Cantina Band: Dusty Death in D-Minor
A
fan fiction
storygame by
jorose
Player Rating
3.78/8
"#550
overall
, #20 for
2006
"
Based on
129 ratings
since 09/04/2006
Played 1,213 times (finished 181)
Story Difficulty
4/8
"March in the swamp"
Play Length
2/8
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
Maturity Level
3/8
"Must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
Tags
Part of Series
Serious
If you think Star Wars made no contribution to the music world, think again. Not only is there John William's amazing compositions, but there's also the infamous.....
Cantina Band
!
Play as the head of the Modal Nodes (the real name of the band)! Your comfortable exsistence is shattered when your brother is involved in a mysterious speeder crash. While investigating, you run into dangerous stituations and evil villians. It'll take all of your wits to solve the mystery, unveil a vile plot, and make your next gig on time...and alive.
Good Luck, Have Fun, and
"May the Kloon Horn Be With You"
!
Player Comments
This isn't bad. Here are some thoughts:
- "The three beings are approachig the speeder fast. You need to make a decision....pronto!" Your grammar and spelling started off fairly good, then kind of dropped off a cliff a little bit towards the end and descended into the dreaded '!' and '...' abuse. Most of the issues are with spelling to be honest; you seem to have a lot of words where two letters are swapped around so it needs a proof-read, then another one.
- "Don't worry there's a sequel : ]" I'd put this in the description because it kind of detracts away from the ending.
- I actually quite liked the general plot and it helps that the setting doesn't particularly need to be fleshed out as long as you know what Star Wars is, which is a given assuming you don't live in one of those Amazon tribal communities that's shut off from the World. The writing isn't bad; I'd say it's above average for this site. Still, the average here leaves a lot to be desired, so you can always improve. I'd suggest maybe a little more description of the specific bar or the Mos Eisley Spaceport to get the reader a little more immersed.
- Some of the sound effects were... audibly questionable, 'FreEEEerf!' and 'BhraCRH!' being my two favourites. I find that restraining the urge to mash your keyboard with one hand tends to help with this.
- Not a fan of the font changes from the start to the second page. Personally, I feel like sticking it in italics would have looked nicer, but it was consistent thereon so we cool fam.
- Also with the start, the 'deadly news' thing was a little bit cliche and could have been more subtly written, but I guess it whipped up a tiny amount of tension.
- Of course, the length is an issue. Something like a Star Wars fanfic (fanfic? That sounds a bit wrong somehow in this context. I don't know... spinoff?) deserves more than 4000 words, which most people can write in a couple of hours.
- I don't really see why one branch basically became a Star Wars quiz, but you do seem pretty damn into Star Wars so I guess that explains it. Still, I feel that it was pretty unrealistic and detracted from the story a little, even if I did enjoy doing it! Also, the arbitrary 'which box represents the force?' thing was kind of lame, not gonna lie.
- "The second box is of a more modest size, and is made of craved wood." God, I know exactly the wood you're talking about. There isn't a day that goes by where I don't want that damn good wood.
Despite my criticism, the dialogue was pretty realistic, more so than I was expecting upon seeing that <4.00 rating when I first came across this game.
4/8. A proof-read could have bumped it up to 5/8.
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AzBaz
on 7/18/2017 7:57:53 AM with a score of 0
Very nicely written with good descriptions and plot. The variety of choices one has are also excellent. I don't see that it's necessarily linear, because of course you want to move the story forward. Some of the choices, however, could have branched a bit more instead of leading to instant death. Also, I would have liked more of the story! I felt it ended too quickly, right as I was figuring things out. Excellent job, though. Please keep contributing.
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madglee
on 9/6/2006 1:43:57 AM with a score of 0
It was fun, big fan of Star Wars and the Modal Nodes in particular. As well as the regular words being misspelled, there are a couple of Star Wars typos- it is a 'womp' not a 'wamp' rat, the raiders are Tuskens (Tuscans are people from Tuscany in Italy), and the instrument is called a kloo horn (not a kloon horn). Otherwise, a very enjoyable read
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TriliniousIII
on 9/15/2024 10:18:47 AM with a score of 0
kinda fun, Lando, with a few typos & stuff, and a few random deaths where I did the right thing but got shot. Ah well, such is life
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JohnX
on 2/29/2024 1:47:15 PM with a score of 0
meh
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Yummyfood
on 2/28/2022 1:15:55 PM with a score of 0
I clicked random things and still won and I feel great
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SpaghettiMan
on 10/2/2019 12:31:57 AM with a score of 0
It was great! I simply loved it, but there was a few spelling errors. Keep up the good work!
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GetWrecked
on 8/18/2018 5:19:31 PM with a score of 0
Not a Star Wars fan so i guess this just wasn't for me
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Robin8
on 7/9/2017 10:57:49 PM with a score of 0
It was very short. There some spelling and grammar issues, but an okay start to a larger story.
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BigRonn77
on 10/6/2016 12:40:04 PM with a score of 0
Meh... I wish there had been more than one way to not die
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— Nikerk05 on 3/2/2016 11:45:10 PM with a score of 0
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