You have dedicated years of your life working to prove the existence of a hidden pharaoh - someone who has pulled the strings of Ancient Egypt from the shadows, Kannok. Will you delve into the tomb and be successful, or will this just be another piece of history lost to time?

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This is my submissions for End Master’s Prompt Contest 3. Any and all feedback is welcomed and appreciated.

The gods of the realm fall silent as the Lahrian Kingdom spreads the following of The True God across the land. The Inquisitor's army has been sieging the city of Aurella for three weeks now. Your army grows restless at it seeks to purge the heretics inside it's gates. Will you destroy the city in the name of your god through slaughter, or will you find another way? 

Backreading is for fags

I like Ogre better

Avery is the author of Price of Freedom

Damn you speak ASL? Thats wild.

Y'all should go play the original Price of Freedom. If I recall, you could pass all skills tests and save everyone. Not sure if its still possible with the updated one, since there are plenty new skills for that.

I only speak American because its the speech of freedom. I don't take kindly to these other communist dictator languages. I also don't  know how to count because I'm ALWAYS #1.

I'll let that marinate in your mind for a bit.

100% Story A.

Besides all of Gryphon's points, Story B literally reads as a intro to something - along with random throw away characters. Yes, you got the basics down - the who, what, when, where, and why - but there is no passion in it. There's no heart in the writing. Its honestly something I feel like I would read as Sparknotes for a novel or even a wikipedia summary - rather then a short story.

I went to a vocational school for high school and did Culinary Arts. We had a full blown restaurant, bakery, etc. I would probably give myself a 6 or 7/8. I'm no chef, but probably better than the average person.

One should be Ogre

No problem!