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How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago

All of the stories on CYS are so cool. I want to make a story like those but I never have an idea for a story. And plus, I fear that if I ever come up with a good idea, I'm just going to mess it up or never have the motivation to finish it.

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago

The nice thing about the writing is if you think it's lousy, you just rewrite it.  As you read stories, keep track of the things that you like, then explore what it was you liked about it. Was it the song-like cadence of the writing, was it the depth of character that made it feel like a flesh and blood person, or the sudden upheaval of your expectations as a twist is revealed?  Work these elements into your own writing, whatever they may be. 

As far as the original question, it might be a good idea to start with an event. Maybe it's as simple as a woman throws a drink in a man's face.  Trace it back, maybe he made an inappropriate comment. Why? What was his goal? Or maybe they were intimate and she caught him with another woman. If so, why was this the case? An affair or maybe he is actually planning a surprise for his love and the other woman it's actually his cousin. Trace it back to the beginning if your story, but then turn around to build the conclusion. 

This event-based construction might be useful until you get the hang of things and start to build larger plots.

Either way, the best thing is to just start the writing and work it until you're happy. If you're not happy, then you're just not done, yet. You can't let a fear of inadequacy keep you from trying.

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago
Commended by mizal on 8/20/2020 5:30:35 PM

I probably started and didn't finish about a dozen different things when I was your age. It took me quite some time to get to a place where I could work on something consistently for a long time, and even then, it took me forever to actually get anything done. I guarantee I'm not the only one either, which is why a lot of people will tell you to start out with short stories at first and work your way up to the longer stuff. I agree with this to a point, but I also think it's different for everyone. In my case, I really liked the idea of getting invested in one or two big projects rather than putting out a lot of smaller works, so while I did put a few short stories out there, I never wrote very many of them. That said, I would still recommend finishing two or three before you try anything huge if you don't already have some experience with that. It'll give you a small taste of the writing process before you dive headlong into it.

The other nice thing about writing short stories is that you don't have to find "the perfect idea" for each one of them. After all, you'll probably be finished with each one within two weeks tops, so if you don't like the idea you're currently working on, you won't have to suffer for too long. This will make it easier to come up with ideas too. You've probably do have a few ideas in your head, but maybe you just don't see them as "good" ideas. But if you ask me, every idea can be a good idea if executed well enough. (Well, almost every idea. There are some that should never have seen the light of day, but they are few and far between). That's where short stories come in. They'll let you try out some of those "bad" ideas until you find a "good" one. 

Now, if you really are hurting for ideas, good or bad, there's a simple trick I like to play with sometimes. I've never actually used any of the ideas I've gotten from it, but they would certainly work for a story. First, go find something interesting. You can do this by looking around your room, taking a walk, or even using Google. For example, I've got a pocket watch, some shiny rocks, and a quarter ring sitting on my desk. Then, you take the one that interests you the most and look at it for awhile. Come up with a few imaginary histories for the item. For example, my pocket watch could have been created by a wizard in order to seal an evil monster inside. That gives me a few possible ideas already. I could tell the story of how the watch was made, or maybe stay in the present and write about what would happen if it's new owner accidentally dropped it and cracked it, releasing the evil inside. Alternately, the ring could've been the property of a poor farmer, who made it himself so that he could propose to his girlfriend, or the rocks could be the currency of an ancient race of dwarves. See how I've taken simple objects and used them to create interesting ideas? Each one of these could easily spawn multiple short stories. Ideas are everywhere, it's just a matter of knowing where to look for them.

I'm almost done here, but let me give you a few last words of advice. Firstly, when writing a short story, keep the idea small. Don't write about a full scale alien invasion. Instead, take one interesting event from the alien invasion and write about that. It could be as simple as telling the story of a little girl who was walking home from school on the day of the invasion and how she managed to get home safely and be reunited with her family. There's no need to tell what happens after she gets home. You can leave the ending ambiguous if you have too. This is to avoid a situation where you start out writing a short story and have it develop into a novel length project by accident. Secondly, when you do decide to start a bigger project, make sure it's an idea you really like. Ask yourself if you'd be willing to spend over a year working on it, and if the answer is no, you may have picked the wrong idea. When you do get started, plan it out and develop it first. Create character backstories and do world building before you even start writing. You don't have to go overboard with it, just make sure you have a general idea of where the plot is going before you start. I've found not knowing what to write next is one of the biggest motivation killers out there. If you find yourself in that situation, don't panic. Just stop writing for a minute and take some time to figure out what happens next.

