Player Comments on Light Space
Wow. A very intricate and well executed plot.
Can't help being a little disappointed with the ending, though. My granddaughter said I survived an accident and told stories of jumping into the future etc, yet the ending implies that everything that happened is negated and everything goes back to normal. In other words, my actions can change entire histories. But then, when the coordinates were input the first time, I caused something that had happened already...
I feel that a better ending would have been one minor change:
The coordinates my granddaughter gave me weren't necessarily those of my initial destination (she's further in the future, and the ship is most likely in a different location.) So, when Karl and I emerge in a different place than expected it's taken to be some kind of malfunction (accident), even though I protest that explanation. This way it links up with her story.
-- Paul on 6/4/2012 10:33:13 AM with a score of 0
This is good writing. I noticed that you generally had one overriding arc, and you set the decisions to (more or less) lead the reader to that conclusion. I really like the idea of the reader having the ability to pick up things; it's a nice touch. The only critisim that I would have is that at the climax of the story it very much reminds me of Star Trek: Next Generation episodes of "Data Squared" and "Cause and Effect". Be careful not to reinvent the wheel in Sci-Fi.
-- Brian on 4/4/2011 9:35:00 PM with a score of 0
Beautifully written as always tsmpaul, but I think this story is your best based on sheer creativity and smart execution. Tackling time is no easy matter and you pulled it off brilliantly! I also love all the pictures you created - they have this muted feel which adds to them somehow. Plenty of choices, just the right length, felt very satisfied. One of, if not the best, stories on the site.
on 3/30/2007 2:51:21 PM with a score of 0
Meh. I've had better. Maybe research the science stuff more first?
-- BobHuman on 6/12/2013 11:01:48 PM with a score of 0
brilliant mission, though the ending was a bit anti-climatic
-- John on 6/11/2013 12:51:37 AM with a score of 0
I enjoyed it. Thank you!
-- Bob on 6/9/2013 12:25:27 AM with a score of 0
My brain hurts, confusing but damn awesome! Way to go!
-- blefferson on 6/2/2013 7:45:16 AM with a score of 0
love all the time travel
-- candace on 5/22/2013 4:16:02 AM with a score of 0
Okay, that was amazing. And awesome. And perfectly paced. And everything. No criticisms.
on 5/21/2013 5:20:52 PM with a score of 0
confusing but good!
on 5/21/2013 7:19:04 AM with a score of 0
This has to be one the better choose your own adventure stories that i have read on this site. Thanks for posting it.
-- LostCiv3189 on 5/18/2013 8:28:37 PM with a score of 0
i wish i got to blow stuff up... however shooting pirates was awesome.... acl class suxs
-- boredhighschooler on 5/13/2013 12:50:21 PM with a score of 0
its fun but you have to read it not press bottons or youll get killed
on 5/3/2013 11:16:39 PM with a score of 0
lite way fun if bored ....
-- yo_mama on 5/2/2013 9:50:32 AM with a score of 0
It's kinda linear,but the sci-fi element and time-travel logic makes up for it.
Keep up the good work!
on 5/1/2013 10:50:49 AM with a score of 0
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-- dds on 5/1/2013 9:57:21 AM with a score of 0
-- kj on 4/30/2013 9:58:03 AM with a score of 0
this is sooooo aggervating. -_-
-- Tiffany on 4/30/2013 9:58:01 AM with a score of 0
Oh my gosh the logic used to make this is unbelievable.
-- Michelle on 4/28/2013 3:47:40 PM with a score of 0
Frustrating... I thought the story was very interesting and well-written, but it felt like it wasn't a choose your own adventure because no matter what I did I ended up in the same place. It was like I was being funneled down a path; I could choose the order in which I decided to do things, but I couldn't change the things I had to do. So it'd be nice if I had more choices. I felt like I had no choice the whole time.
-- A Person on 4/25/2013 4:38:11 PM with a score of 0
I thought it was a rad experience for young sexy minds and all the brothas and sistas should play it for years to come. I mean, its got space, its got time travel, its got Karl. Like seriously, who wouldn't want to play a rad and sexy game that not only has space and pirates and stuff, but Karl. I give this game a 10 out of 8. I hope you fill the minds of sexy, beautiful sci-fi fans for years to come, you sexy author, you.
-- Coolio on 4/21/2013 12:13:18 AM with a score of 0
Meh.....Im not a travle forward/back and allover time stories kinda guy so....I didn't like it
on 4/15/2013 12:16:42 PM with a score of 0
I really enjoyed this story, I thought the you being at the time and the other you doing something was pretty cool.
