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Hi. I'm currently writing a sci-fi storygame, and I just wanted a place where I could toss around some ideas and see how you guys like them. Maybe we might even collaborate to make a really awesome one, too.

Show the details of the story first. Then the people can consider.

Can you provide more info on the sci-fi storygame? :)

You are a former Navy Seal, who has a wife named Nora and a ten year-old daughter named Lily. It is the year 2020, and you have received an invitation to join the Starr Squad, a secret organization that fights crime for the shadows. There is a LOT of story line for it, because I've had this idea in my head for YEARS before I found this site. I can give you a list of some gadgets I've already come up with, if you would like.

Show me the toys.

I want to see the list of gadgets o-o

Bionic Exo-Suit

• ?Made of durable Plexi steel ( a strong metal that bends and moves easily )
• resistant to most melee damage (may compromise if hit with more than 1 billion Newtons of force )
• resistant to bullets and most armor-piercing rounds ( may compromise if hit enough times in a single area )
• provides medium protection from lasers
• visor allows for complete visibility and night vision
• can transform into small paperweight (still in design process, cannot tell if person is still inside during transformation)
• increased strength, speed and jumping distance
• life support systems (ex. air filter for space missions )
• extra ammunition storage
• jetpack 
• voice controlled ( user's voice is scanned into the suit to prevent anyone from using it other than the intended agent )

Fission Blaster

• vaporizes target on contact, using a simplified particle accelerator to split apart the atoms of nuclei
• if fired at Bionic Exo-Suit,  suit will vaporize but protect host
• ( declared unstable and unfit for field use until further testing )

Plasma Grenade

• emits a controlled explosion when detonated
• renders all electronic devices in a ten mile radius usless
• ( declared unstable and unfit for field use until further testing )

Handheld Teleporter?

• can teleport user anywhere on the planet Earth
• requires EXACT coordinates of destination ( otherwise you may find your self encased in a brick wall )
• ( declared unstable and unfit for field use until further testing )

Mine Runner Shoes

• a modification for the Bionic Exo-Suit
• ?when activated, it deploys mines wherever the user steps
• activated by touch
• can be deployed onto any surface
• only become active after shoe has left the ground, so that it does not explode while the user is standing
• can be deployed onto a human

I wonder how the mines are stored.

That's a good question actually.....

If you can, try to make them sensible.

Some equipment might be impractical IRL, but you can make them work practically in fictions. But again, try to make everything seems sensible and logical.

Maybe... some sort of very small mines or something?

They're microscopic!

Extremely small mines that pack a big punch, huh? Okay then. But how do you deploy them?

Touching what button or something?

There is a sensor on the bottom of the foot that deploys a mine when it comes in contact with something. The mines can only be deployed once the shoe is voice activated. This does mean that if you are stupid and touch the bottom of your shoe while it's activated, you're going to get a mine implanted in your hand.

Voice activated? Hmm... seems a bit risky. A remote control on your arm would probably be a better choice.

Yeah! let me write that down...

It's a bad idea for deploying mines using voice command. Everyone will know your actions. And it's kinda awkward too. Best to keep it silent and remote controlled.

What about the weapons? :D

A magnetic holster on the back of the suit that you can stick your firearms to. It also has a cloaking device so that no one knows you have a weapon until you pull it out of thin air like a BOSS. Enemies can't aim very well when you pull a machine gun out of nowhere and catch them off gaurd.

100% invisible weapons on your back? Cool. But you better not to get anyone touch your back or sensored by security details.

Combined with augmented capabilities, carrying a machine gun should be easier than an average human can do.

However, it would be better if you have yourself a modular, multi-purpose combat primary weapon! Something that can easily be field stripped, and can be modified to fit the job. From assault rifle, automatic shotgun, to sniper rifle.

how about a rifle with an extendable blade? like a bayonnet

Hmm... you better stick with a separate melee weapon. But you can attach a blade to your weapon if it's necessary.

An extendable blade as a melee weapon. And your primary weapon is a modular rifle that can be modified extensively from an assault rifle to sniper rifle.

Sidearm? A pistol that can fire both lethal and non-lethal shots.

Umbrella fitted with magnetic shields and hidden shotgun is good too. Just like the one used by Kingdman agents.

Maybe a magnetic holster on the thigh for a shock pistol?

Okay.

So, it seems a billion pounds of force is like an insane amount, and a lot of this stuff just seems insane and in no way possible. A suit that can survive insane amounts of damage, has life support systems, a jet pack and a shit ton more, yet can collapse into a paperweight? That is just nonsense, and hugely breaks the suspension of belief.

The Plasma grenade's EMP radius also seems far too big, and the mine runner shoes seem like something a retro video game character would have. This stuff basically dances along the path of complete and utter nonsense.

To Fizz: I agree with Steve. I feel like your stuff is more worthwhile in the 100 years in the future or something. Best to stick with Kingsman agents stuff, Tom Cruise, or James Bond.

Personally, I'd think those gadgets would be more believable in a story set a bit further into the future than 2020...

Dude a billion newtons of force is fucking nuts. 

Yeah, maybe about 100,000 is more reasonable....

If you don't speak science, just screw all the scientific words and mention how the exosuit is very durable, but still doesn't make you invincible.

Maganade: Run out of bullets? The empty magazine can explode. Extra points if the Drum Magazine doubles as a mine.

you guys are awesome!

I think that the gadget ideas sound as if they are real and scientific as real gadgets.  I believe you should add a bit more science behind them to really show the reader that they were created by high technology. Make them believe that the gadget is helpful and you should also say what weaknesses and strengths of the gadgets. Maybe you should also share to the reader when and where the gadget works best. But other than that, I sounds really cool.

^ what this person said.

I'll take that! That's awesome!

A wrist gun might be a good idea. You can fire mini mines, electric darts, grenades, etc.

totally

A retractable metal "claw"-like arm that detaches from the Exo suit's back. It portrays a scan of light over the personnel, rendering them completely invisible to human eyes. The light that surrounds the person is extremely hot, so it makes an extra danger for counter melee combat to the stealth unit.

I like Mason's idea. Maybe it can make you look like a regular person or make you completely invisible.

Yeah. But I think you should make your guy to be more of Tom Cruise, Sam Fisher, or Kingsman agent, not Master Chief or CoD heroes. What you are imagining is just way too off the bat and too good for the current era.

I haven't seen any of those movies.

Fine then. James Bond.

Haven't seen that either. But I do have an explanation for all the tech.

Right now your character is brokenly overpowered. There's no reason for him to be scared when he can withstand the force one a claymore mine detonated right next to him.

However I love spy movies so I am willing to help.

Hybrid Kevlar Suit, gotta be covert. Wear a light weight stylish suit and jacket that can stop low power bullets.

Hidden non-metal camera, maybe in your eye? Non metal as to not set off metal detectors.

A standard accessory that works as a weapon. Maybe a watch that acts as a tazer?

High power laser pointer. Something that can cut through a chain link fence from a short distance.

Silenced pistol. James Bond was pretty sexy with one. 

Either way, your story takes place in four years, and most of your technology is more advanced than halo. I recommend toning it down.

You guys have been extremely helpful! I will take all of this into account when I write my story. I hope you enjoy it when it is published!