Player Comments on Mechanised Assault Unit
I love mechs, you love mechs, we all love mechs!
So that means we love this storygame, right? Well, maybe. The writing is pretty good in-and-of-itself, but the plot itself is very generic. It's just a mix of Halo and Independence Day with some random tropes thrown in.
Spoiler: Your random border outpost is attacked by aliens, which comes as a big surprise to the characters but not at all to the readers. The aliens' mechs are effectively just tripods from War of the Worlds, and they have big lasers. Even the ending (at least, the one I got) is really predictable. You send a distress beacon to Earth, and it's implied that no one ever comes to help. This is a tried and true sci-fi theme, that the rich core worlds just don't care.
A side note: This story also doesn't have that much branching, so even if you explore some side paths, it's really not that long. Even though I only went down one path fully and got one epilogue, I can infer that there's maybe only one other epilogue where you don't die.
Overall, this story really isn't terrible, it's good, as long as you haven't read/watched much other sci-fi.
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WizzyCat
on 1/19/2021 12:02:21 PM with a score of 0
I got the ending where my teammate and I survive but the planet is controlled by the aliens, wonder what happened after that? Does help from the Sol Federation arrive?
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— Julian on 4/19/2022 11:45:41 PM with a score of 0
Could be longer
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Supernovahi
on 3/7/2021 7:31:16 AM with a score of 0
This really wasn't my type of story game. It did however have very good descriptive details. It was well written and had a good amount of choices.
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Faervel
on 12/26/2018 3:17:51 PM with a score of 0
pretty good! I understood all that was going on in it very clearly and liked the humour. You just earned yourself an 8 out of 8!
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rorytheassassin
on 11/17/2018 12:23:09 AM with a score of 0
Found it too short need a sequel but good story but short
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KingArslan
on 7/17/2018 7:56:57 PM with a score of 0
The story is excellent, but I feel that some deaths were a bit cheap. A bit over descriptive. Will continue playing to get other outcomes.
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Fiemouth
on 6/9/2018 12:41:28 PM with a score of 0
So, I just finished the game, really cool plot and stuff. Got the ending where I'm not really sure what happens, but we survive. I liked that there's a bit of mystery with what happens to the planet in the ending I got.
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harrypotter
on 2/12/2018 9:48:59 AM with a score of 0
Not bad, except it is boring that there are no battle scenes like selecting weapons and blasting them! ;D
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TestingJest
on 12/11/2017 9:32:50 PM with a score of 0
Pretty good. Got what I think is the best ending on my first try. Pretty good story and plot.
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Weirdleard
on 12/3/2017 8:58:36 PM with a score of 0
I loved it! It was pretty good, although you should make a sequel (if you haven't done that yet).
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Bob_The_Destroyer
on 11/20/2017 8:52:54 AM with a score of 0
What the heck, this is stupid
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1329557
on 11/15/2017 3:52:38 PM with a score of 0
good fun
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JohnX
on 9/19/2017 3:20:48 PM with a score of 0
wishing i could write as good as you lol
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Crow7777
on 7/14/2017 3:06:52 AM with a score of 0
Amazing story. Could use a bit more depth, but waiting for a sequel.
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Meru
on 4/11/2017 11:16:32 PM with a score of 0
I have to say, it is very well written, i will agree with others that the story is too short but it keeps me wanting more. I cant want until the next chapter comes out.
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SlovakolariK
on 4/4/2017 11:55:16 AM with a score of 0
amazing
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— wolf on 3/18/2017 11:33:02 PM with a score of 0
A nice and quick premise and introduction, but has no real meat to its bones.
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Crlarson1989
on 3/8/2017 6:34:48 PM with a score of 0
Good game. needs to be longer
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— travis on 12/29/2016 7:44:34 PM with a score of 0
Too much dialogue and too little action.
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RasterAster
on 11/28/2016 11:58:49 AM with a score of 0
This story was very interesting and it ran smoothly but also brought enjoyment to myself as a reader! I think that you should of added a bit more to this story because the choices I made came to, what felt like, an abrupt and unsatisfying end. Overall, this story brought me to such interest in what would happen next! Great Job on the story, Bud.
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TheNonCreativeWriter
on 11/23/2016 12:03:08 AM with a score of 0
It is good but, too much reading.
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— Jermy on 11/18/2016 1:26:13 PM with a score of 0
Awsome sci-fi story
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— Elliott on 11/10/2016 12:36:23 PM with a score of 0
A lot shorter than expected in comparison to the Length ratings people have submitted, i would give it a 3/8 in terms of Length
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— Wulfaer on 10/11/2016 12:52:34 PM with a score of 0
The beginning is a little slow but its fun
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Pinnacle_stanley
on 8/8/2016 12:30:52 AM with a score of 0
Reminds me of battle tech. I played that game a lot. I'd like to see this expanded into a series. Cool.
