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Since Algae is boring and cannot into entertain, I shall tell a story.  

Once upon a time, there was a pink reindeer, and all the other reindeer made fun of him.  Then he roped. 

THE END

I blame my boring-ness on my glasses.

Since when do glasses make a person boring?

Observe a prime example of the directionality problem.

Pretty weak, I bet a lot of people here could do better with 21 words. They can reply here to prove it.

My favorite short story:

 

“Once there was an ugly barnacle, he was so ugly that everyone died. THE END.” - Patrick Star

Another sleepless night lying wide awake in bed. Restless without her warmth, his fingers caress a pink ribbon. I miss you.  

Good job being the only person so far to make a serious attempt.

Thanks. It's a slow day at work lol. 

Post Message. I can’t wait to read all the comments! Refresh. None yet? Refresh. Why does no one like me? Refresh.

I am sad because I can only see when I am wearing my glasses and I do not like wearing glasses.

I am happy because I am not some four-eyed normie fag.  For I have discovered SOFT CONTACTS, the secret to happiness.

Hey no need to go there I’m just a friendly little goblin who always enjoys a good fight out of class.

Mizal where is your twenty-one word post because your previous post is actually twenty-two so I believe it is now invalid.

It was not attempting to be 21 words, although I see I got very close without even trying and am now impressed with myself. It was simply what it says it is, an invitation for people who are not as confused and dumb as Subtopewds to reply to it.

Wow, that was rude I was just saying you should try to make a 21 word story.

There was a cricket of Veracruz

Who came to this thread to be amused.

When you called Mizal rude, and when her words were not crude

You left gryllus very confused.

Which part was rude?

"dumb as Subtopewds"

 

E:sorry never mind I was miss reading that's my bad.

He was rich, powerful, handsome. She was lucky to have him. Giddy, she poked the needle through the condom wrapper. Checkmate.

And that's why you bring your own rubber. "Giddy" is such a powerful word here. It makes me feel slightly uncomfortable that she has so much pleasure and excitement poking a hole in a condom. Actually, disturbingly uncomfortable lol. Makes me think she's the type of person that fills journals writing his name over and over. Maybe on one page she writes his name with little hearts around the pages. On another, it's her name with his last name pretending they're married. There's probably a nicely decorated shoebox filled with sketches of him under her bed. Remember gentlemen: "When in doubt, pull out". 

Edit: Spelling.

Contrary to Ninja, "giddy" made me laugh aloud because it perfectly captured that madly satisfied expression on her face for me.

Good job, you also timed your narration to perfection.

Get the feeling Algae is gae, gee.  

Subtopewbs sucks balls and is banned.  

AustinC may have caught AutismC. Bless his heart.

One down, only two remaining.

I’m not looking to get banned,

and since I’m averagely literate,

dealing with me is just something you’ll have to stand.

Do you mean Gay

Could be a hard or soft G, depending on dialect.

I’d rather be autistic, out of the three,

Since sucking balls and being gay is definitely not my cup of tea.

 

I agree.

*wop triggered*

This generously undercooked carne GuISADA, stewed in just a gallon of mayonnaise for color and freshness, is-a perfect!

My father, the Shogun's decapitator, decapitated a hundred lords. Wasn't scared; Shogun was: sent ninja spies to kill him. Everything changed.

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Shortened from the intro clip to Liquid Swords from the movie Shogun Assassin (1980):

When I was little, my father was famous
He was the greatest samurai in the empire
And he was the Shogun's decapitator
He cut off the heads of a hundred and thirty-one lords
It was a bad time for the empire
The Shogun just stayed inside his castle and he never came out
People said his brain was infected by devils
My father would come home, he would forget about the killings
He wasn't scared of the Shogun, but the Shogun was scared of him
Maybe that was the problem
Then, one night, the Shogun sent his ninja spies to our house
They were supposed to kill my father but they didn't
That was the night everything changed

Even if it's a little bit evident you had to chop off words, especially in the second sentence, it still makes for an interesting premise for a story (I've never watched the movie).

Call answered,

Relic granted,

Guardian defeated,

Boarder crossed,

Aid acquired,

Temptation averted,

Conclusion commenced,

Defeat tasted,

Death avoided,

Victorious yet changed.

You’re very good at condensing writing.

21 words Hero's Journey, true literary perfection.

Jokes aside, I think it could be a lot better if the words used were more carefully selected. Right now it is... a little cheap. Honestly, I only made it so I'd have at least one 'story' in each of these threads, but it shows how using someone else's template can really help guide the creation process (and you can always make your own template too).

I do find it neat since it helps me have a 'complete' story, even if generic and formulaic, but I think it is nice to have as a comparison for the other stories which are more original (such as those with neat twists).

Anyway, I'll patiently await the 11 word thread for now, tho it will be interesting to see what else people put up into these current ones till then.

We were getting fun with six word stories in the Discord awhile back, I think that's the limit.

Weirdly I've had a harder time with 21 words than even those.

*border

But this really is a nice condensed version, I might use this if I ever get around to redoing my profile. Nice job on what is technically the only complete story in here.

Compliments received.

Pirate with a ship's wheel down front of pants; "Hey doc, this thing's been driving me nuts!"

Dock does not answer.

These tunnels just keep going. Phone doesn't provide much light.

Something is following me. I hear breathing. My battery flashes red.

I liked the premise of this tiny story. The first half didn't build the suspense nearly as much as the second half, so it's more of a slow burn. I think I would have rearranged certain elements, perhaps describing the breathing before the realization of being followed. This would allow your narration to build the tension upon itself more. "I hear breathing. Something is following me." seems to increment the suspense a little more strongly. I did like your use of the cell phone to add a sense of immediacy to the desperate circumstances, as well.

Your narration plants me firmly into the head of the protagonist and the short, blunt series of observations implicitly describes the state of mind that the character is experiencing well.

Well done. I enjoyed this, especially as I read it over and over during my response, discovering more elements that were well crafted and placed each time.

You pierce his body with the trocar. Preparing a body is a messy affair.

At least he would be dead soon!