Halfway Decent

Cheesy things taste delicious...

Your first romance is a good romance! Another beautifully sculpted piece without too much need of words.

God, you misunderestimate yourself. There is no such thing as "cheese" on this thing, it's filled with what I can see to be genuine emotion (at least during the most romantic times in a relationship).

Your wording is excellent, very few if there were any errors that I found. The storyline was not too grandiose, as it is only about the development of two people's love for each other, but you make up by meticulously fleshing it out with many details.

The progression of their ages after choices goes fast, but I like it that way. Sort of like documenting the points of interest in their lives (surely make-outs and intriguing things don't happen ALL the time, eh?).

But even this wasn't perfect. The ending felt lacking (at least the HAPPY ENDING which I got), because it's like you rushed to a final conclusion that you will live happily ever after with Candace, eveb though you only said something related to proclaiming how far you'll go just to maintain loving her.

But at least everything else was good, and that is why this story is worth every cent. 6/8.

Not bad.

I liked the writing style, and the emotion the characters felt were really easy to feel and relate to, thanks to the detail you provided about how the characters felt sad, or happy, or loving.

The branching was average. Some choices didn't seem to relate to the rest of the story at all (the first one or two choices), but later on I enjoyed finding the three endings.

This was really cute, and I liked seeing the relationship develop between two kids from when they were wee children to when they were grown.

However, it was very linear. I guess that's sorta impossible to avoid when you timeskip 5-8 years every page or two.

Character development was pretty good, I liked seeing the characters personalities develop as they grew older.

4/8, not bad at all.

This was pretty interesting to read, the pictures in the beginning were cute to say the least.

I would've liked to seen the romance properly build to be honest, because there's not much that we know about two of the main characters. The story almost seems rushed in a way with how much time passes with each choice, but it does redeem itself somewhat with having the choices at the end effect which ending that you'll achieve.

I honestly found the writing to be cute and charming in its own way, but there's not much here when it comes to depth and choices in this storygame. But for a first this isn't bad actually, the writing and romance and general could have used some expanding on however. I think stories like this one in particular should try to connect properly with the reader and make them feel and care about the characters, but there's not much characterization in this story unfortunately.

Despite some of my issues, I found this to be enjoyable enough. Good work! :)

Very linear, but a good first story I'd say. There's only 3 endings, but there is the potential for a lot more.

I would agree that this storygame is in fact halfway decent

Best dating game of all. Gave me a warm fuzzy feeling (no sus intended)

Honestly, I was looking for random game to play. I figured I'd start leaving reviews. I chose the path where I denied everything and everyone. I didn't want to speak. I didn't want to fall inlove. I didn't go out with the girl or the other girl and I didn't want to kiss her. yet I was still forced to feel some type of way about this girl when I really didn't want to. It seemed like a very romantic and cheesy game that just didn't stick with me. Yet, there were some snippets of writings that I enjoyed. Worth the play, Not sure if I'd replay.

Ha, a romance that's actually halfway decent!

I loved it! But then again I love any kind of cheesy romance...

It would've been nice to have more endings and to have the earlier choices affect the story more, but I liked the concept and it was well-written. Keep up the good work!