Merry Christmas, Tamara!
mystery / thriller
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
Played times (finished )
"No possible way to lose"
"Make sure not to blink"
"Appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.
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This would've been a decent Christmas storygame if it included more detail at the beginning and a small problem.
So, let's start with detail. I can tell this takes place in a snowy field of sorts? And Tamara and her friends are wolves or dogs. It would've been nice to introduce us to things like a cave scene, them begging Tamara to come outside and play with them, and then somebody throwing a snowball at Tamara. Then, we would get a sense that Tamara hates Christmas, if that was the route you were going for.
Now, let's move on to the small problem. Tamara hates Christmas. Maybe something happened on Christmas one day that made her hate it. A small conflict like that can help drive the story into a solution on how her friends can make her like Christmas again.
Overall, I will have to admit, this was a nice short story, but details and a conflict that is resolved would've been nice as well. 4/8.
on 11/19/2020 7:08:03 AM with a score of 0
I rated this a 2 out of sympathy for your effort. I would explain why this is so awful but I couldn’t be bothered,
on 10/6/2020 5:29:37 PM with a score of 0
... What a strange bunch of names your friends have.
on 7/14/2020 12:34:03 PM with a score of 0
it was cute
on 6/10/2020 4:33:26 PM with a score of 0
Wait...what? This is confusing, and this story should have something like an intro. Who is Levi, Tamara, etc.? This would have been quite good if it was part of a bigger storygame.
on 8/31/2018 8:38:07 PM with a score of 0
on 2/2/2018 4:55:47 PM with a score of 0
Not thrilled. Spelling/grammar are really bad. Story's too simple and brief. Not worth the time. Sorry. :(
on 1/11/2017 8:19:29 PM with a score of 0
VERY SHORT. Seemed more of a set up for a bigger story. The writing isn't too bad and I'm sure we would have gotten to know the characters better had the story been longer.
on 11/28/2016 8:19:09 AM with a score of 0
Easy as pie.
on 2/29/2016 5:52:04 PM with a score of 0
Morale of the story: when it doubt blame everyone until someone panics and confesses :D
on 5/27/2015 1:37:39 AM with a score of 0
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