Albus Potter:The next Generation Year 1

This is absolute garbage. Your storygame is inaccurate, badly written, and stolen. I really want to get this unpublished, as I've seen many stories that you stole ideas from, so that's not even really your storygame at all.

Normally, I'd save the grammar stuff for the end, but I'm going to bump it up this once, because this was bad. Everything's wrong, the spelling is wrong, the grammar is terrible, and it absolutely kills the storygame, before you ever release another story, proofread it, and then have someone else proofread it, because you obviously have very little writing experience.

As stated above, the ideas were stolen. Somehow, though, you managed to still mess it up by writing it so badly that I wanted to just quit after the first two pages. Nothing about the storygame drew me in, and it honestly got worse from there. There's hardly any plot, and the writing is very choppy and confusing to read at some points. There was no flow; nothing really good at all.

It's too short as well. Rowling wrote each book in several hundred pages, and a few even ventured toward 1,000 pages, so this falls well below acceptable. This honestly deserves a 0/8, but I can't even give you that. On a final note, I hope you never planned on writing a sequel to this crap. 1/8

I really couldn't bring myself to get that far in so maybe it gets better (Based on the other comments it certainly doesn't) so don't trust my opinion on this. Overall, it was pretty bad. The speech wasn't separated properly making it hard to read and make sense of (The lack of proper punctuation didn't help either), the characters just felt off and the incorrectness of the sorting ceremony really stuck in my head the entire time.
Don't recommend but I might just be being overly judgy.

Unreadable. And that’s not just because it’s Harry Potter fanfic.

This story was very linear. I don't think any choice made had a significant effect on the storyline/ending.
This was written before the Cursed Child, though, so there's that.
Overall needs a lot of work, especially with speech marks.

I feel sick. Was this supposed to be original? There's already a book about Albus Potter in his first year!(It's technically a play but that doesn't matter)The dialogue was poorly written and the rest was just...bleh.

1/10 I wish I never read it.

This is such a bad story I love it

Good. Could be more story like though. Other than that, it’s very good.
Well done, author. I know that lots of people are saying it’s bad, and that it can be hard when people say that about your story. But I think it was amazing.

~ Astoria Luna Granger Tonks

This is an absolute shit stain.

Bad spelling and punctuation, poor quality fanfic

not bad