Player Comments on The Quest for Pegasus
This may as well be a short story. The choices do not matter as there is only 1 path forward through out the entire thing.
The story was structurally and grammatically sound. I didn't really catch anything wrong with the writing itself.
However, I wouldn't say this is much of a "game". There are plenty of opportunities where it would have been branched off to something. It's all an illusion of choice. The most in depth choice heavy part was in regards to banging the King's wife - and even then, there are only two real choices. Fuck her or deny her - just drawn out over 5-6 pages. I would rather the time and effort that whole thing took put towards ACTUAL choices at places that made sense.
There was a huge amount of potential and the author definitly knows how to write - but it was wasted. Very unfortunate.
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DireRyse
on 7/11/2024 10:02:28 PM with a score of 0
This is not a story game. It is completely linear. The writer made no effort to conceal this, as nearly every page has two links. One leads to a restart link, or is an actual restart link placed there for no apparently good reason, and the other progresses the classic Myth along its time honored rails.
The only exception is your being allowed to be a little tempted at one point, or object totally. Either way, it makes no difference- but if the wrong choices there hadn't outright ended the story, well, more on that later.
What this is, is a "slightly" interactive summary of the myth. It is very well executed in terms of writer's voice, grammar, punctuation, accuracy etc. It accomplishes its simple aim of telling the story. Small ambitions, modest achievement.
Two or three alternate endings in addition to a "True Legend" ending would have launched this game to a completely different level, well probably from a 4 to a 5 or 6 from me. So for example: (Spoilers ahead)
In He is seduced but the secret is kept and we have a few pages and choices with some solid drama, maybe overthrowing the king or wild escapades trying to keep the affair a secret.
Or perhaps another where he opens the letter. Then he quite wisely flees the area and gets wrapped up in something outlandish while on the run. Etc.
It would have added tremendously to the story, but would likely add no further educational value, unless the author also took the time to interject bits of culture into the events, or worked them into the narrative.
I liked that we had an epilogue. That was a nice touch.
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ugilick
on 5/19/2018 11:58:53 PM with a score of 0
its great
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roseswolf101
on 2/16/2023 12:33:56 PM with a score of 0
This is pretty good! I like the different choices
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writeyourstory
on 3/11/2021 2:11:49 PM with a score of 0
Basically a linear story with links to reset the game.
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ninjapitka
on 1/17/2021 1:22:52 PM with a score of 0
A big draw back is that the game is so linear that it's practically just a short story. Pretty much every decision either continues the main story or goes, "Oops, you fucked up. Now you're dead."
Still, you get bonus points strictly because I'm a sucker for Greek Myths. ^_^
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Avery_Moore
on 10/27/2020 11:28:06 AM with a score of 0
I can tell you tried, but the problem with this is that as long as you know how the legend goes, it is not hard at all.
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TreeHugger
on 1/10/2020 1:36:42 PM with a score of 0
The choices were quite obvious, and so was the story. Overall, it was a good story, but improvements can be made.
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— Fimredylu on 12/28/2017 11:07:46 PM with a score of 0
IT WAS REALLY GOOD!
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— Mia on 1/6/2017 2:50:20 PM with a score of 0
Nice! Very true and even has some not so common knowledge about Athena and Pegasus(Sorry peeps I'm not gonna spoil that knowledge. You gotta read it yourselves.) Very good read but it is a bit short, and does not have any alternative paths but it works because, this is a mythology based story.
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SophiaDragonHart
on 11/4/2016 12:45:13 PM with a score of 0
It's definitely a work of art. You had to know some Greek mythology to write this. Very fun and entertaining. I highly recommend playing!
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alliecat101
on 10/20/2016 8:06:52 AM with a score of 0
It was awesome , never seen anything like it.
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— Maddie on 8/24/2016 10:19:53 AM with a score of 0
I just thought you didn't have much choice it was all very restricted. Still can be improved. :D
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— Sasha on 8/19/2016 7:51:50 PM with a score of 0
I love this. It's interesting and really awesome.
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KrazyKat12
on 8/3/2016 7:57:32 PM with a score of 0
hmm nice but please make it longer
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nightbreeze1101
on 6/21/2016 4:47:34 AM with a score of 0
It was good but there should've been a chance to have sex with the queen
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— Lucca on 6/3/2016 8:33:20 AM with a score of 0
I appreciate you making this story about an underappreciated Greek hero. However, a little more options would be nice, just to give it a little more substance.
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MilSpec1775
on 5/6/2016 11:31:50 AM with a score of 0
It needs to be longer with more choices. Otherwise, very good!
