Project Origin: Atrophy (Part 2)
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Played 14 times (finished 2)
"Trek through the forest"
"Not going to lose any sleep"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.
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Bringing back this little slice of fan-fiction by Mizal's request. It's old and was written before I really understood how to do a CYOA, but enjoy it anyway lol.
You did an excellent job of making the story comprehensible even for someone who hasn't played the game it's based on. As a fanfic, it's quite well written. (A touch melodramatic for my taste, but it's clear from the comments that many people found it affecting.)
As a storygame, I think it could be improved. There was a very long stretch of pages with no choice towards the end, which I think contributed to my overall feeling that it just wasn't a very compelling story. Horrible things happened to Alma. And then more horrible things happened. And then I could choose between screaming and weeping. And then more horrible stuff happened.
I didn't feel as though anything I did would affect the outcome of the story in the slightest.
on 8/30/2013 9:38:11 AM with a score of 0
People often don't understand the monsters perspective. They just assume they kill because they are evil. Most of the time there is a reason for their madness. A preditor is hungry so it eats a person, just like a person get hungry and eats a cow. It is only dark and morbid from the prey's perspective. Love this series. keep up with the shattered perceptions.
on 8/19/2012 11:16:01 AM with a score of 0
It's amazing how you manage to hold onto the emotional rage of the character throughout the entire story. It's so dark and morbid, but in a way that captures your attention and keeps it until the end. I for one cannot wait until she gets her revenge!
on 8/11/2012 1:27:03 AM with a score of 0
I need more..this story really teaches you that monsters aren't born but made.
on 7/12/2017 4:43:47 AM with a score of 0
Good continuation of part one.
on 8/15/2016 12:54:27 PM with a score of 0
This story reminds me of my past through out the centuries people with special gifts are always hunted down and tortured in the name of "science". i apreciate what you have done.
— The guardian of souls on 4/27/2016 10:52:35 AM with a score of 0
Okay... I liked it.
on 4/2/2016 1:19:50 PM with a score of 0
on 9/19/2015 8:32:12 PM with a score of 0
Another great entry. Just as good as the 1st part. Hope part 3 is still in the works
on 5/25/2015 7:39:58 PM with a score of 0
on 11/9/2014 11:37:13 PM with a score of 0
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