Escape the place!

I feel like you can probably make the choice descriptions very literate. You can maybe edit it and make it better, and it doesn't have the dungeon feeling.

Nah, everything's 2/8

I can't see properly out of my right eye now. Ah, at least I'm left-eye dominate.

It had bad grammar, but spelling was okay. No real storyline, you just run around randomly.

"Can you live the dungeon" is a question I've never asked myself before and set me up well for the spelling mistakes in the game. A fair amount of effort and enthusiasm is good but you need to correct two minor things in this piece, namely the story and all the words in it.

Well, the plot was pretty interesting, but the grammar and spelling made it kind of hard for me to understand what you were trying to express at times. Maybe you should also use paragraphs, as it makes your posts easier to read.

Another thing that I don't really get, is the part where the gameshow host tells them that they're really 18. Like, really? There is really no point of making them 12, then 18. If you want them to be 18, make them. If you want them to be 12, make them. Don't just switch between the 2, which make it really confusing.

It was okay. Some bits were difficult to understand, but the plot was good, if a bit linear. Decent game with scope for improvement.

Cool!

*Achoo!*
Sorry, I'm allergic to Marty-Stu's.

Could've been better if the story had a better explanation, and if you had a better understanding of capital letters, punctuation and paragraphs. Also what the hell was that thing with Swiftness 5, Attack 7, Mary Sue Levels up or whatever you were talking about? :p