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Played 741 times (finished 104)
"Walk in the park"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"Appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.
My first game. Pretty simple game about meeting a strange girl with a rabbit.
This was quite emotional, I liked it.
Your writing was powerful and despite this being a short story, I wouldn't call the feelings that I felt at the end to be simple :)
Both of the characters had sad stories, and the writing does a good job to portray them both as sympathetic. I liked that despite how short this was overall, you managed to make it both descriptive and engaging. Well done.
But while this is a wonderful little short story, it's not really a cyoa at all. I think that all of the choices do lead to the same destination at the end, so I would've liked that the little choices that were present had a bit more of a impact to the story. I certainly think that such a thing could have been pulled off, because this writing does show some promise.
At the end of the day, this was a very emotional short story. But I would like to see a bit more from you as a writer and how well this can be placed into another storygame.
on 3/25/2017 12:24:04 AM with a score of 0
I think what you have written is good and engaging, but it is basically two short scenes. I think if you expand this story a lot (make it a whole new story as ratings don't go away with unpublishing and republishing), giving more choices and more description of each event, this could blossom into something great.
on 2/29/2016 3:52:28 AM with a score of 0
This is quite a nice story though slightly unusual but refreshingly original which was nice. You have real writing talent here and I think you are good at drawing emotion out of the reader which leads me to suspect a Love and Dating story is out there somewhere waiting for you to write it... :) Overall quite a nice little short story.
on 2/28/2016 6:57:54 PM with a score of 0
It's the definition of 'short and sweet'.
on 6/9/2023 4:45:31 PM with a score of 0
Thanks for the game. Pretty fun.
— Not telling a random person my on 9/28/2022 11:12:01 PM with a score of 0
It was a great story I enjoyed reading it a lot!
— Harni on 6/17/2021 10:13:29 AM with a score of 0
Wow...that story genuinely tugged at my heartstrings. It was a lot better than I was expecting, given the length. The grammar was good, the flow of sentences was decent, and the overall message / tone was brilliant. There were a fair diversity of choices to choose from, as well. One of the better 2/8 length games.
on 1/16/2020 3:20:31 AM with a score of 0
Overall story was cute,but none of the actions had any value as in you could always get the same ending regardless of what you choose.
— ShiiChan on 6/27/2018 5:45:22 AM with a score of 0
Kind of a snow clone... but it still made me feel a tingle, so that's good! You should try to improve your writing. I know you can do it! :D
on 8/21/2016 11:08:02 PM with a score of 0
on 5/20/2016 9:49:41 AM with a score of 0
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