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Shadowgirl_101
on 4/21/2016 2:09:57 PM with a score of 0
I guess it was a bit nice. Good job.
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RainbowPhoenix112
on 4/16/2016 12:05:53 PM with a score of 0
I loved it! The Quest for Pegasus was very well written. I rated this storygame an 8/8! Thank-you for writing this! I am looking forward to another storygame similar to The Quest for Pegasus.
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Bouquin
on 4/16/2016 10:47:08 AM with a score of 0
One of the best! I loved it. I am going for more!
:)
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— Windpaw on 3/9/2016 9:28:26 PM with a score of 0
very interesting
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LilacRain
on 3/8/2016 8:08:09 PM with a score of 0
A pretty good game. It impressed me very much. I did two trys, I didnt go to Athena. Well, my comment!
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— Hunter on 2/23/2016 10:05:33 PM with a score of 0
This game is pretty great, just that you knew to do everything correctly to win so it's boring... If you elaborated the story a little more, like all of Bellerophon's adventures until his death, that would be perfect.
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OnePieceTreasure
on 11/19/2015 1:29:21 PM with a score of 0
It was good
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1816Adry
on 8/29/2015 3:44:20 PM with a score of 0
This is a great game, I look forward to playing it again.
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— Kiwi on 8/1/2015 8:45:49 PM with a score of 0
This game is a lot of fun, but I don't feel like it's entirely Choose Your Adventure. More often than not, you could continue with the story or simply start over, which means no real choice. There aren't branches that you can follow and explore, it's just, you chose wrong, back to start.
Nevertheless, I admire the creativity and the knowledge of the subject. The writing is not too bad and appropriate and flowing images always add points.
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MadHattersDaughter
on 7/3/2015 9:08:44 AM with a score of 0
It was great and I love Greek Mythology!
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annaisawesome
on 7/1/2015 10:46:42 AM with a score of 0
This is great but it is way to much like the legend of Bellerophon. I knew all the right choices and that is kind of boring, less of a twist. But it was great never less.
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clumsypaw
on 5/25/2015 4:11:47 PM with a score of 0
There wasn't much choice in the story.
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— unsatisfied on 5/21/2015 3:36:49 PM with a score of 0
Very good story
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kawaii_kitty
on 5/3/2015 2:17:21 PM with a score of 0
Not a lot of choices
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AthenaT
on 5/2/2015 12:57:20 AM with a score of 0
Excellent, I love Greek mythology and together with excellent writing and good use of pictures this is a first class story :) I just wish we could have explored other Greek myths :D
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Will11
on 3/10/2015 6:27:15 AM with a score of 0
It was good, even though I had to go back because I died many times hahaha.
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warriorcat801
on 2/24/2015 12:28:29 PM with a score of 0
Amazing! Great Ending.
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— Nightfang on 2/19/2015 11:29:07 AM with a score of 0
Awesome story! Nice use of legends and myths. Excellent writing and great storyline! I loved it.
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— Guest on 12/24/2014 8:45:20 AM with a score of 0
7 - even better than Reeses' Cups®
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— Olivia Wolff on 11/9/2014 8:39:39 PM with a score of 0
awesome i beat it
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— f on 11/4/2014 10:49:26 PM with a score of 0
I loved it, though I died quite a few times! :(
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— Flamepelt on 10/25/2014 9:46:16 AM with a score of 0
This game was interesting and well written, but definitely very linear and predictable. However, I guess this is to be expected in which retell a story like this. Definitely more fun that just reading the story of Pegasus itself and it taught me the story as well. Have a go at it if you got a test on mythology or something, or just have nothing to do.
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SkyTenshi
on 10/20/2014 9:42:01 PM with a score of 0
Good story. Well written and engaging
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— Jordi P on 9/26/2014 12:49:54 PM with a score of 0
This is great! I know of course its obviously in the greek myths, but you added more detail. Its just that I just dont like the part Bellephoron (lets call him Bell) was thrown off Pegasus. Still, why wouldnt the gods let Bell visit them on Mt. Olympus?
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— Icestar of Mistclan on 9/7/2014 10:48:25 AM with a score of 0
I like it, it's well done and I can tell you read a lot on Greek mythology
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mchav6
on 8/13/2014 11:38:56 PM with a score of 0
It's great! Can you write another like this on 'THOR"?
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Midhun_pradeep
on 6/18/2014 9:45:58 AM with a score of 0
I especially enjoyed the ending! Of course, I won, so does that count as a compliment?
