Bounty Hunter

Player Rating3.12/8

"#849 overall, #50 for 2006"
based on 293 ratings since 06/27/2006
played 3,876 times (finished 388)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

You are a bounty hunter. You are on a mission to Jupiter's fourth moon on a hunt for insect-like humaniods called the Ugla. Your boss will pay you for each Ugla you kill. It's not an easy journey, though. Do you have what it takes to be a.....

BOUNTY HUNTER?

Player Comments

The intro to this story makes it sound quite fun. However, when I hit the first page, I’m already leery of what’s going on. I like the idea of the story. I like the setting. I like that I’m headed out hunting bugs, and this could be a really fun story. Yet when my options on the first page are simply three apparently equal choices, this appears to just be another lolrandom story. By that I mean that without any clues at all on the page, I’m supposed to pick the best option. Yet all options appear to be equally valid, so the result of my very first action is going to be completely random.

Following the different links I see that is indeed the case: you get choices in this story, but you have no idea what will happen when you select each of the choices. This type of story can work with just a little more effort: in each case you could add a little more description in the page that might give a hint as to which option might be better. You might mention there are high rocks on the right side, giving the clue that you shouldn’t dodge right. You could describe that the insect has moved so that its most vulnerable section is facing you as a hint that it’s the right time to shoot, and so on.

I think the story and the setting are a good idea, and this really could be fleshed out into a much more interesting and much longer story. Thank you for sharing it with the site.
-- Ogre11 on 6/20/2018 12:59:32 PM with a score of 500
As far as I could tell, this storygame was put together properly with functioning links and (mostly) correct writing, but it just felt very bland.

As others have stated in the comments, the description and backstory are severely lacking. It did its job but at a bare minimum, as if the author was scared of being penalised for going over a word limit.

There are these Ulga creatures, but I don't know much about how they look other than they look like insects and they have wings. What does Jupiter's fourth moon look like, other than it's rocky? Has the protagonist ever been here before? Does he/she often venture out to other planets or moons, and if so, how do they compare to their current location? These little details are all things that could be added here and there, and I think it would enrich the experience for the story a little.

I did see you add details here and there about the habitats and commonly found locations of the Ugla, so that was promising. Maybe add another layer of information like that, and you could have yourself a living world inhabited by vibrant, life-like creatures.
-- 31TeV on 11/16/2016 9:44:18 AM with a score of 500
OK so, "Boomer" refers to what? Some sort of bullet firing gun, but is it a rifle, an SMG, an assault rifle, or some sort of futuristic other category?
-- 7layers on 4/5/2020 6:19:11 PM with a score of 500
short
-- jra123451 on 2/12/2020 3:54:15 PM with a score of 500
Cool action story.
-- PaulaAnneMason on 11/11/2018 2:01:42 PM with a score of 500
i didn't even get past the first level lol
-- UnbooundPhoenix on 10/11/2018 9:36:55 AM with a score of 0
It's very short, not bad, this is for beginners but i certainly wouldnt take this because its not so good.
-- Eliteeee on 11/9/2017 6:02:00 AM with a score of 700
Very short, needs more info as other comments have mentioned. Other than that very fast faced, I found it quite fun to read
-- ic456 on 3/11/2017 10:09:26 AM with a score of 500
Enjoyed the story, but maybe you should've put more stuff in it.
-- Person on 3/10/2017 4:43:07 AM with a score of 700
Cool
-- Specter5288 on 1/27/2017 9:32:35 PM with a score of 700
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