Empathy

This was quite emotional, I liked it.

Your writing was powerful and despite this being a short story, I wouldn't call the feelings that I felt at the end to be simple :)

Both of the characters had sad stories, and the writing does a good job to portray them both as sympathetic. I liked that despite how short this was overall, you managed to make it both descriptive and engaging. Well done.

But while this is a wonderful little short story, it's not really a cyoa at all. I think that all of the choices do lead to the same destination at the end, so I would've liked that the little choices that were present had a bit more of a impact to the story. I certainly think that such a thing could have been pulled off, because this writing does show some promise.

At the end of the day, this was a very emotional short story. But I would like to see a bit more from you as a writer and how well this can be placed into another storygame.

I think what you have written is good and engaging, but it is basically two short scenes. I think if you expand this story a lot (make it a whole new story as ratings don't go away with unpublishing and republishing), giving more choices and more description of each event, this could blossom into something great.

This is quite a nice story though slightly unusual but refreshingly original which was nice. You have real writing talent here and I think you are good at drawing emotion out of the reader which leads me to suspect a Love and Dating story is out there somewhere waiting for you to write it... :) Overall quite a nice little short story.

It's the definition of 'short and sweet'.

Thanks for the game. Pretty fun.

It was a great story I enjoyed reading it a lot!

Wow...that story genuinely tugged at my heartstrings. It was a lot better than I was expecting, given the length. The grammar was good, the flow of sentences was decent, and the overall message / tone was brilliant. There were a fair diversity of choices to choose from, as well. One of the better 2/8 length games.

Overall story was cute,but none of the actions had any value as in you could always get the same ending regardless of what you choose.

Kind of a snow clone... but it still made me feel a tingle, so that's good! You should try to improve your writing. I know you can do it! :D

-Charaxes

Pretty good.