Player Comments on Vocab 1

This is a cute little interesting work. I can see how the vocabulary words are worked into the story, and their purpose is quite obviously clear. I also like how the words are used in sentences and then the reader is the one who has to attempt to determine their meaning by selecting an option. And yes, the pictures do add a little to the story. I guess since this is a quiz in edutainment that it makes sense to have each wrong answer immediately end the “story.”

I do wish there were a few other answers to select from in each case. It would have been nice to have other answers that were close to the right answer to really see if the reader knew the vocabulary words. The way it is currently written, it seems very easy to select the correct answer because in many cases the other options don’t make a lot of sense. I also like that when you do select a wrong answer, the story tells you what you did wrong.

It was quite short, but it certainly appears to have served its purpose. It is a nice little vocabulary tester. Maybe we should do one of these for grammar and require all potential authors pass the quiz to be able to write on this site…

Hmm, this wasn't bad at all.

I liked that this quiz was given a narrative in pursuing a thief, it certainly made this much more exciting and immersive in that aspect instead of simply throwing out questions to be answered. So as something that's both educating and intriguing, this storygame did well enough in that aspect.

Though I'm not exactly sure as to which audience this is targeting, because I found this to be quite simple and the words themselves were words that weren't difficult, even less so with the hints that is given to the reader. I think that this storygame is probably a decent challenge for children, but this does end rather quickly.

I feel that this story would've benefited from having more choices in general, as the length for this storygame is rather short. But I do like the effort that was placed into making this a more interactive experience from the usual quiz, so bravo on that front.

A neat little story. Nice writing and use of pictures. As interactive fiction I feel this should be more fleshed out so that there are multiple branches including their own plotline instead of one choice that leads to a Try Again" link and the other continuing the story until it ends.

This was a pretty cute and fun game.

This is bad on so many levels,

Its short, easy, not intertaining, grammar mistakes and paragraphs are not spaced properly.

This game is so fun and we can learn a lot of vocabulary!

It's alright, I suppose. Unique way to create a story, but It was too short to be interesting.

It's a cute game, ouldn't help but smile at it even though I'm not the intended audience, congrats, you made my day.

The implementation of the vocabulary words as part of the story narrative was clever; I really liked it. I did spot some grammar mistakes throughout, which was unfortunate for a story of such a short length. Definitely has potential, but should be thoroughly proofread and perhaps made a bit longer.

I learned some new words today! ^_^

Seriously though, if the intention was to help improve some younger readers vocabulary, then this was a pretty cute way of doing it. Definitely some room for improvement though. There were quite a few grammar mistakes. Sentences that didn’t start with a capital letter, for example. I’m afraid that the image on the “Try to find another clue” page isn’t working, and while most of the game made sense, the ending just… Didn’t. What was the important clue that the other officer found? How did it solve the case? It just seems like you got bored by the end of the game, and instead of explaining what happened, you just put, “Yey! You win… Somehow.”

That said though, based on the play-length, the game wasn’t as terrible as I expected it to be. At least you put some effort into it.

Excellent hints and clues. I like it! Always love me some detective.

this game was short but a lot of fun! I think more could be added as the story goes along in the future. This first part had a lot of good aspects to it. I enjoyed playing this, and I can't wait to see what comes next.

Too short, but the potential is there. This could have been an interesting game if more thought out.

It was okay. Using rare/longer/misused words might make the story even more interesting. Maybe longer, too. :). Cute little story.

This was nice. You have turned something that would've been totally boring into something fun!

Yuiswachelsa Approves.

This isn't second grade.

Very short

Well, that was dumb.

It was very easy. Good game for testing vocabulary.

Good job even though it was vocab

Ok vocab test. I would have preferred it to be longer and with more difficult words

it is boring

That was really boring, but it was vocab, so I'll roll with it.

Good for what it was, I guess.

It was very simple and easy. I suppose it did the job but I can't exactly accurately state that.
On the "Try to find another clue" page, the picture does not work.

It's okay.

I genuinely had fun with this! Love the amount of work plugged into it.

Interesting ;) nice to have grammar and te right Vocab as a pivotal part if the story :)

This reminds me of those infuriating tests that every job seems to want you to take when you apply now. But not bad.

IT WAS OK NEEDS A LITTLE WORK THOUGH

it was okay. pretty easy, but it was still fun because of the crime scene

It was relatively simple for me but not bad.

I actually thought it was pretty cool but probably meant for a younger age group since I knew what all the words meant. Next vocab game you should throw in the word "Antidisestablishmentarianism." See how many people know what that means :p

I liked how you made it such that we had to know the meaning of a word to move on with the game. could be longer though.

Thanks for your comments but this is just a classroom tool i am trying out, it is not meant to be a "real" game.

That was non-bad. A fairly simple tool for teaching kids a set of vocabulary words. (Although I am SORELY DISAPPOINTED that getting a single bad answer sends you back to the beginning of the game.) You know what would make this <i>somehow kind of cool?</i> Incorporating a full vocabulary list and making a game to teach something like 100 words. Though I'm not quite sure how something like that would pan out, it could still be neat. Just sayin'.

nice! 5/8

I liked it alot. It's interesting and educational. It wouldn't be a bad game for kids to play to help them with their vocab(kinda stating the obvious lol). I hope you make more of them :)

Not bad. The backstory is more compelling than a lot of the other Edutainment stories and well written.

Not a bad story. This site could use more Edutainment stories. Obviously a teaching tool though.

As far as stories go it was not too bad. The effort put into it though was a C+ at best. If this is supposed to be more of a learning tool you could've done a better job. This website is CHOOSE you own story. Yet you didn't give the reader a choice you dragged him or her though this whether they liked it or not. I would suggest shaping this into a Quiz game. If they get it right they get 1 point and all the points are added at the end. Give people INCENTIVE to win, instead of shoving vocabulary down their throats.