Anyways, I hope that helps. I know I pretty much had this exact same problem when I first started out too, so it's nothing to be ashamed of. You'll get there eventually if you keep at it long enough.

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago
That's very good advice. Let me add that the point of writing short stories first is to get better faster. In particular, I recommend writing 500 word stories. They are very very short, but if well done can still be a lot of fun. It is easier to get feedback on them, because your readers won't have to read too much, but most importantly in such a short format every word has to be in the right place, no wasted ink. That is just the practice you need to make your big projects really shine.

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago

Now that'd be a real challenge.  I've never really been able to write anything worthwhile in under a thousand words or so.

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago

Here is an example: Link

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago
Just do some fun little thing, take the criticism, and continue keeping at little projects, until you feel comfortable enough to try something bigger.

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago
Commended by mizal on 8/20/2020 5:29:34 PM

So here is the thought process from scratch. I will just write down everything while I build a story. (I hope this will be a worthwhile read, comments appreciated, sorry for the long post).

Basically the process has 4 steps:

  • Ideation - Getting an Intital Idea
  • Design - Making your idea work
  • Writing - Putting things in the computer
  • Revision - Ironing out any problems

Sometimes these three steps cannot be separated clearly but it never hurts to think about them separately. The reality will always be more messy, but we can try to keep the process clean until that happens.

Ideation

Usually stories start with a central idea: The twist, the wow moment. For me this inspiration can come from many things. For sci-fi stories it is often that I think about technology and how it would change the world, if this yields some surprising implications that's the root of a good sci-fi story. In other cases it is just a certain scene that I want to make happen, say a sailing ship ramming a sea monster. In other cases the inspiration comes from logical questions. For example can you have a very tight third person narration (i.e. where you only see and hear what the character sees) but the reader will figure something out that the character doesn't notice. This one led to one of the short-stories that I posted.

In any case your central idea must be good. Otherwise there is no hope.

Design

Now when the central idea is done many people just start writing somehow and 'let it flow'. Indeed writing flow will add things that you would not have come up with otherwise. So flow is good but usually you can get better results if you carefully design of your story first.

The task is pretty daunting: You have a beautiful vision in your mind and you want to create an equally beautiful vision in the mind of the reader. The problem is, the only way to communicate with the reader is lighting up pixels on the computer screen, which is a fairly indirect way to manipulate another brain. Fortunately, you get some help. From Culture! In our culture there are certain conventions that help your readers follow the flow of your thoughts. In part, this help comes in the form of cliches. If I just told you that there is this old pirate captain (who will ram the sea monster, but I am not telling you that yet) you have already a picture of him, although I only mentioned three things about him (pirate, captain, old).

So cliche is some help, but I mentioned it only to set up the thing I actually want to write about: narrative arc. Our culture has a certain image of what a pirate should look like. It also has a certain expectation of how narrative structure develops. If you know and meet this expectation, the reader will be right by your side and clinging to the edge of their seat while they read the story.

SPOILER ALERT: If you know about narrative structure then watching movies will be a lot less fun. Most Hollywood movies follow a very common narrative structure and if you recognize it you can often guess the plot after watching 5 minutes.

So let's discover this structure together. The starting point is knowing your protagonist. Ultimately people are interested in people, and particularly in the reasons why people change their ways. The protagonist is the character in the story that undergoes the most significant change. It is normally the character players root for. Knowing who your protagonist is, is important. (If you are trying to hook a literary agent to sell your novel, the first thing the prospective agent will likely ask you who the protagonist is.)

In a story game it is easy to assume that the protagonist is the POV character, but that does not necessarily need to be the case. It's actually easier if we chose somebody else to be the protagonist, because we have more control over their choices. In my example the protagonist will be the pirate captain. All his life he has made pretty selfish choices, but in our climactic scene (the wow moment) he will sacrifice his ship and perhaps his life to slay the monster and save the POV character.

