Cross-breeding

One choice. End.

Why....

The whole story idea is a piece of crap much less the actual writing

Extremely stupid

I thought this would fit into the "Gross Hilarious Fetish Porn" catergory. You dissappointed me, and you didn't even let me go find a whore intown. There is no middle finger in the world that is big enough to accurately represent half of the amount of "You really, really suck at this, and I hate you, and you should feel bad." that is demanded of this story.

the **** is this pice sh*t doing on this site this "writer" (AS IF HE OR SHE CAN BE CALLED THAT ) insults us with THIS THING the "writer" sh*t out and tossed on the site

This was, in a word, awful. I am not entirely sure why it is still on the site, to be perfectly honest with you. Now, I would like to say that I'm not trying to be mean, but this is a writing site and there are standards here.

First off, the "weak spider" link, as an automatic game-over, is one of the laziest things I have ever seen and that is really saying something. Honestly, this is not a choose your own adventure at all. You herd the reader into the one possible real ending under threat of instant game overs and the single ending just kills you anyway.

Next, I can overlook a few errors here and there, but your spelling is genuinely unacceptable. I understand being eager to finish and slipping up with a word like "boyfreind" because it happens to the best of us. I can understand slipping up by omitting a single letter like "maries" ... but "butiful" tells me you're not even trying. The editor has a spell-checker and there is really no excuse for this.

Your spacing is unpleasant, particularly on the first page. No one wants to read a large, unbroken block of text, but no one wants to scroll for an hour between sentences, either. One line between paragraphs is adequate, two lines between a paragraph is acceptable, but you've got about 5 (at the least) between two sentences.

You should always capitalize proper names like Alixia and Vannon, and I'd strongly advise putting speech in "quotes."
Your punctuation leaves a lot to be desired because you stretch out some sentences far too long.

For example:
"You set out to find a human mate, while crawling and swinging around, you see a shy girl in the forest, she is cute, 16, has blond long hair that covers one of her eyes, and is wearing cute pink clothes, and she is tallish."

Would look much nicer like this:

"You set out to find a human mate. While crawling and swinging around, you see a shy girl in the forest. She is cute, sixteen, has blond long hair that covers one of her eyes, is wearing cute pink clothes, and she is taller than average."

By the way, when describing someone, as opposed to giving a bio or factoids about them, I recommend following actual thought patterns. Like so:

Do you automatically know the specific age for everyone you see? No? No. You can't know what it is unless they tell you. You can guess, though. "She appears to be around sixteen or so." "She looks like she's in her mid-to-late teens." "I'd guess she's at least older than fifteen." All of those would've sounded more natural.

The story itself sounds like it had the potential to be interesting, but I honestly don't understand what's going on. Why am I a spider who mates with female humans? Am I a demon? Am I a spirit? Am I a magical talking spider? Am I tiny or am I a giant?

Unfortunately there is no back-story, no depth, and no real detail. This is a colorless little world, closed off in all directions, and it's sadly very boring as a result.

FAZZ! WE NEED YOU! NOT IN A GAY WAY!

What.

Is this even a story? My experience lasted like 4 pages with like 7 options

Why am I such an interest on this site all of a sudden? All I do is write comments on storygames, Lol. Although I suppose I can write pretty good, considering English isn't my mother-tongue, I'm not as creative as many of the other members on this site. That also really affects my writing style, I guess you could call it.

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But like I've said before, I will join one day. That day will come pretty soon.

P.S. Checked out the forum game you were talking about. Seems pretty complicated, but also really hyped for... that also explains all the "Commander" image banner things I've been seeing on other accounts.