Heavenspire

While there were not as many choices as I usually like, the choices that were there were mostly very meaningful.
I really enjoyed the captain's POV, the logs, the internal debate and how that affected the choices available. The side characters felt important as well, not just like NPCs with loop dialogue.
I find this story thought provoking, enjoyable, and well done.

I’ve never enjoyed reading a short story more than reading this one. My first choose your adventure - I can’t wait to read more of ninjas work :)

I’ve never enjoyed reading a short story more than reading this one. My first choose your adventure - I can’t wait to read more of ninjas work :)

Holy shit, a new Ninja game!

True to his namesake, this ninja silently dropped a banger of a storygame before fading back into the shadows. Seriously, when I was checking the site, I did not expect to see a new Ninja game just randomly pop up, this is so cool.

Ninja tells the story of a desperate captain sent to secure the salvation of his Kingdom, Heavenspire, by sailing until the sea ends where, according to their religion, he will fulfill a prophecy and find the ancients who will give him some way to save his country.

The writing is first class. I really love the way that Ninja takes us into this world, interlinking internal dialogue, with captain logs, and actual plot. This ends up being really effective as we get a perfect balance of the captain's inner thoughts with the actual events of the story playing out.

I also enjoyed the cast of side characters, everyone from Draven to Cedric, to Stephen, to Rose the Knife, to Calder, plays their role with aplomb.

The character work done in this story, particularly with the captain. The captain is clearly no fool, he has little faith in the ruling clergy class who callously send captain after captain every seven years, while they sit back enjoying unjust spoils. But at the same time, he accepts them for what they are and is still idealistic about saving his country.

Being thrust into a new world that's far beyond his ken, the captain struggles with choosing to adapt and compromise on his morals, or remain rigid, steadfastly sticking to his guiding principles. People around the captain are oftentimes much more powerful, and try to use the captain, so he has to stay clear and avoid becoming a pawn in other people's schemes. The characters in this story are remarkably selfish and self-interested, and it was a treat to navigate all these existing political quagmires and swamps, trying desperately to succeed in our mission while allying with the person who is most likely to let us be. This story gave me the impression of a big fish in a small pond slowly leaving his pond and seeing what the larger world was like. I really like how the main character was able to thrive even in a world that's so harsh and unforgiving, even in the face of so much hostility and difficulty. The encounter with Jack's ship is a perfect microcosm for this overall theme because of how we confronted the ship armed with guns and cannons with more traditional weaponry, and yet still managed to win. Repeatedly the main character is confronted by enemies more powerful and with more influence, making the challenges feel real and significant.

The captain is fighting battles on two battlefronts: one in the physical world and one in his mind. The captain faces actual physical challenges, as well as mental obstacles because each of the encounters often present him with choices that he has to make. That's one of the main reasons why I like Ninja's writing in this story so much: not only does our main character grapple with tribal folk, corsairs, and witches, but he also has to make difficult choices. At times, the main character benefits by compromising on his morals(like when he chooses to take a drink with Rose), and other times, the story abruptly ends(if the main character decides to become the king of the island). The captain intrinsically links his morals with the success of his mission because of his deep convictions that he is heaven sent, and that his faith will unerringly guide him to victory, yet in private(captain logs and inner thoughts), he feels doubt at times.

The game encourages the main character to embrace flexibility and thoughtfulness in his belief system. For instance, if he chooses to punish the crew, Draven later betrays him. The character is a disciplined and ruthless man, but as time passes, he is often forced to adapt, but does find happiness, especially with Kaylith. I did find their pairing initially to be a little unbelievable, as she goes from threatening his life because he used her training dummy, to joining him in his quest because she desires a change from Rose. It gets more believable after Kaylith joins you on your mission, but there's this death scene where you choose to "do nothing" in the library, and for some inexplicable reason, you think of Kaylith's name. I say inexplicable because it felt that there wasn't enough time for the feelings to fully develop between the pair at that point in the story. But this is just a nitpick, because I really enjoyed their romance looking at the text from a whole, it's just that the development of the pair in the beginning felt a little forced.

I didn't expect to see such a great representation of a man driven by faith yet struggling at times to reconcile events that challenge his faith and force him to introspect, but this game really delivered on that front!

The branching at key points is really well done, even if the story is somewhat linear. Some choices don't really impact the flow and direction of the story(for instance, choosing between bow and dagger when attacking Jack's ship). For the most part, the story follows the structure where there's a right choice and a wrong choice, but at key junctions, the story branches(choosing to ally with Rose or Calder. One thing that bothered me slightly was the illusion of choice at times, like in the library where you could either go to the library directly or visit Kaylith first, because that branch serves to have Kaylith provide her perspective(granted we do get a little more dialogue between Kaylith and the MC so that's good), but storywise, it doesn't change the story much. But I think that might be a nitpick, because it is a choice at the end, whether to go in without talking to Kaylith, or after talking to her and getting her perspective. I did really like that scene, as I did pretty much all the story.

Yet the actual branching that appears at key points in the story is really well done! The main character is forced with impossible choices, especially the end. The ending is truly remarkable, as the benevolent ancient healers are slowly revealed to be cannibalistic demons who get their magical strength from the bodies of thousands. And in a stunningly well done moralistic dilemma, the main character is forced to decide whether his mission, trumps the needs of thousands, or to doom Heavenspire to continue to repeatedly wait every 7 years before another captain sets out on a doomed mission so that he doesn't have to kill thousands. Either outcome results in a forced compromise that really fits the tone of the story and is thematically consistent. I really hated that I had to use thousands of natives at Seaglade in order to save Heavenspire(the irony of the name Afterlife is brilliant, since the people forced to endure as slaves getting the life drained out of them don't make it to afterlife, instead they're stuck in a hellish limbo), but it was unfortunately a necessary price in this branch to secure Heavenspire's future. Yet the alternative isn't much better; when you refuse to cooperate with the ancients, you kill 2 of them and are basically forced give up on your mission and to never return to Heavenspire, instead setting out to hunt the last of the witches while the corrupt priesthood continues to send captains out to sea.

The pacing in this story is really good. I felt that it was fast paced, and really moving. In the beginning, everything gets established, and we basically learn about the world we're thrust in, but after that, it's go, go go. The violence in particular is really well written. The story doesn't hold back on the violence, and I really like how you write battles.

Overall, this is an amazing pirate adventure that also doubles as an in-depth character study into the psyche of a determined yet desperate man who's faced with a series of obstacles, and forced to realize that there's so much out there that he doesn't know about. As he journeys on, in search for Heavenspire's salvation, he is repeatedly confronted with things that challenge his beliefs and force him to consider whether his mission is really the right thing to do. I give this story an 8/8, I really enjoyed it and it was quite profound and brilliant!