Player Comments on WORST DAY OF YOUR LIFE!!!

That was, well, something I guess. Two clicks in and it was over for me on the first readthrough. I’m not necessarily opposed to quick deaths, but this one wasn’t even predicted. If you’re going to have a quick end game link, you should probably give the reader some kind of clue that the choice they’re about to take will lead to death. That way they can still choose it, but they might be informed.

Beyond that the story is really, really random. I get that there was a time on this site when the utter randomness stories were favored, but this one really doesn’t even make sense many times. Potential authors today, please take note of this story and do not follow its lead. Many pages are very short and have just enough detail to tell you about the insanity that might be the next page. There is some decent writing in the story, there’s just not really enough story to allow this one to stand on its own.a

That was pretty enjoyable, but taking into account the length and amount of words in each page, it could be much, much better. There's only about two sentences for each page, and they really need to be lengthened and structured.

At the start of the story, the "worst day of your life", the actual title of the story, has already happened. Coming in, I expected to actually experience it, so that needs to fixed. (Or change the title according to how the story goes).

One of my biggest peeves in any storygame is dying after clicking one or two links. I think I prefer Mizal's method of starting off a storygame with a few pages of background and story development, which is important and neccessary in every story. It is also something that this one lacks, so that needs to be fixed immediately.

The random events happening that are unusual in the normal society seems to be the way most new authors tend to lean toward in terms of humor in their storygames. This is a mistake. It can be funny at first, but it loses its luster once it becomes a normal thing. The new ideas of humor need to be reviewed and revised.

The writing is typical of an up and coming author, which in other words means it needs to be improved. Every author knows that no matter how well you write, there is still more room for improvement. Reading through the articles and the featured stories on the site is an excellent way of improving writing ability, along with just browsing through the storygames of EndMaster, one of the top writers on the site.

With a carefully chosen update, this could be much better and a nice story to add to the site in the whole. Fixing up the grammar and spelling will also aid you, since there are a few mistakes here that can be easily found and fixed.

3/8

hahahaha

3 words.
I. LOVE. THIS.
What's up with all the 0 scores? Steve coming in with assault rifle caught me SUPER off-guard. I guess people have really different ideals.

super weird and random

This was.... strange. I didn’t like it much.

It was amazing, I loved it.I haven't laughed that much for a story game ever

This story was so random, it was actually decent. I want a sequel to this or something cause this is really good.

The author is absent from the site for quite a long time but I'm going to drop this here for future help.Titles all in caps do not attract people. Also themes that are copied are boring. I am not a hater not I take it for serious.Go do Math

It is kind of stupid and I'll designed but it is quite fun. Please make it longer.

This game is extremely funny and should not be taken seriously!!! X''''''DDDDD

This is amazing i swear.

This was awesome and I still don't know why. It should suck, it's far too random for its own good and there's death links galore, but it was just goofy and I found it entertaining.

fun and funny

Awesome

What is this(: Hilarious 6/8

My head got bitten off by a giant momma bird which is random as hell and my frickin TEACHER shot my hand off who makes this messed up stuff
PS it was pretty good

... Really??? 1/8

It was random and pretty funny. :D

Was killed by a giant bird, after accidentally hitting a girl scout with an golf club, punching the pizza guy and killing the teacher that shooted off my hand.

Happy ending! Robbed a bank and moved to NY! Yay (nah, just joking... kids, never do this in real life).

I was killed by the octopi-bed.

Got killed by crazy Steve. I admit i did it in purpose, just to be funny.

Well, that really was a bad day of my life, wasn't it? A guy shot my hand off, I was outta napkins, Pizza was too expensive... The whole ordeal is here. I'd say about a 4/8. Neutral. It's funny, but it's a little bit random clicking to see what happens.

This was a pretty random game. I enjoyed it, But if you could have fleshed out the characters more, It could be even better.

I actually laughed on the girl scout page, so that's something.

The write was commicicly terribal.

Awesome

Pretty good! I'll take this over anything.

Very funny and random. These are my kind of games. It reminds me of a series of mine that I have yet to post on this site but is still only on paper. "Bob the chicken."

OMG BEST GAME EVER. It's just simply... Pure genius. So many different ways to die, so many people to kill. I mean srsly, how epic is it that a meteor asteroid thing would hit someone you hate then magic healing powder growing your hand back? 10/10! Well done! BEST GAME EVER!

Random. It was a random story that's all. Actually it doesn't even have a plot or a story at all.
Well, it was interesting but I didn't really enjoy it.

Very very random

Heh. VERY random. I loved seeing that stupid Steve get run over by a truck. That'll teach him.

Well it was certainly random but that's the only thing I found enjoyable about it. Good for people who like random stuff I guess :)

This was a bit fun and humorous, in some crazy way.

It appears that I apparantly cannot type or move my arms, because I was eaten by an octupus... which actually was my bed. Oh well.

I kind of liked this story becuase of the randomness, which was both interesting, yet entertaining.

4/8.

This isn't the best story in the world, but it entertained me for a short while.

Very random and fun to read.

I love the funniness and random movements

It was very random

Dafuq did I just read? Gave it an 8 because what the fuck?

So fucking random

This is actually the best thing I have ever read

Far far away...

This is a piece of shit

EPIC!!!