Where are we now? We know what our climactic scene will be. We know the POV character and the protagonist, the pirate captain; I will call him Black William from now on. So so far what we know is that we will get in trouble with the sea monster, then Black william will save us by ramming it. So basically:

  • Low point - Things were bad already now there is also a sea monster crushing our ship
  • Climax - Black William saves us by ramming the monster

Sounds good? Not to me. I am really making this up as I go and I now just realized that our story has a problem. We go from low to high too quickly. The surprise is good, but we need to set it up. I still want the help to come out of nowhere for dramatic effect. But before we get this help we start to pull ourselves together. Something more like this:

  • Low point - Things were bad already now there is also a sea monster crushing our ship
  • Turning point - We are pulling ourselves together, and improve the situation, but it is not quite enough.
  • Climax - Black William saves us by ramming the monster

Of course to make this thing work, we need our readers to be on the same page. You can almost make a list of things the reader must know before we even reach the low point. First, there is the POV character, I will call her Tara Ley. We must somehow make her cool and likable and she is a captain in her own right. Then we have the pirate captain, Black William, the reader must know he is selfish, a man without principles, yet as the same time we already want to plant some roots that will make his change of heart plausible when the time comes. Finally, we want to introduce the sea monster early on. We will discover more things that we need to set up early as planning progresses, but this is already quite a lot.

A common writing problem is a lot of material needs to go in the introduction. Furthermore (even in a story game) we don't want to give the reader just a bullet point list (Stuff like "You are a wizard in the kingdom of Larion, you have a staff ..." is for AI Dungeon, not us.) This is the show don't tell rule. At the same time the reader won't want to read pages and pages before things get interesting. The introduction needs to interesting in its own right. Fortunately, there are some tricks for that. The best introductions show the characters in their natural environment going about their normal lives (this is Bilbo's birthday in Lord of the Rings, Vincent and Jules discussing cheseburgers in Pulp Fiction, etc.) But normal life can be interesting (Jules and Vincent kill somebody in the next scene, that is Tarantino telling us that this is also part of their normal life)

Books and movies often use another trick to create tension in the introduction. They give a hint of the action that is about to come (the "call to adventure") early in the introduction, but the main character refuses it or can't follow it. (This is Harry potter living with the Dursleys still after the invitation to Hogwarts arrives, Bilbo declining Gandalf's invitation in the Hobbit, etc.) Many fantasy novels also use epilogues to create this extra bit of tension and help the reader through the introduction, but they can be a double edged sword. (The Epilogue is Game of thrones greatest flaw)

So now the outline for our story looks like this:

  • Introduction - We see the characters in their natural environment
  • Call to adventure - A dangerous mission is proposed, possibly initially refused but then accepted
  • Low point - Things were bad already now there is also a sea monster crushing our ship
  • Turning point - We are pulling ourselves together, and improve the situation, but it is not quite enough.
  • Climax - Black William saves us by ramming the monster

Now there is another problem. People like winners, but Tara Ley our POV character looks like a looser. When she heeds the call to adventure she gets straight into trouble. Not good. We need to give her an initial success. Also we can"t end straight away after the climax. We need closure and for that we need to see the characters return to their normal life, but of course they have been changed in profound ways by the events of the story. (Think of the characters of Lord of the Rings returning to Hobbiton)

So now our outline looks like this

  • Introduction - We see the characters in their natural environment
  • Call to adventure - A dangerous mission is proposed, possibly initially refused but then accepted
  • Initial Success - We completed the mission but now we need to get back home
  • Low point - Things were bad already now there is also a sea monster crushing our ship
  • Turning point - We are pulling ourselves together, and improve the situation, but it is not quite enough.
  • Climax - Black William saves us by ramming the monster
  • Conclusion - We return home perhaps even accept the next mission, but the events of the story left us changed

This structure is the famous “seven part narrative”. It is the fundamental structure that underlies the majority of stories and most movies. If you don't believe me pick a random mainstream movie and watch it again, you will recognize the seven parts.

Now that we know the basic structure, we need to flash things out a bit more. Since Black William is our protagonist we want him there right in the beginning, but why does he show up at all? Our big turning point is his change of heart, but how do we make this plausible? If we want to have the refusal to heed the call to adventure what would make Tara change her mind about this? The first problem seems to be almost the cure for the last. Black William may be what changes her mind.

Now for the most difficult bit: Why will Black William turn from selfish to selfless? Perhaps because he sees others acting selflessly. Perhaps seeing Tara's crew fight the monster in a hopeless battle is what he needs to see to change his mind. So this could be the central point of conflict between them. Black William is a harsh and selfish man who exploits his crew. Like everybody he wants to be liked, but he does not know how to do this. He thinks if he makes more money for himself and his crew they will eventually like him. Tara on the other hand is selfless, that makes her financially less successful but her crew loves her.