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crusader
on 6/30/2016 6:37:17 PM with a score of 0
twas bad and really boring
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— me on 5/31/2016 10:45:46 AM with a score of 0
this was as much fun as ramming my head in a wall
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barnes
on 5/13/2016 11:37:33 PM with a score of 0
loved this
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— Owen on 4/26/2016 2:27:07 PM with a score of 0
Can't wait for the next one!
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AwesomeSaucy
on 4/9/2016 5:43:22 PM with a score of 0
I must agree with the other comments I read. This is a good read, a little overly descriptive but that does not diminish from the story.
My only problem with it is that it reads like the entire story was written from beginning to end and then the choices were added after. I say that because it seamed like I was being pushed to select the option that would bring me to the end of the story.
Either way, it was still a good, I enjoyed it and look forward to a sequel.
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drackeye
on 4/2/2016 5:40:02 PM with a score of 0
It was pretty cool. It was a fast paced action story. But for next time, add more choices and endings.
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MisterMeep5
on 4/1/2016 4:42:54 PM with a score of 0
It's very good but too cheesy and pics were very low quality but good over all and I'd like to see a sequel
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— Jakob on 3/15/2016 3:57:18 PM with a score of 0
I liked this a lot, it was shorter than I thought it would be, but the length is still good. This is very well written.
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corgi213
on 1/1/2016 10:51:44 AM with a score of 0
Don't stay at e fort, you'll just die. I did the whole thing with all routes in about 5 minutes
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— Horrible on 12/5/2015 7:44:42 PM with a score of 0
very good start, but want more. also, aliens seem the cliche overpowered and unstoppable. try to make them a little weaker. it he and interestlps add suspense when they still win but seem beatable
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Paladin
on 12/1/2015 11:44:31 PM with a score of 0
It feels like its been cut short. I would suggest that you make a sequel. And part of the reason I put"better than that food is because I can't have it.
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ethandavidkermis
on 11/29/2015 10:17:53 AM with a score of 0
I would love a sequel!
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— Zaraki Kenpachi on 11/13/2015 12:43:26 AM with a score of 0
Amaaazzzziiiinnnggg
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— Deez Nutz on 11/4/2015 10:09:49 AM with a score of 0
Long, rambling paragraphs that seem go on and on that I commonly found myself skipping through. Not entirely interesting.
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TheMonitor
on 9/23/2015 7:26:41 PM with a score of 0
The ending kind of left you hanging.
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— Tre' Smyre on 8/23/2015 2:40:30 PM with a score of 0
died by sword through the heart...ill take it
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— B on 8/14/2015 3:09:15 PM with a score of 0
Its great just Short
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Shadow_Strider
on 7/20/2015 10:39:04 AM with a score of 0
There are many ways to die
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SpookySkelton53
on 3/30/2015 12:04:59 PM with a score of 0
While I am relatively new to this particular scene i have been reading and enjoying multiple choice text based games for a while now. personally, this story has great potential, but lacks in one major area - its VERY linear. I am assuming this is due to its short length, so i would recommend the author spend some more time on a full length story, rather than just a linear, shorter one. HOWEVER the author does have a lot of potential, and what i read was still intriguing and kept me reading further.
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— Pbailey on 3/28/2015 6:36:01 AM with a score of 0
this deserves a sequel. I looked in your author page for a sequel and didn't find one. I was disappointed. if you do decide to make a sequel one day I will read it because your story is truly one of the best I have read on this site.
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stephen
on 3/12/2015 12:49:26 PM with a score of 0
Oh Muh Guhd
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KiritoLeeWillis2
on 3/4/2015 12:40:56 PM with a score of 0
It's a very good game. I'm interested to know more about the aliens, and see what happens.
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Chase223
on 2/28/2015 4:26:24 AM with a score of 0
Holy crap! I felt like I was reading a book! The descriptions were awesome and an interesting ending. Needs a sequel!
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— Alexander on 2/8/2015 8:30:56 AM with a score of 0
Need much more. Good story line but need to continue story!!!!!
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Crossquest
on 2/6/2015 1:39:08 PM with a score of 0
Is there more?
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mysteriousboss
on 1/26/2015 2:56:16 PM with a score of 0
Very short,and very few paths.I hope the new one will we better.
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the_lone_noob
on 1/24/2015 11:58:38 PM with a score of 0
Could be longer, I wish it had been
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WolfDemon
on 12/24/2014 5:36:10 AM with a score of 0
A fun theme and fairly direct path.
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gclaassen
on 9/30/2014 12:07:49 AM with a score of 0
epic .
great
fuck yeah!
the best imcs ever .