-- Elvis on 4/2/2013 6:22:28 PM with a score of 0
very well written, fantastic imagination, i just enjoyed it... thanks and hope to read more from u
-- roshan on 4/1/2013 11:17:04 AM with a score of 0
That was an exciting and very touching story game. I am really big on time travel and alternate dimensions, the non-linearity of time, and you scratched that itch. Thank you for making this fun game.
-- steve on 3/31/2013 5:38:56 PM with a score of 0
I thought this was amazingly well written and I loved all the twists and turns! Great job :)
-- Edward on 3/29/2013 5:50:55 PM with a score of 0
Nice story line,Though the thing i really like about this game is that there are pictures that gives you a better image of how it looks like
-- Tom on 3/26/2013 8:48:19 AM with a score of 0
I enjoyed this game. I only have one complaint but its more or less nitpicking so I'll get to it later. I really enjoyed the story and how it all worked out. You could tell that you put a lot of effort into it and I enjoyed it immensely.
Now for my one nitpick.
(This does include spoilers)
There is a part in the story where you can be sucked into space and it causes you to die. However the way you described the death was inaccurate. (I know its not a big deal and I just thought I'd tell you because I personally think its an interesting little bit of information) In space you wouldn't flash freeze as you described because there is no medium to suck the heat away from you. The only way you would freeze is through radiation of heat which would take HOURS and HOURS to fully freeze your body. Secondly, the worst thing you'd have to worry about is the air being ripped out of your lungs and all of your intestines tightening up until there isn't any room left in them. But again this is mostly just me being nitpicky. Loved the story.
on 3/26/2013 1:09:09 AM with a score of 0
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-- kbbg jfn on 3/25/2013 2:06:06 AM with a score of 0
It's very interesting. I died though, so I'm going to try again.
on 3/11/2013 10:44:45 PM with a score of 0
Amazing that you were able to keep such track on all the changes in time/location!!! Really impressive. Interesting story and a fun adventure!
on 3/10/2013 3:37:33 PM with a score of 0
very strange game but fun
on 2/28/2013 3:09:28 PM with a score of 0
i just remembered these style of books from my childhood and i love how adult versions are available online, thank you.
-- matt on 2/27/2013 2:26:44 PM with a score of 0
Nice Story :-) I enjoyed every minute of it
on 2/21/2013 3:49:13 PM with a score of 0
it took me a while but i think il try this again
-- Addie on 2/21/2013 2:36:37 PM with a score of 0
At the end, he does not remember the young woman, but how was he able to re-tell the story that he met his granddaughter in the ship?
on 2/15/2013 10:00:57 PM with a score of 0
Nice story, very long and good. Not enough action parts, and some parts were more chanceish.
-- Ali on 2/9/2013 2:44:29 PM with a score of 0
-- 0.o on 2/9/2013 12:38:01 PM with a score of 0
a bit too easy, it seems? I might just have gotten lucky, but the story felt quite linear... Still, I'm always glad to be able to play one of your stories :)
-- Laforet on 2/3/2013 1:24:40 AM with a score of 0
on 1/29/2013 1:02:45 PM with a score of 0
Maybe it's that I'm attention deficit, but I simply got bored reading. I think it would be better if it moved faster. Also, vary confusing. You should try it, everyone, its actually vary good, and he put tuns of work into it. Sorry!
on 1/27/2013 7:22:42 PM with a score of 0
Epic. Just, epic.
-- KirbyPatch on 1/26/2013 2:05:22 AM with a score of 0
pretty fun. i would like to see more wrighting from you :D
on 1/23/2013 3:03:57 PM with a score of 0
great very fun love the idea
-- Ryan on 1/19/2013 6:52:48 PM with a score of 0
That was an awesome game! Very well written, and just a cool concept. Definitely one I'd play again. Nice use of weapons, and nice characters - and SPACE PIRATES! Awesome :)
on 1/8/2013 11:54:05 AM with a score of 0
awesome, you should make a second one, It's awesome
-- mibattles101 on 1/1/2013 7:40:54 PM with a score of 0
Good sci-fi experience!
-- Kiele on 12/31/2012 5:03:20 AM with a score of 0
Good sci-fi experience!
-- Kiele on 12/31/2012 5:03:20 AM with a score of 0
Very detailed game. BRILLIANT idea. When I play this game I really get caught up in the story, and I feel like I'm actually in the spaceship.
on 12/22/2012 6:39:33 PM with a score of 0
I thought it was very good. I liked the ending, how it implied death, but could be interpreted in many ways
-- FATBOY88 on 12/21/2012 8:56:26 PM with a score of 0
Interesting plot. This is the first story I've read on this site, so unfortunately I don't have a good base of comparison.
-- SSK on 12/17/2012 11:40:44 PM with a score of 0
This is a great story, thanks for making it.
I really enjoyed it and found very few errors, and the concepts were very interesting.