In the final battle we want a real sense of danger, so someone who we mildly care about needs to die. I will call him Isaac. Also we need to somehow set up the selfless behavior of Tara's crew. A good way to set this up is to personify this in one crew member whose actions we can understand. Let's call Valleria. We will need to introduce her as well. There are some choices to make about Tara as well. I think I want her to be a smuggler, illegal but less bloody than pirate.

So far we only have one sentence for every of the seven stages of the narrative, but all the big parts are in place. For the next step we can write one sentence per scene. Let me flash things out a little bit:

INTRODUCTION

  • Tara in her usual environment. We join her as her ship glides into port in the middle of the night. Boxes are unloaded in silence. Tara talks to Valleria her first officer. We learn that they have smuggled medicine to a small town in some war-torn country.
  • The cargo unloaded Tara and her crew walk to a pub. Here the buyer is waiting. Problem is he can only pay for half of the wares. Tara can play nice and give everything to him for half the price or some other resolution. Isaac also get some lines in. If they are funny, readers will like him instantly.

CALL TO ADVENTURE

  • The merchant asks if Tara would be interested in another mission, she would be paid extra handsomely at the destination. He has some art that he wants to bring out of the country to save it from the war. Only the destination is in a place that harbors other dangers. They have a navy that does not like smugglers. “You can slip through the Straight of Narrales,” the merchant suggests. This gives Tara a good opportunity to talk about all the dangers and particularly describe “Breaker of Ships”, our monster.
  • So let's say Tara declines the initial offer. She will retire to a table and chat with Valleria. She is more willing to take risks and would have taken the merchants offer, but of course defers to Tara. This also gives Tara an opportunity to think about Valeria's back story and note how fiercely loyal this is.
  • A local man bursts into the pub he shouts another ship is coming in. Pirates. A Galleon with black sails painted all black and she carries a brass “beak” for ramming other ships. “That's black William's ship!” somebody mutters in horror. Some local decides to rush home, but when he reaches the door he stumbles backwards. Black William himself is about to make an entrance.
  • So Black William enters goes directly for the merchant and says he has heard that he has cargo. Black William wants to transport it, or so he pretends. Tara dislikes him with a passion and she knows that he has no intention of bringing the artworks to their destination, he only wants to steal them. The merchant knows this as well, but will he be able to stand up to the pirate?
  • Tara announces that the cargo is already taken. She has accepted the commission. The merchant is relieved. There is a tense conversation between Tara and Black William. Valleria and Isaac come to her aid. Ultimately there is nothing that Black William can do. the cargo has been taken, it is the law of the sea. (Good thing that pirates follow rules, they work damn well for patching up holes in the plot. If we discover that we need some more pirate rules for the later parts, here is an opportunity where Tara can think about them)
  • Before we move on to the next step ther is an opportunity for some deep thoughts or alternatively a dialog with Isaac. We need to explain Black Williams back story. So this is a bit of a flashback. Tara will reveal how she grew up on his ship. The crew really liked her, and black William hated that. Eventually Black William runs into some trouble: they are just plundering a ship when the navy turns up. He cuts the lines and flees without waiting for Tara and perhaps also Valeria to come back on board. The two survive by dressing up and pretending to be passengers of the merchant ship (whose crew is conveniently all dead at this point.) Finally Tara learns that she grew up with the pirates because Black William killed her family.