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— josh on 9/15/2014 2:55:06 PM with a score of 0
Too short but I hope there would be a sequel. One day.
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MartinCD
on 8/12/2014 11:23:13 AM with a score of 0
The story line is very good but kinda short.. When it ended i was hoping for more.. Am gonna check if there is a sequel.. If not, hope it comes soon
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salvator786
on 8/2/2014 5:37:13 PM with a score of 0
It was pretty short, I liked it, and to gage whether or not people would like it I would say it is a good game. I would love to see more of this series in the future.
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— sneak on 7/31/2014 12:35:40 PM with a score of 0
it was a bit short but enjoyable read i hope you make a sequel
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Belphegor
on 7/23/2014 9:37:55 PM with a score of 0
A fun little game
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Serenemyth
on 7/19/2014 8:27:11 PM with a score of 0
It wasn't bad, quite descriptive, though I felt the storyline was a bit linear, with only one epilogue I have found so far. Also, it lacked explanation, and the endings just seemed very abrupt. An interesting read nonetheless.
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ApparentEccentric
on 7/17/2014 12:47:14 AM with a score of 0
A nice adventure. Felt a bit short, cannot wait for sequels. The ideas and plot setting are awesome. 6/8. Would like to see actual combat, though.
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lukeskywalker645
on 6/6/2014 4:13:11 AM with a score of 0
A confusing story.
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EarthCollision
on 3/10/2014 2:37:03 PM with a score of 0
Amazing! I loved playing as the captain, since I got to order what to do. It was amazing! Absolutely amazing! Second favorite game on the site!
7/8.
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ShriekingTiger44
on 2/7/2014 2:55:45 AM with a score of 0
Rather well writen story, but a bit light on the game side of this thing.
Long parts of text between choices and not always a real choice after each of those parts. You often just have a "clic here for next page" link.
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— Jean-Mi Wan on 11/30/2013 6:23:32 PM with a score of 0
Too short, but a good story. It's a shame the aliens were really never explained though, and I expected to fight some of the frontier raiders based on the intro. Can you make a sequel where the aliens are actually FOUGHT?
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— Anonymous on 11/6/2013 7:41:12 PM with a score of 0
it was ok. if there is another one i will read it.
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— death mute on 9/28/2013 7:28:19 AM with a score of 0
Nice but needs a conclusion.
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isaacssv558
on 9/11/2013 10:56:42 AM with a score of 0
It was an okay okay game. Nice try though.
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Il_Maestro
on 9/3/2013 4:33:30 PM with a score of 0
It is a good story, but the characters aren't given strong enough personalities for me to care for their well being, and its too short for me
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Kwism1127
on 8/26/2013 9:54:34 PM with a score of 0
An interesting idea, but it felt very railroaded and short. There was also a lack of back-story on both characters and how the enemy managed to get a hold of the Behemoths. I would still like to see a sequel however.
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MythicBowman
on 8/19/2013 1:39:26 AM with a score of 0
Meh. Bit on the short side, I found it fairly disapointing that there was only one ending, although the creatoe did say that this could result in a sequel....
Alright.
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— Who really cares? on 8/12/2013 12:16:48 AM with a score of 0
this i a great story full of well thought out character development and an awesome if brief story. i am at a loss for words as to how you managed to create such a great story. this definitely deserves more than a 10.
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— Jason x on 7/19/2013 11:12:09 PM with a score of 0
I liked the game. Lots of action. Too bad I died.
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harrypotter
on 6/11/2013 7:52:46 AM with a score of 0
Great story! I want to build something similar to the M.A.U.s!
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— Jonathan on 5/29/2013 12:19:30 PM with a score of 0
Great Game! Lots of action and detail.
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harrypotter
on 4/27/2013 10:17:42 AM with a score of 0
Great read.. Need more!
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Leoricus86
on 4/26/2013 6:10:11 AM with a score of 0
Great story i was able to understand immediatly.
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ja50n
on 4/4/2013 10:59:54 AM with a score of 0
To Short
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— Nelly on 3/21/2013 2:38:57 PM with a score of 0
Very good writing.
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Xt1000305
on 3/20/2013 10:08:47 PM with a score of 0
Fun game! Not sure how many epilogues are there all in all. :)
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toni
on 3/3/2013 10:55:49 PM with a score of 0
They need to make a sequel. This was really fun
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— Guy Person on 3/3/2013 5:56:06 PM with a score of 0
A great story, but too short and it needs more endings
5.2 out of 10
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— TheImmortalOmegagoldfish on 11/17/2012 8:08:03 AM with a score of 0
Great story. You should really make a sequel.
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joshua101
on 10/27/2012 8:34:02 PM with a score of 0
Is there only one ending?
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— Omegagoldfish on 9/18/2012 8:27:22 PM with a score of 0
awesome.
