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Player Rating3.02/8

"#815 overall, #9 for 2009"
based on 112 ratings since 01/19/2009
played 849 times (finished 118)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

You are Charles Wilmington, improvished and blackmailed scientist. You must now go to Siberia and witness the horror of horrors...

Transformed from a short story I wrote.

Player Comments

The basic premise is full of potential, but as supportive as I want to be, I don't think this story is very good. Most of the writing is competent when you overlook the typos and improper grammar, though the story itself isn't engaging both as a choose your own adventure game and as a narrative. With some editing, fleshing out of characters, motivations, setting, and story, and impactful choices, I think this could be a great game! Best of luck.
-- GeneralAchilles on 5/28/2020 9:59:03 PM with a score of 0
I like all of the choice you have
-- Austinc on 1/9/2019 12:57:11 PM with a score of 0
This was rather confusing. I wish there were more options to choose from.
-- caitm on 10/26/2018 7:50:39 AM with a score of 0
In your description you said you had transformed a short story into this story game. And that is exactly what this looks like. There was one plot, with synthetic decision points that only had one right answer back to the one and only plot. The story game isn't the correct medium for that. The plot has to be flexible and interactive for this format. With meaningful decisions that shape the overall plot.
-- mistere on 10/19/2018 3:38:49 PM with a score of 0
i lost quickly...

-- OofwHy35 on 10/18/2018 12:33:39 PM with a score of 0
short I didn't really like it but that is just my opinion.
-- lilkitty on 10/10/2018 1:34:41 AM with a score of 0
It’s more like the preface to a story than actually a story. Also every “choice” isn’t really a choice. One option means death and the other continues the very short story.

I liked the idea but would have preferred the story continue. Perhaps havethe aliens abduct him. Give some kind of explanation for why this jerk is so mean. Build some story on the outline. It’s a good start but seems incomplete.
-- jbstory on 10/7/2018 7:43:40 PM with a score of 0
- I genuinely liked the beginning. Managed to catch my interest and created a fairly well fleshed out character.
- The idea behind the story is interesting

- Misspelling
- Confusing wording
- Poor grammar
- Incredibly linear, by far the most linear game I've played on this website

Summary: The idea behind the story was great, and you had a strong start, but it quickly fizzled out after a few pages. 2/8
-- Master_of_All4 on 9/29/2018 3:29:27 AM with a score of 0
make it more scary and intense also if you can add sound effects.
-- billy on 9/25/2018 5:56:20 AM with a score of 0
So, it's an interesting concept, but it felt a bit short. I had a lot of questions that could've been answered had it just been longer. And to reiterate what everyone else is saying, you need to work on your grammar. A few more choices, some more detail, and a bit more backstory would really make this great.
-- jster02 on 9/22/2018 12:22:14 PM with a score of 0
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