DireRyse, The Wordsmith
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You have dedicated years of your life working to prove the existence of a hidden pharaoh - someone who has pulled the strings of Ancient Egypt from the shadows, Kannok. Will you delve into the tomb and be successful, or will this just be another piece of history lost to time?
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This is my submissions for End Master’s Prompt Contest 3. Any and all feedback is welcomed and appreciated.
The gods of the realm fall silent as the Lahrian Kingdom spreads the following of The True God across the land. The Inquisitor's army has been sieging the city of Aurella for three weeks now. Your army grows restless at it seeks to purge the heretics inside it's gates. Will you destroy the city in the name of your god through slaughter, or will you find another way?
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I MAKED THIS IS. IS IT TERRIBLE? on 10/29/2024 11:09:19 PMOne should be Ogre
I MAKED THIS IS. IS IT TERRIBLE? on 10/27/2024 9:21:03 PM
No problem!
I MAKED THIS IS. IS IT TERRIBLE? on 10/27/2024 9:08:05 PM
Is it suppose to just be a conversation? I think it would be much stronger if you characterized them. What are they doing at this very moment. These non-verbal movements can carry weight and change an entire scene. My default is they are just standing in a room talking to each other without moving. The dialogue itself is fine, pretty dramatic type of love interpretation imo. They stand there staring at each other and just speak the words - probably not your intention but taking the time to set the scene will greatly improve this.
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Non-verbal movements/ information - these can even help with the tone in which they talk. Are they standing straight up, is #1 confident in how he says "I think I love you" or are his shoulders slouched, staring at the ground - almost afraid to say it
The Comma Likes Ogre on 10/18/2024 4:30:43 PM
That is a solid statement. You got my vote.
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My vote goes to B.
Am I racist? on 10/10/2024 10:30:32 PM
waha
Am I racist? on 10/9/2024 10:48:19 PM
It's tough to NOT like Ogre.
another freaking newbie (howdy!) on 10/7/2024 10:49:58 PM
Besides EndMaster's stories, my top 3 are:
Agent of Order by Mizal
The Book of Vanishing Tales by Camelon
The Shameful Dead by Fluxion
The longest game you ever play on 10/4/2024 10:51:27 PM
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Do not post AI generated text. on 10/4/2024 10:45:25 PM
What about MLMs?