A Day in the Life of a Flocktown Student

Player Rating3.61/8

"#371 overall, #36 for 2015"
based on 137 ratings since 10/30/2015
played 1,453 times (finished 156)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

A typical day of a Flocktown Elementary Student... what an adventure!!

Remember to T.H.I.N.K!!!

Have fun!

Player Comments

Well the beginning was nice, and you wisely used key literary devices that improve the readers interest. A bit more detail would have been nice though. For example, the whole breakfast situation on the first page. What is the character's favorite food, and what was given to them instead? Things like this are small but add up to make a fulfilling story.

The choices seem a little random, and have little effect on the story whatsoever. If these choices (like eating) changed things later on, that would be more engaging for the reader.

You're writing ability is slightly above the norm and is shown, so just work on certain aspects that can improve it and make it much stronger overall. The writing was grammatically sound from what I could see, and I'm just going to add this as a little side note: messing with fonts slightly annoys some members. Best to just leave it alone.
-- Nyctophilia on 8/30/2017 6:17:46 PM
Not bad :)

This is pretty well-written with a decent and relatable message being told in this storygame. I felt that the premise was rather simple, but in a good way. While this felt quite linear in terms of meaningful branching, it didn't hinder my enjoyment too much.

The only fault here is that there are slight issues with grammar here and there, but nothing too bad that ruined the actual narrative for me. The situations that were presented were realistic enough and the "right" choices to be made are simple and easy enough to choose.

All in all, I think this is a story that does an adequate enough job as a learning tool of sorts. This had a rather decent message behind it and it tells it well.
-- TharaApples on 5/14/2017 2:40:49 PM
I was mean to everyone and got to got to an amusment park! Win win!
Jk.
-- Ravendash on 10/19/2017 10:42:44 AM
I really did enjoy this for a short and sweet story! I wasn't sure what to expect, but this was definitely better than I was expecting! Although grammar was acceptable, your delivery became repetitive with the constant 'and then's' you inserted. Other than that, I consider this to be nicely done!
-- Comic on 8/29/2017 12:53:53 AM
Is this a school project on respecting other people in school?

It made me laugh, actually. Especially when the game told me that my teacher would be notifying my parents about my grisly crime of picking up another kid's crisps.
-- Saika on 4/13/2017 11:42:19 AM
Add a different ending for being mean and I'll rate it up a point. As it is, its too linear to be enjoyable.
-- The Man on 4/7/2017 10:04:21 PM
I liked your story. A bit short. Good for teaching kindness. A couple choices were a bit limited but otherwise great.
-- Natalie Rose on 1/23/2017 6:59:20 PM
Great and honest game!
-- Moon on 12/27/2016 7:35:18 PM
Too short. Pleasant enough.
-- Quorrah on 12/25/2016 4:21:45 PM
Hey! :-). Good story! Due to the options I picked, my character had a great day! Everyone loved him. :-) :-). Personally, I found the actual game relaxing. Great work. :-).
-- Rahila on 12/21/2016 9:38:40 AM
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