Player Comments on The Quest for Pegasus

This may as well be a short story. The choices do not matter as there is only 1 path forward through out the entire thing.

The story was structurally and grammatically sound. I didn't really catch anything wrong with the writing itself.

However, I wouldn't say this is much of a "game". There are plenty of opportunities where it would have been branched off to something. It's all an illusion of choice. The most in depth choice heavy part was in regards to banging the King's wife - and even then, there are only two real choices. Fuck her or deny her - just drawn out over 5-6 pages. I would rather the time and effort that whole thing took put towards ACTUAL choices at places that made sense.

There was a huge amount of potential and the author definitly knows how to write - but it was wasted. Very unfortunate.

This is not a story game. It is completely linear. The writer made no effort to conceal this, as nearly every page has two links. One leads to a restart link, or is an actual restart link placed there for no apparently good reason, and the other progresses the classic Myth along its time honored rails.

The only exception is your being allowed to be a little tempted at one point, or object totally. Either way, it makes no difference- but if the wrong choices there hadn't outright ended the story, well, more on that later.

What this is, is a "slightly" interactive summary of the myth. It is very well executed in terms of writer's voice, grammar, punctuation, accuracy etc. It accomplishes its simple aim of telling the story. Small ambitions, modest achievement.

Two or three alternate endings in addition to a "True Legend" ending would have launched this game to a completely different level, well probably from a 4 to a 5 or 6 from me. So for example: (Spoilers ahead)

In He is seduced but the secret is kept and we have a few pages and choices with some solid drama, maybe overthrowing the king or wild escapades trying to keep the affair a secret.

Or perhaps another where he opens the letter. Then he quite wisely flees the area and gets wrapped up in something outlandish while on the run. Etc.

It would have added tremendously to the story, but would likely add no further educational value, unless the author also took the time to interject bits of culture into the events, or worked them into the narrative.

I liked that we had an epilogue. That was a nice touch.

Very good story!

its great

This is pretty good! I like the different choices

Basically a linear story with links to reset the game.

A big draw back is that the game is so linear that it's practically just a short story. Pretty much every decision either continues the main story or goes, "Oops, you fucked up. Now you're dead."

Still, you get bonus points strictly because I'm a sucker for Greek Myths. ^_^

I can tell you tried, but the problem with this is that as long as you know how the legend goes, it is not hard at all.

The choices were quite obvious, and so was the story. Overall, it was a good story, but improvements can be made.

IT WAS REALLY GOOD!

Nice! Very true and even has some not so common knowledge about Athena and Pegasus(Sorry peeps I'm not gonna spoil that knowledge. You gotta read it yourselves.) Very good read but it is a bit short, and does not have any alternative paths but it works because, this is a mythology based story.

It's definitely a work of art. You had to know some Greek mythology to write this. Very fun and entertaining. I highly recommend playing!

It was awesome , never seen anything like it.

I just thought you didn't have much choice it was all very restricted. Still can be improved. :D

I love this. It's interesting and really awesome.

hmm nice but please make it longer

It was good but there should've been a chance to have sex with the queen

I appreciate you making this story about an underappreciated Greek hero. However, a little more options would be nice, just to give it a little more substance.

It needs to be longer with more choices. Otherwise, very good!

I guess it was a bit nice. Good job.

I loved it! The Quest for Pegasus was very well written. I rated this storygame an 8/8! Thank-you for writing this! I am looking forward to another storygame similar to The Quest for Pegasus.

One of the best! I loved it. I am going for more!

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very interesting

A pretty good game. It impressed me very much. I did two trys, I didnt go to Athena. Well, my comment!
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This game is pretty great, just that you knew to do everything correctly to win so it's boring... If you elaborated the story a little more, like all of Bellerophon's adventures until his death, that would be perfect.

It was good

This is a great game, I look forward to playing it again.

This game is a lot of fun, but I don't feel like it's entirely Choose Your Adventure. More often than not, you could continue with the story or simply start over, which means no real choice. There aren't branches that you can follow and explore, it's just, you chose wrong, back to start.
Nevertheless, I admire the creativity and the knowledge of the subject. The writing is not too bad and appropriate and flowing images always add points.

It was great and I love Greek Mythology!

This is great but it is way to much like the legend of Bellerophon. I knew all the right choices and that is kind of boring, less of a twist. But it was great never less.

There wasn't much choice in the story.

Very good story

Not a lot of choices

Excellent, I love Greek mythology and together with excellent writing and good use of pictures this is a first class story :) I just wish we could have explored other Greek myths :D

It was good, even though I had to go back because I died many times hahaha.

Amazing! Great Ending.

Awesome story! Nice use of legends and myths. Excellent writing and great storyline! I loved it.

7 - even better than Reeses' Cups®

awesome i beat it

I loved it, though I died quite a few times! :(

This game was interesting and well written, but definitely very linear and predictable. However, I guess this is to be expected in which retell a story like this. Definitely more fun that just reading the story of Pegasus itself and it taught me the story as well. Have a go at it if you got a test on mythology or something, or just have nothing to do.