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haledakota
on 9/2/2012 4:20:00 PM with a score of 0
I enjoyed this.^_^ Very good. Some people say it's a bit over-descriptive, but I like it like that, really let's people know about the story, sets the mood. Nice job! I would love to see a sequel. You oh so totally should make a sequel with more choices and whatnot. Keep up the good work!
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ChaiHai
on 8/18/2012 3:22:11 AM with a score of 0
got to the pilogue in the first time... apparently, im a storygame expert, i know what could happen always.
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Marmotlord
on 6/9/2012 5:08:39 PM with a score of 0
a little shorter than I expected, but good!
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— cm on 6/2/2012 7:17:41 PM with a score of 0
its good,make another one,but I suggest you make more options and/or less to read.
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— martin on 3/31/2012 4:00:48 AM with a score of 0
I liked i,t cant wait for second one.
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CovElite
on 3/8/2012 12:11:09 AM with a score of 0
It was a fun read, but short and pretty linear, from what i found there is only one way to win, and it doesnt even feel like winning.
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ugilick
on 6/27/2011 12:41:21 AM with a score of 0
not my cup of tea
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HeliosTheImmortal
on 5/24/2011 11:10:04 PM with a score of 0
Good game, and well written. The only problem is that it is a bit short, and left on a cliff-hanger.
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— Steve on 4/30/2011 8:13:34 PM with a score of 0
Awsomeee
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— Jon on 3/19/2011 11:10:11 PM with a score of 0
I want to see more of this. more ways to fight or live would be nice.
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— chimera on 12/9/2010 3:07:45 AM with a score of 0
I wouldliketo see more.
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Ahriman
on 9/26/2010 8:43:36 AM with a score of 0
wow...cliffhangers suck,but this game is 8/8, this was so copyed off of mech assualt because it has battlesuits and the mechs are simular to the ones in the games but i still love this
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doodoodude
on 9/13/2010 7:47:46 PM with a score of 0
neat game, hope there will be a second part
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maheusz
on 5/14/2010 11:45:32 AM with a score of 0
Not a bad read, well paced and thought out if a little bit "over-descriptive" at times, Still enjoyable overall. Looking forward to something that'll tie up that cliffhanger though.
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H-A-V-O-K
on 4/13/2010 1:45:20 AM with a score of 0
very good, but i hate cliffhangers
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crition
on 9/22/2009 5:03:38 PM with a score of 0
love it! but to many words!
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miller100
on 8/26/2009 7:26:50 PM with a score of 0
Well written, a cut above the usual. :)
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Juranas
on 8/21/2009 5:26:35 PM with a score of 0
I did'nt like the ending why blend in with cilvains and wait for reinforse ments
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— 123colby123 on 7/17/2009 9:05:09 PM with a score of 0
Nice job, tsmpaul. Great descriptive writing with a lot of excitement. Your stories are always a pleasure to read.
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madglee
on 7/18/2008 11:48:07 AM with a score of 0
Excellent writing, and definately needs a sequel.
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Rodney
on 7/17/2008 10:32:26 PM with a score of 0
good job i like the pictures and good writing
play lengh 5? wow thats off
Great story, great, great story
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th*mage*of*kings
on 7/15/2008 5:36:50 PM with a score of 0
I have reread this story in a more relaxed mindset, and I still think there arent enough choices, but the story is good enough for a 7. Great work tsmpaul!
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— Rommel on 11/23/2007 10:57:22 PM with a score of 0
Whoa, I request a sequel! That was great writing as always and although I'm not too fond of science fiction, this was a story I enjoyed. Great work!
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GodsSlayer
on 11/17/2007 6:56:37 AM with a score of 0
Great game, I liked the action and fast pace of it all. I also liked the descriptions of the metalic MAU'S.
Please do continue writing this story, I can't wait to find out what happens next.
Sequal anyone?
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ExiledPhoenix
on 10/29/2007 6:03:12 PM with a score of 0
Another great game from Paul! Great job!
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DarthVader_13
on 10/28/2007 3:38:38 AM with a score of 0
It was good, but the descriptions can get TOO detailed. Try to be more concise. Writing was superb as always, but there weren't enough choices to make it THAT good. I say 5/8
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Rommel
on 10/27/2007 10:42:41 PM with a score of 0
Well, I died a lot, but before I did that, I noticed a few continuity problems, mainly wolfman dying twice, first when leaving the fort, then agan when running away from the alien dudes.
And yeah, i would like to see where this is going, really.
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— Cozmic on 10/21/2007 8:17:37 AM with a score of 0
That was pretty flippin' good. I especially enjoyed the, well, the machinery. I always used to love the Mech Warrior Games for the PC
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JJJ-thebanisher
on 10/20/2007 10:30:18 PM with a score of 0
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