they have to play other characters such as biblical David or Daedalus.

However, I really did not get a connection with the MC, so perhaps a little more development of the main character before they begin the tasks would have been good.

Overall, I enjoyed it.

It's ok. I am a but confused though. Minor spoiler but I kind of figured you would have to kill goliath like david did but it failed. Oh well.