Good story. Well written and engaging

This is great! I know of course its obviously in the greek myths, but you added more detail. Its just that I just dont like the part Bellephoron (lets call him Bell) was thrown off Pegasus. Still, why wouldnt the gods let Bell visit them on Mt. Olympus?

I like it, it's well done and I can tell you read a lot on Greek mythology

It's great! Can you write another like this on 'THOR"?

I especially enjoyed the ending! Of course, I won, so does that count as a compliment?

I enjoyed this story, it had a really good join to ancient mythology, and wasn't too tricky.

Beautiful story in all.

pretty good, but i think it could be better.

Ok

Fun-ish.

THAT WAS REALLY FUN! it wasnt too long, but still was exciting and full of tension.

I love Greek mythology and you expertly made a story out of one of It's greatest heroes, Bellerophon. The story was well written and very interesting. Nice job!

i like greek mythology

i'm a sucker for Greek myth... it's quite short and it doesn't really have lots of options, so decision-making isn't really that hard.

Amazing writing and it was great to see pictures on the pages!

This was a fun and interesting little story!

Loved this story. Love Greek Mythology in general. I always used to think it was Perseus that owned Pegasus but I looked it up and you're absolutely right. I learned something ^_^

nice quick story

THIS WAS OK!!!

I am fond of greek myth. This was not... overly exciting as the -only- way to get anywhere is to follow the preconceived path, but it was made well, nonetheless.

short,more of just a story,with no choice in a lot of things

Very linear,but overall its okay. Kind of like a story instead of a story game.

It was interesting but a bit too predictable.

Quite interesting

very good an informative!

Its good.

Very linear, but it was to be expected, and I did enjoy the story.

pretty easy. BO approves

Hmm. A rather nice game, all in all.

Really good game! Altought, it is really easy to do it for the first time without dying. However the story is great! Really good game!

nice game

While the story was nice, I found it entirely too easy to pick the correct "winning" choices and it was too linear for my taste. I would like to see more of your games, though.

I love mythology and you tell this story really well!

Easily one of the best in the category. Well-written, interesting, and engaging--not to mention using proper spelling and grammar!
My main drawback would be that it really is quite linear, and it would be interesting to see it extend out into the adventures that are the epilogue. Either way, very nice!

Nice, I love myths! What a shame Bellerophon had to succumb to his hubris in the end. The only downside of this story is that the path to victory is too obvious and predictable. Try to give us some harder choices!

Good points: illustrations, humor, spelling

Bad points: why do I HAVE to start over?, awkward grammar and syntax, not original, too linear, and death endings are lazy

Good, but i dont like having to start over.

Very well written with correct punctuation and grammar. Good job.

Sure, it's a bit linear, but an excellently written piece. I thoroughly enjoyed filling the role of a Greek hero.

Linear, but a good storyline. I learned a lot.

well written, but I hate when games make you start over if you choose wrong

Excellent writing and story. Informative as well. The choices seem limited, but this is probably the confines of the mythology. Great job!

pictures, story, adventure... great combination. this was also one of the first games i played when i got here. i like it still. still one of the best.

Brilliant! I'd heard parts of the story before, but never the whole thing... and it's great fun with the multiple-choice thing. :)

for an educational game its good. but everything else about it sux!

Too linear, but still okay.

6/8!!!

It was quite good and definintly in the top five games on the site. 8.5/10

Fabulous in its accuracy! The best game variation of a Greek myth I've ever seen! Missy-ga is quite the scholar!

Beutifully Written! In fact, It's so good, I wonder did you make it up yourself, or did you just add posible endings to a story of Greek mythology? Iether way I loved it! Bravo! Oncore!

That was suprisingly level headed and fun. Good job

This game should be in the top 5. It is awesome and really well thought out

Great game! The best one I have played yet!

Very well done!! Not a finer nor truer way of Ancient Greece have I seen to surpass yours!! You remain true to the facts and story. And it is hightly enjoyable.

Your game is awesome!! It's not -too- hard, but if you haven't read Greek Mythology, it'd be easy to make a few wrong decisions- It's clear, and concise. I'm a stickler for correct spelling and grammar, but even I couldn't find fault with your adventure...!

Not bad. Not bad at all. The answers were kinda obvious but then, I study greek mythology as well.

Excellent illustrations.

This was a well written, educational story. I'm glad I won it!

Compared to most of the games on this site, it rocks. On its own merits, Its not bad but very linear. Pese make more but give us a little more coice. Also the repate doption to start oer sucked. Why did you kep giving it to us? f we got board we'd jsut hit the big X

GREAT GAME!!! Really enjoyed everything, and definately got into the story. Thank you for taking the time to go above and beyond! A+ Game, Highly Recommended!

This is an extremely well made game, I love the story, options, and pictures. I know others who will love this game as well. Superb game. Seriously awesome. I don't think it could of been written better, as you appear to be an expert on the subject.

Captivating story & great visuals. Nicely done, Missy.<br>