The Quest for Pegasus

This may as well be a short story. The choices do not matter as there is only 1 path forward through out the entire thing.

The story was structurally and grammatically sound. I didn't really catch anything wrong with the writing itself.

However, I wouldn't say this is much of a "game". There are plenty of opportunities where it would have been branched off to something. It's all an illusion of choice. The most in depth choice heavy part was in regards to banging the King's wife - and even then, there are only two real choices. Fuck her or deny her - just drawn out over 5-6 pages. I would rather the time and effort that whole thing took put towards ACTUAL choices at places that made sense.

There was a huge amount of potential and the author definitly knows how to write - but it was wasted. Very unfortunate.

This is not a story game. It is completely linear. The writer made no effort to conceal this, as nearly every page has two links. One leads to a restart link, or is an actual restart link placed there for no apparently good reason, and the other progresses the classic Myth along its time honored rails.

The only exception is your being allowed to be a little tempted at one point, or object totally. Either way, it makes no difference- but if the wrong choices there hadn't outright ended the story, well, more on that later.

What this is, is a "slightly" interactive summary of the myth. It is very well executed in terms of writer's voice, grammar, punctuation, accuracy etc. It accomplishes its simple aim of telling the story. Small ambitions, modest achievement.

Two or three alternate endings in addition to a "True Legend" ending would have launched this game to a completely different level, well probably from a 4 to a 5 or 6 from me. So for example: (Spoilers ahead)

In He is seduced but the secret is kept and we have a few pages and choices with some solid drama, maybe overthrowing the king or wild escapades trying to keep the affair a secret.

Or perhaps another where he opens the letter. Then he quite wisely flees the area and gets wrapped up in something outlandish while on the run. Etc.

It would have added tremendously to the story, but would likely add no further educational value, unless the author also took the time to interject bits of culture into the events, or worked them into the narrative.

I liked that we had an epilogue. That was a nice touch.

its great

This is pretty good! I like the different choices

Basically a linear story with links to reset the game.

A big draw back is that the game is so linear that it's practically just a short story. Pretty much every decision either continues the main story or goes, "Oops, you fucked up. Now you're dead."

Still, you get bonus points strictly because I'm a sucker for Greek Myths. ^_^

I can tell you tried, but the problem with this is that as long as you know how the legend goes, it is not hard at all.

The choices were quite obvious, and so was the story. Overall, it was a good story, but improvements can be made.

IT WAS REALLY GOOD!

Nice! Very true and even has some not so common knowledge about Athena and Pegasus(Sorry peeps I'm not gonna spoil that knowledge. You gotta read it yourselves.) Very good read but it is a bit short, and does not have any alternative paths but it works because, this is a mythology based story.