See, I love random humor and all but... Am I the only person who doesn't find it hilarious when a game repeatedly goes, "You bump into a person you know. He tries to murder you for no apparent reason."

It's quite funny, I guess and alright. Not the best I've played ever but it kept me amused for a while.

LAWLLLL, I LOVE YOUR STORIES!!!!THE GIRL SCOUT BIT WAS PURE GOLD!!!! 88888888888888!!!!

Nice?

It didn't make any sense to me. The only good parts that I saw were the amount of choices that were available. Other than that, I had no idea what Steve was doing shooting at me for no reason, how he got all those weapons, and even where the story was going.

I think you should try again.

2/8

Fun! Stupid! Random!

The ending needs more EXCITEMENT!

I played this while my crap rating was about 8 and now it's at 4 and crap. Fun game!

One of my best friends died by getting run over so I find that quite offensive -_-

it waz dum...im sorry i just dont think it was that fun dude.try harder, and have a grat time and no hard feelings

okay.

I thought it would be good but it was just too stuipd. If only we could have done mean things that were realistic. Non linear though.

my life is great thanks to steve and unsolved mysteries. I'm going to write a letter to mark hamill and chat about gas prices now. Bye!

i was having a bad day so this really helped me feel better

im sorry, but this was a very bad story. so please make a BETTER story. sorry

Not very long, but very funny all the same.

Very funny. It was incredibly entertaining!

This game is hillarious

Everything Maze Man touches is comedic gold.

This game has given me the best day of my life.

Man, thats some funny *honk* you got right there! lol! 8/8

Lol your'e hilarious.

LOL that was hillarious.

o m g.you roxorz!!!!!!!!!

Kind of random and lacking in structure, but I've read worse. I kind of like pineapple pizza, though....

Hahaha.

Kind of original, but you can tell you're trying to be random.

At least I got a cool way to die, not like that loser Steve.

It was ok I enjoyed the beggining but the end bored me so...yeah. 6 1/2 out of 10

Hrm, not really any real plot or interesting choices. Everyone has random hard to get weapons - even I had some problems getting an RPG that one time from my mob contacts - so just ridiculously unbelievable, for me.

Hehe... my valuable crap. Funny!

Random, but not very linear and just a great game. It was very entertaining and really funny. Nice job!

Oh, and there was a lot of crap. Now my computer smells like crap. Just kidding.

great options

Hahahaha that was great, A sissy way to die, hahahaa

the worst day of my life usually involves unsolved mysteries too lol good game from you as always.

This book was 100% hillarious!

this was all about crap

its not that bad just to kwik

LOLOLOLOLOLOLOL!!!!!
This is one REALLY funny game! Your teacher shoots your hand off...LOL...^v^

HILARIOUS!

Pretty kewl

i think it's funny and cool.

How can I thank Unsolved Mysteries for how my life is great? All I did was watch it and Steve came in and destroyed everything. I could have been watching Wheel of fortune when Steve came, or Jepoardy! Why Unsolved Mysteries? Most of the people on Unsolved Mysteries were kidnapped and killed, and then fed to cannibals on the far coast of South America for billions of dollars that they use for toilet paper and then for seasoning after use as toilet paper!

cool, I like being mean and violent!

Jesse is a latino.
Darryl is an entity.
Shaylee is pretty.
Issaiah is cute.
Darryl is an entity.





Mr. Garnass greases his armpits twice a week.

I won! Yay! Death to Steve! Death to the Girl Scout! Death to the Pizza Guy!

Very nice!

Wow... that's quite intriguing...<br>It was an interesting story, i suppose.

that was one of the funniest storys

Thats one Sweet ass game.

That was really really funny you gotsta make some more of these<br>

Me: This makes no sense, BUT I WON A MILLION BUCKS!<br>Someguy: *whispers into ear*<br>Me: I DIDN'T ACTUALLY WIN ALL THAT MONEY!?

the games cool, i got a million bucks

I can't understand why this game isn't featured. Mazeman, I can tell your humor isn't as appreciated to everyone else as to me. This game had me falling out of my chair.

Oh god... this was the funniest game i have ever played. Mazeman is a comic genius.

Yeah! I killed that Steve! GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO ME!!!

I really liked it! it actaully wasent bored!

That sucked. Meaness alone is not enough to make a game funny. Though I do fine the octopus death amusing . Why isn't there an option to put the die hard dvds in a mircrowave?

hahaha! I thought it was funny stuff. Completely random, and funny! Good stuff!

i enjoyed this game! the whole NASA thing and the letters to mark hammil...where do you get your ideas? this is the funniest thing i'v ever seen! whoever you are, mazeman, pleez pleez pleez make more games like this!

It is significant. funny. Tommy Likey.<br>

hmmm... O.k.

The first couple pages of this game had me falling out of my chair. Random acts of violence to random individuals (like the pizza guy) just because you had a bad day is an awesome awesome idea for a game. I'm not going to category feature this game just because the second half of it gets a little less random, and more kind hearted - like you start hurting people because they intend to hurt you. geez where's the fun in that. LOL, but seriously if you change the ending so that it's as fun as the beginning I swear I'll feature it! But don't change it just for that, it's a great game as is. march

this game was very funny! better than lost keys and weird day