Frozen Bones

Player Rating3.85/8

"#489 overall, #38 for 2012"
based on 118 ratings since 01/14/2014
played 780 times (finished 92)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

This is my first game (demo?). My original language is Norwegian.

I did not have a fixed story in my mind when I wrote this , but i let my imagination flow as freely as it could.

This game is about magic. Necromancy to be exact. Play it, read it, do what you want with it.

This will most likely not be finished, as I simply no longer have the inspiration i personally require to do so. If it would finish it, it would take some time, and this would just be a fraction of what i intended it to be. But it may be a nice story to pass a few minutes with. 

Player Comments

Eh, I guess it was ok...

It was incredibly linear and undescriptive at some points, for example, I feel weak, and darkness overwhelms me... then I have to end the game... that could have used a bit more detail and description. Did I die? Did I get lost or something?

The plot was really good in my opinion, and I found it interesting for a CYOA. The setting was also interesting, but more detail would have been better. I suppose the detail was sufficient, but more would have fleshed it out better in my opinion.

You did a great job with the spacing, and Nycto was right: it wasn't choppy. But I did notice a few chunks that could have been spaced apart better, put together, etc.

I didn't spot a lot of branching here, but there were a few choices. Despite having quite a lot of writing on some pages (although way more on some then others) this storygame was rather short.

-- MinnieKing on 3/21/2017 12:12:10 AM with a score of 0
This was interesting idea-wise, but I have some issues with it. The writing was nice, and wasn't choppy. The author did very well with making the sentences flow together without too much time skipped in between. It was a very complet story expressed in a shorter way than usual, so it was a bit fast-paced in some moments. I think that the author could have spread it out more and added more detail and background in between.

This is very, very linear. As I was reading, I noticed a lot of parts where it could be turned into a choice for the reader. Speaking of choices, there is no clues as to what happens with each choice, so the reader is forced to guess and hope that they chose the correct option. Like 95% of the author's here, they didn't proofread they're storygame, and now you've got one riddled with spelling and grammar errors that could have easily been avoided.

I hope in the future the author will take into consideration all of this and update his storygame. Just what I've got here will boost his rating tremendously and it could possibly become one of the better stories on the site.

-- Nyctophilia on 2/27/2017 6:01:00 PM with a score of 0
This was an interesting start, you built up a character of sorts. an NPC to interact with and, an overall goal to hook the player in.

Sadly this is clearly unfinished (As you warn people beforehand) and due to it's unfinished nature none of the good starts you made come to fruition.
-- FeanorOnForge on 10/21/2016 4:15:08 PM with a score of 0
Below will be spoilers. Do not read if you have not played the storygame.

The idea of this story is very good. I was already intrigued by the idea of becoming a necromancer and potentially wage war against humanity.

The fact that the story was not finished and ended at a point where you just start to delve deeper into the interesting part is very sad. It rips the reader from reaching the height of the plot and prevents you from being fully captivated by the story.
What you also lack is a lot of description and background. Why did the protagonist leave his grandma? Did he simply not like her? Why does he have a reason to want to become more powerful? Does he have enemies to destroy or someone he wants to save from the dead?
The scenery was not to well described. Always remember to not only use sight but also the other senses to let the reader immerse himself deeper into the story.

Another thing is that, even though I am not great at grammar myself, even I could spot some mistakes. For me that means it are mistakes that disrupt the flow of reading and make it hard to get behind what you want to tell us.

Because the story is clearly not finished but also has a very interesting theme and plot you get a 3/8 from me.
-- LJacko on 5/4/2020 8:00:39 AM with a score of 0
Ehh, did not feel like a choose your own adventure game. Choices were too limited. Other than that it was a good story line.
-- Jimmysutton on 3/14/2016 2:54:54 PM with a score of 0
It was just getting good and you stopped it?!?!? Please continue.
-- CurseOfTime on 2/15/2016 4:22:20 PM with a score of 0
I would like you to finish the book please. Good start.
-- Walker. on 11/6/2014 5:43:18 PM with a score of 0
Cliffhanger nice
-- hugo23 on 8/31/2014 4:36:32 PM with a score of 0
Finish the book. I want to kill things with dead people hahahahaha.
-- walker on 1/23/2014 6:12:53 PM with a score of 0
Awww, cliffhanger. I hope you finish it soon.
-- Amy2 on 10/26/2012 10:03:11 AM with a score of 0
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