INITIAL SUCCESS

  • Back in the present we rejoin our smugglers as they load their new cargo and sneak out of port. In addition to the other troubles we also have black William to avoid.
  • On the way there are some troubles, but we don't risk the Straight of Narrales just yet, but go the other way. Of course Tara will think a bit about the sea monster and how horrible it is. Once a black sail is seen on the horizon, but Tara hides her ship cleverly in a fog bank and escapes. Then there is a closer call with the Navy, but we are already closer to land and Tara plots a clever course between some islands where the larger ship can't follow.
  • This is the right time for another interlude. This time we join Black William. He is half drunk and talking to his first officer. He is angry that Tara slipped away and tells the officer to punish the crew. As he gets more drunk throughout the conversation we learn that he rules with an iron fist, but also that he wants to be loved. “Why don't they like me Jacob, I made them so much plunder. We have always divided fairly, but all I earn is their disdain. These thankless pigs...”
  • Back with Tara we see her handing the artworks over to the rightful recipient and being rewarded with a box of gold. Still on shore our crew runs into a dashing Navy Officer. Never hurts to throw in some romance. The officer suspects that Tara is a smuggler. She pretends to be a merchant and gets away with that for now.
  • On the way back to ship they are followed. Laying a clever trap they catch their pursuer. It is a particularly creepy member of Black William's crew. He reveals that Black William knows that they have the gold now and will be lying in wait for them.
  • When they leave port next morning it is not Black William who awaits them but the navy ship. They try to flee but the navy ship is bigger and faster and Tara and her crew are loosing ground. As they are headed for a cape, a decision needs to be made. Go the long way round and be caught or risk the Straight of Navarra. Tara tricks the Navy Captain into thinking she will go the long way, but then turns into the straight at the last second. The less maneuverable Navy ship shoots past the chance to turn, it will have to backtrack agains the wind. It will be a while, but we haven't seen the last of them.

LOW POINT

  • We are now fleeing from the navy ship into the Straight of Navarra. Tara is hugging the rocky coast in the hope of following a shorter course than the bigger navy ship can. As Tara's ship rounds an outcropping of rock Black William's ship comes into view. In minutes they are boarded. Against the larger pirate crew battle is pointless.
  • Just as the pirates have located the gold in the cargo hold the sea monster strikes. Isaac is killed as the black tentacles wind themselves around masts and railings. Tara's ship is in real danger. To make matters worse the navy ship comes into view in the distance. Black William orders his crew to secure the gold and cut the lines. Once again he will abandon Tara to her fate.

TURNING POINT

  • The situation is hopeless. Already entangled by the monster. Tara's ship can't bring her guns to bear on the monster. Tara orders her crew into the boats. In moments the first boat is in the water commanded by Valleria. “Try to reach the navy ship,” Tara shouts to her. “The hell we will,&38221; is Valeria's reply. Armed with hooks and belaying pins the small boat tackles the monster. It is quickly sunk but Valeria and her little team climb around on the tentacled beast and hit it where they can. The crew who were just readying the other boat abandon their attempts and join the fray instead.
  • “What are they doing?“ Black William asks his first mate. “They are fighting the monster.” “:With boat hooks, that's pointless.“ “Aye, they do it for her, Sir.“

CLIMAX

  • Finally we get to scene that we wanted all along. Black William turns his ship around. The monster is too close for cannons, so he rams it with the great brass beak mounted on his ship. The beast is not quite dead. For a moment Tara and Black William fight side by side. Having redeemed himself Black William can die a heroes death now, or perhaps do a Long-John-Silver and vanish just in time to avoid capture by the approaching navy.

CONCLUSION

  • The beast is dead and we get to meet the dashing navy captain again. He believes us now that we are merchants as he saw the pirates steal something from us (the box of gold). The box is returned to us, etc.
  • So how has this adventure changed us? Perhaps Tara has had enough of smuggling and actually becomes a merchant. Perhaps she even joins the navy and becomes a kind of spy for them ... or maybe the box has been lost after all and recovering it will be another adventure. There are many options.

Of course this is a story so far not a story game. So next you want to weave choices in. Putting them in is pretty easy, but bending the story such that all parts are still in place is harder. With certain choices the story could be totally different but we want to still have a working narrative structure. So low point, turning point, climax etc. will still be there. Other people here have much more experience with this so I will shut up about it.

Writing

So now we have story sorted out. Before we get to writing we should get to know the world and its characters a bit better. A good ideation technique for this purpose is to write down four words or phrases for every character, place and thing that plays a role. For example Isaac is tall, lanky, funny, black-haired. For the characters we also want to think about how they speak. “Awright me babba,” pirates and smugglers of course don't speak in full sentences of course. Black William has boastful, menacing and sometimes fulminant mode of speaking. Maybe Valleria has a foreign accent etc., but we want to keep Tara talking in plain English. She will be talking a lot and any strong accent would get annoying quickly.

It is always a good idea to cut out needless words. Every word needs to serve a purpose, particularly in the action scenes.

Throughout we want to keep up the show-don't-tell. Consider “The monster is super strong” vs. “A black tentacle winds around the mast. There is a fain crackling at first that growth in volume until it culminates in a mighty crash. The mast starts to tilt, slowly at first then more quickly, taking three sailors with it as it goes over the side. Its evil work done, the tentacle is withdrawn. Where it gripped the mast, the stump is reduced to splinters.”