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Abigail
on 3/16/2014 1:22:13 AM with a score of 0
I enjoyed this story, it had a really good join to ancient mythology, and wasn't too tricky.
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EarthCollision
on 3/8/2014 10:22:09 AM with a score of 0
Beautiful story in all.
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— Necromancer on 1/27/2014 11:57:23 AM with a score of 0
pretty good, but i think it could be better.
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sunsetshimmer
on 1/25/2014 2:40:32 AM with a score of 0
Ok
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strawhat
on 7/18/2013 2:04:00 AM with a score of 0
Fun-ish.
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StormLight
on 4/27/2013 7:54:52 PM with a score of 0
THAT WAS REALLY FUN! it wasnt too long, but still was exciting and full of tension.
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epiclab
on 4/16/2013 8:36:15 PM with a score of 0
I love Greek mythology and you expertly made a story out of one of It's greatest heroes, Bellerophon. The story was well written and very interesting. Nice job!
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ThePuzzleMaster
on 3/30/2013 8:15:16 PM with a score of 0
i like greek mythology
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tigerxii
on 3/13/2013 4:13:31 PM with a score of 0
i'm a sucker for Greek myth... it's quite short and it doesn't really have lots of options, so decision-making isn't really that hard.
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toni
on 1/8/2013 4:11:16 AM with a score of 0
Amazing writing and it was great to see pictures on the pages!
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FeatheroftheSky
on 1/3/2013 2:29:08 PM with a score of 0
This was a fun and interesting little story!
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allyoreilly
on 12/26/2012 4:32:23 PM with a score of 0
Loved this story. Love Greek Mythology in general. I always used to think it was Perseus that owned Pegasus but I looked it up and you're absolutely right. I learned something ^_^
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Briar_Rose
on 11/20/2012 11:14:48 AM with a score of 0
nice quick story
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kalun
on 11/8/2012 10:58:21 PM with a score of 0
THIS WAS OK!!!
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— Alireza mosallaie on 10/6/2012 3:48:15 AM with a score of 0
I am fond of greek myth. This was not... overly exciting as the -only- way to get anywhere is to follow the preconceived path, but it was made well, nonetheless.
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Kiel_Farren
on 9/7/2012 3:03:53 AM with a score of 0
short,more of just a story,with no choice in a lot of things
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monkeyduke2
on 7/2/2012 2:22:42 PM with a score of 0
Very linear,but overall its okay. Kind of like a story instead of a story game.
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alex2208
on 6/15/2012 7:30:01 AM with a score of 0
It was interesting but a bit too predictable.
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— Mary on 5/9/2012 1:45:48 PM with a score of 0
Quite interesting
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Xt1000305
on 4/26/2012 4:42:10 AM with a score of 0
very good an informative!
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DarkentityOni
on 11/20/2011 10:15:47 PM with a score of 0
Its good.
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Killer999
on 5/26/2011 2:15:05 PM with a score of 0
Very linear, but it was to be expected, and I did enjoy the story.
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jkulibert2
on 5/15/2011 3:30:25 PM with a score of 0
pretty easy. BO approves
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ThisisBo
on 5/11/2011 8:26:06 PM with a score of 0
Hmm. A rather nice game, all in all.
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Forge
on 5/9/2011 1:56:15 PM with a score of 0
Really good game! Altought, it is really easy to do it for the first time without dying. However the story is great! Really good game!
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— anonymous on 1/18/2011 12:20:38 AM with a score of 0
nice game
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— unknown on 12/11/2010 11:44:55 AM with a score of 0
While the story was nice, I found it entirely too easy to pick the correct "winning" choices and it was too linear for my taste. I would like to see more of your games, though.
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kaz2y5
on 11/25/2010 1:34:28 AM with a score of 0
I love mythology and you tell this story really well!
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SoarHighBeFree
on 4/15/2010 11:11:30 PM with a score of 0
Easily one of the best in the category. Well-written, interesting, and engaging--not to mention using proper spelling and grammar!
My main drawback would be that it really is quite linear, and it would be interesting to see it extend out into the adventures that are the epilogue. Either way, very nice!
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Trzcina
on 12/23/2009 6:17:40 PM with a score of 0
Nice, I love myths! What a shame Bellerophon had to succumb to his hubris in the end. The only downside of this story is that the path to victory is too obvious and predictable. Try to give us some harder choices!
