the biggest fight.

Oh my favorite part was when I "Punced" the guy, and the part were "thei"discover you. And when
one of them comes "to wards" you

Yet another pointless waste of space to throw on the trash heap.

If you're not going to put effort in, dont bother writing.

Be more descriptive, stop giving readers pointless choices, get your spelling right.

Oh shit when I tried to "punc" him his "uzzi bullet" fuckin' killed me! But hey, I'd rather die then play this again.

I managed to kill them... yet I feel no sense of accomplishment. Also, I don't mean to sound rude but --- Is English not your first language? You misspelled 'Punch' more than once.

"You unhide yourself"?! Um, that's not even a word.
Seriously, I'm willing to accept that "uzzi" for "Uzi" is a legitimate spelling mistake, but "punc" for "punch" is just lazy typing.
You gave multiple choices on each of the pages I saw, so that's good. But there wasn't really any plot to the story, and you needed to proofread before publishing.

You know, this story was..was AMA-..
Oh wait, it was terrible. It'd be nice if you spent time on your game. This isn't some stupid thing you can blow off, this is YOURS and should be treated as such, proofread, edited, detailed, complex, it should be worthy to have your name on it and you should be proud. And this go for all new writers out there.
BE PROUD OF YOUR WORK, IT IS YOURS!

proof reading could go a long way

Epic fail. Do not forget to proof-read. Oh and be creative.