Once you start writing, just write. Get words down fast. Maintain the flow. Whatever bugs you put in can be weeded out in revision.

Perhaps the best advice: You get good by writing. When a part does not work how you intended it. Analyse the problem. Read some similar passages in books to see how professionals pull it off. That's the way you get better.

Now you only have to write the story. (I can help revising.)

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago
Good job but, you are aware that she is nine years old?

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago

*ten

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago
Happy Birthday :)

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago
Yeah. Kind of in the back of my mind. Don't have children myself, so really little experience what 10 means. But it's never to early to start thinking about things in a structured way.

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago
By the way, see the mistake that I made? I mean the big mistake, not just the typos? Spotting such things early is exactly the point of planning, so that we can iron such things out now, rather than having to rewrite half a book later.

How do I get ideas for stories?

3 years ago
@northwind

Can you turn this post into an article? I know you were planning to write one at some point.

How do I get ideas for stories?

3 years ago
Yes, I know I should.

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago

How do I get ideas for stories?

4 years ago

I played a few hours ago, it was really well done!

How do I improve my way of writing?

4 years ago

All of this feedback was wonderful, thank you so much, guys! ^^

Now that I know how to get ideas and start writing, I've always thought that my way of writing was weird. It was too "crowded" I'mma show you an example if you don't understand, lol.

"Emilia runs to the bus stop. Her pink shoes are starting to slip off. "AUDREY!" Audrey turns her head. Bam! Emilia's lunch is on the concrete and Audrey's nose is bleeding. "Oh my gosh! I'm so, so, so, sorry!" Emilia tries cleaning up the mess and tries wiping Audrey's nose. "Come on, Emilia. Let's just get on the bus." Audrey says, with a grunt."

There might not be anything wrong, but damn, I hate this.

 

How do I improve my way of writing?

4 years ago
Everyone writes differently, but here's my take on the above paragraph not being crowded. So here's take one, differing only in the amount of space between the sentences:



Emilia runs to the bus stop. Her pink shoes are starting to slip off. "AUDREY!" Audrey turns her head.

Bam!

Emilia's lunch is on the concrete and Audrey's nose is bleeding.

"Oh my gosh! I'm so, so, so, sorry!" Emilia tries cleaning up the mess and tries wiping Audrey's nose.
"Come on, Emilia. Let's just get on the bus." Audrey says, with a grunt."



So there's room to breathe now. The bam has its place at the center of the scene, and the dialogue is split into different lines. However, it still doesn't flow well. Here's take two, adding only little things, mainly connecting feelings to the facts from above:



Emilia runs to the bus stop. It's just too late and too far, and she is sure she won't make it. Her pink shoes are already starting to slip off.

"AUDREY!" A desperate last plea makes Audrey turn her head, holding the bus up just a bit longer.

Bam!

Emilia's lunch is on the concrete and Audrey's nose is bleeding. The girls stare at each other with open eyes and pained expressions.

"Oh my gosh! I'm so, so, so, sorry!" Emilia tries cleaning up the mess and tries wiping Audrey's nose.
"Come on, Emilia. Let's just get on the bus," Audrey responds as she turns away, leaving Emilia only with a disappointed grunt.



So this take let's us know just how desperate Emilia is, gives the 'Bam!' a little more consequence and highlights more of Audrey's disappointment.
A third take is possible, depending on your style. You could give the scene more action, focussing more on the starting dash, or you could draw the scene out. Maybe Audrey isn't all that forgiving, or the bus driver is angry at lunch being spilled on his bus. Otherwise, you could also focus on the edgier Bam!, drawing the single word out in a terrifying collision with broken noses and spilled breadcrumbs.

How do I improve my way of writing?

4 years ago
Really could try varying your sentence length, right now it's all very matter of fact 'Emilia does this. Audrey does that.'

With dialogue you should break up the paragraph to put blank lines between each time the speaker changes. And if you go to the Help & Info section you'll see an article by Gower on how to punctuate it correctly, since in certain situations it can be a little tricky

Obviously you're pretty good at this for your alleged age already, just going by the fact you have a pretty good grasp on grammar. A lot of the rest just comes by experience, and some you'll pick up by example the more good books you read.

And then there's whatever Northwind wrote, which is probably helpful. I haven't read it yet but I assume.