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— Rapidash on 8/1/2009 4:10:16 AM with a score of 0
Good points: illustrations, humor, spelling
Bad points: why do I HAVE to start over?, awkward grammar and syntax, not original, too linear, and death endings are lazy
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urnam0
on 3/4/2009 4:54:14 PM with a score of 0
Good, but i dont like having to start over.
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weedy
on 10/14/2007 10:31:07 PM with a score of 0
Very well written with correct punctuation and grammar. Good job.
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PrinceOProvidence
on 1/7/2007 3:35:07 PM with a score of 0
Sure, it's a bit linear, but an excellently written piece. I thoroughly enjoyed filling the role of a Greek hero.
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Sir_Lancegalawain
on 11/30/2006 8:07:03 PM with a score of 0
Linear, but a good storyline. I learned a lot.
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October
on 10/27/2006 9:26:43 AM with a score of 0
well written, but I hate when games make you start over if you choose wrong
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Sethaniel
on 10/12/2006 11:16:22 PM with a score of 0
Excellent writing and story. Informative as well. The choices seem limited, but this is probably the confines of the mythology. Great job!
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madglee
on 8/15/2006 4:57:22 PM with a score of 0
pictures, story, adventure... great combination. this was also one of the first games i played when i got here. i like it still. still one of the best.
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— nate on 6/8/2006 12:28:38 AM with a score of 0
Brilliant! I'd heard parts of the story before, but never the whole thing... and it's great fun with the multiple-choice thing. :)
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— Twiggy on 3/5/2006 9:13:36 AM with a score of 0
for an educational game its good. but everything else about it sux!
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— rommel on 1/12/2006 4:42:33 AM with a score of 0
Too linear, but still okay.
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— da Ravemaster on 1/5/2006 8:42:40 PM with a score of 0
6/8!!!
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— JJJ on 10/28/2005 10:58:40 AM with a score of 0
It was quite good and definintly in the top five games on the site. 8.5/10
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— JJJ on 6/18/2005 9:43:32 PM with a score of 0
Fabulous in its accuracy! The best game variation of a Greek myth I've ever seen! Missy-ga is quite the scholar!
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— Impressed Player on 3/24/2005 4:28:44 PM with a score of 0
Beutifully Written! In fact, It's so good, I wonder did you make it up yourself, or did you just add posible endings to a story of Greek mythology? Iether way I loved it! Bravo! Oncore!
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— IceFireKirby on 5/13/2004 3:22:54 PM with a score of 0
That was suprisingly level headed and fun. Good job
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— billy on 11/2/2003 7:07:59 PM with a score of 0
This game should be in the top 5. It is awesome and really well thought out
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— shadowGm on 9/27/2003 11:19:13 AM with a score of 0
Great game! The best one I have played yet!
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— Yunakitty on 8/11/2003 9:18:33 PM with a score of 0
Very well done!! Not a finer nor truer way of Ancient Greece have I seen to surpass yours!! You remain true to the facts and story. And it is hightly enjoyable.
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— Arch on 8/4/2003 8:00:12 AM with a score of 0
Your game is awesome!! It's not -too- hard, but if you haven't read Greek Mythology, it'd be easy to make a few wrong decisions- It's clear, and concise. I'm a stickler for correct spelling and grammar, but even I couldn't find fault with your adventure...!
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— Chrissie on 6/13/2003 8:04:44 PM with a score of 0
Not bad. Not bad at all. The answers were kinda obvious but then, I study greek mythology as well.
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— Renodox on 5/19/2003 4:39:37 PM with a score of 0
Excellent illustrations.
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— Kid Narc on 2/26/2003 10:32:48 PM with a score of 0
This was a well written, educational story. I'm glad I won it!
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— tree on 2/25/2003 9:07:01 PM with a score of 0
Compared to most of the games on this site, it rocks. On its own merits, Its not bad but very linear. Pese make more but give us a little more coice. Also the repate doption to start oer sucked. Why did you kep giving it to us? f we got board we'd jsut hit the big X
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— Paul on 12/27/2002 4:46:52 AM with a score of 0
GREAT GAME!!! Really enjoyed everything, and definately got into the story. Thank you for taking the time to go above and beyond! A+ Game, Highly Recommended!
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— march5th00 on 12/21/2002 4:53:32 AM with a score of 0
This is an extremely well made game, I love the story, options, and pictures. I know others who will love this game as well. Superb game. Seriously awesome. I don't think it could of been written better, as you appear to be an expert on the subject.
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— George M on 12/20/2002 12:16:55 AM with a score of 0
Captivating story & great visuals. Nicely done, Missy.<br>
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— juggler on 12/19/2002 11:06:13 PM with a score of 0
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