The origin of the Ocean

Can't believe you fucking had a killer capybara...

Seriously? Fuck you. Nice try trying to cash in on my capybara thing, asshole.

A vicious capybara? Wait a fucking second.

DragonSlayer = Malkalack?

Or of course, it could just be you trying to sow the seeds of discord. Meh.

I'm just going to list what I have to say about this. If you really want to make this better, pm me and I'll tell you how you can make this better.
1) A lack of plot
2) Rather random, which could be okay in some stories, but definatly shouldn't be here.
3) There isn't more then a total of ten pages
4) There isn't a page with more then four sentences
5) There is no challenge. No choices that don't lead to death or something that is different then where you start out as.
6) Spelling and grammar is okay-ish. There are a few errors.
7) the topic isn't exactly original, but I don't think there are many stories here that include greek gods.

Um what?
I'm not really sure what was the point of the whole story, and the whole idea of how the ocean came to be seems forced. More detail would definately do wonders for the story.

I swear to Gods, (Get it, Gods) this is one of the worst stories ever. 1/8. NGOTY (Not game of the year). Would not play again.

i r8 8/8 m8 no l8

I'm sorry but if you are writing a story check your mistakes.

Hahaha, what? That was just awful. It was not, in the least, an example of the writing this site prides itself in. It was funny, especially since Zeus' sexual tendencies are usually at the core of most Greek myths. Still, how exactly does his ejaculation kill you? It's details like that that make a story.

But, seriously, the writing was awful. You didn't provide any information on who the main character is or why he is at odds with the other gods. Your spelling was subpar, as well. This was just plain bad.

Uh huh, well... thanks for that sage advice, but I don't use drugs while playing story games, which may also explain why I didn't enjoy this. >.>' Not much of a game or a story, really.