Airport Nightmare

I am actually pleasantly surprised. Usually when I read something from Storygames in Need by an author I do not know, I am far more disappointed than I was with this.
The first playthrough was pretty fun, the writing was decent, and the levels of description were just about right. However, a lot of the choices were fake, and there was only one non-death end aside from the instant one the first choice led to. If the death ends had had a greater level of care in their writing, I would not have minded that, but as it stands, the lack of replayability was enough for me to knock off a point. This is a CYOA site, after all.
With that said, this was not a waste of time to read by any means. Just a note to those of you weirdos who read reviews before you read stories, once you find the winning end, don't bother to replay.
Thanks for the solid, and sometimes humorous, story. If you write more, I look forward to seeing it.

The story is well constructed with little to no spelling or grammar errors. There is a good air of mystery but a tad more explanation could be helpful at times, like why can't other people see the baddies and why are they after you. also some of the choices and outcomes didn't make sense or were vague like at one point the story states you are running faster because you don't have your heavy suitcase with you anymore but then later you can choose to use your suitcase as a weapon how did you get it back, did your friend bring it, did you take the time to go to baggage claim? it's little things but if cleaned up it would really help flesh the story out completely. You've got a good start so don't stop writing.

I loved it that was awesome

Very interesting story. The ending wasn't what I would prefer, but the buildup of tension and supernatural surreal horror was something I can appreciate.

I can’t help but think the opening page is insulting toward creative writing majors. Doesn’t matter if it is though because I’m not one! Anyway. I gotta say I’m a fan of the simplistic approach to this storygame. It doesn’t try to be something it’s not. The writing style fits the premise. The “voice” of the writing seems a bit young for the character that you play as (a girl in college). It reads more as a high school level person, although there is little separating a high school senior from a college freshmen. Just a year, a few gallons of beer, and a failed long-distance relationship.

Similarly to my first paragraph, the word text per page is fitting. I would probably shoot myself if the pages were long and drawn out. These aren’t. It’s a matter of seconds before you’re clicking the next link and I applaud the author if that was done intentionally. The quality of writing isn’t the greatest, but that’s ok. I think the author was just trying to make a fun, short storygame and that’s what this was.

I will say there are some pretty distracting spacing issues. Also, not a huge deal-breaker since I wasn’t too drawn into the story. If I were deeply immersed, it would have brought me back to reality which wouldn’t be good. This isn’t a memorable storygame, but it’s entertaining enough. The link names are quirky and funny. It’s probably a nice way pass the time waiting in a line somewhere.

Got killed by a goblin after they broke my ankle and I tried to run.

10/10 would recommend.

I really liked the Airport Nightmare.

This wasn't bad at all. It was an oddball story, but the author knows their way around a sentence, and the choices made sense. I don't really care for unpredictable death, but this one had just enough context to make the choices meaningful.

I liked it just seemed a little rushed thats all everything happened so quick.

This was a pretty funny story.