-- defender on 12/16/2012 10:58:28 PM with a score of 0
Great story for beginners.
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on 12/10/2012 12:54:04 PM with a score of 0
Nice plot and choices. It really feels like your there. Nice job
-- Levi on 12/7/2012 10:47:02 PM with a score of 0
Wow! That was so suspenseful and crazy. The whole time I was strongly hoping I would not die or end up a a dead end. My choices were good, and I ended up jumping successfully. That was interesting and confusing. You'd almost think that after successfully jumping the story would repeat, but then,
the story will repeat when the granddaughter is older.
Time paradoxes can get so frustrating to think about! Great story.
-- IJS on 12/2/2012 12:16:01 AM with a score of 0
Its awesome but it gave me headaches!! Mind raping device
on 12/1/2012 8:04:21 PM with a score of 0
Creative and mind-bending. Well done!
on 11/26/2012 10:51:49 PM with a score of 0
This book is a very exiting and good book but some times theirs is a bit to much bits where you die they should be more happy ending but when I started reading this book it got in too my mind like it was real its a killer book
-- Arabella on 11/15/2012 4:40:45 AM with a score of 0
I like this story because you can pick what you want to do like kill the person.. :) very happy
-- Smith alfred pacaro on 11/12/2012 7:43:22 PM with a score of 0
I may simply be lucky or even careful but I managed to finish the game and get the "best" ending? in fifteen minutes. Likely just a fluke to pick all the perfect selections. All in all though it was a pretty good story. Only complaint is I didn't feel as though I was met with any difficulty.
on 11/7/2012 6:02:12 PM with a score of 0
This was a great story! I only died twice, and the time warping was done perfectly! Thanks again!
-- Ethan on 10/29/2012 11:05:36 PM with a score of 0
Good story, I got blown up by a grenade though!
-- James Edwards on 10/29/2012 9:12:20 PM with a score of 0
on 9/21/2012 6:48:34 PM with a score of 0
Coolest online choose ur own adventure I've played so far I'm gonna hoP in again and try again I didnt make it very far the first time and I'm excited to try again!
-- Rtc on 9/21/2012 2:52:37 PM with a score of 0
This was pretty fun! But I will say I was immediately yanked out of the story when I announced to my granddaughter that my name is Michael Dobbs...because I'm a girl in real life. :-/ I'm not sure that can be fixed, but maybe for future projects you'd do better to write a plot that doesn't specify/limit gender.
on 9/21/2012 12:19:21 PM with a score of 0
Wonderful! The twists and actions were fantastic. It peaked my interests. This was just awesome - plot twists for the win!
-- Trilar on 9/13/2012 6:58:43 PM with a score of 0
Awesome, simply awesome
-- Lenin on 8/28/2012 2:24:05 PM with a score of 0
I loved this.^_^ I read it about a year ago and came back and decided to reread it again today! This story is truly unique, and I love the way you handled time travel. You have a gift for creating fascinating stories! This is one of the best on this site! Bravo, Bravo!!!!!
on 8/18/2012 5:36:42 AM with a score of 0
Very nice and intricate use of time travel. Well done!
on 8/12/2012 11:59:46 PM with a score of 0
very good. could of had more endings on the pirate ship, and mayhbe more use of karl. after all, time dont matter on this ship.. thanks for the story.
-- curt on 7/30/2012 10:01:29 PM with a score of 0
It was really cool. Thanks for the experience and keep up the good work!
-- Deon Cortez on 7/20/2012 6:43:33 PM with a score of 0
liked the game, liked the paradox :D
on 7/18/2012 4:12:01 PM with a score of 0
really confusing in the begining,but awesome in the end!8/8
on 7/5/2012 6:04:34 PM with a score of 0
A fun, short time-waster. It's got a simple, yet complex story that definitely grabbed me.
on 7/3/2012 6:30:45 AM with a score of 0
Ummmm.... Words can't describe how good this is.
on 6/26/2012 5:36:43 AM with a score of 0
This is really fun, but I'm a bit confused. If I don't remember what happened, and I don't tell my grand daughter, how will my past self survive? Will I cease to exist past this day when current time reaches the time that my grand daughter will meet my past past self. Oh gosh, that has my head spinning. Thank godness there is no such thing as time travel. Probably do more bad then good.
-- Kristen on 6/23/2012 7:22:40 PM with a score of 0
even better than Reeses' Cups®
-- fffdf on 6/14/2012 2:15:41 PM with a score of 0
It's a fairly good story for how short it is. I would recommend this to anyone that has a few extra minutes for a quick and interesting story.
on 6/11/2012 5:06:55 PM with a score of 0
short, but good!
-- cm on 6/5/2012 5:23:44 PM with a score of 0
-- lolzers on 6/3/2012 5:00:38 PM with a score of 0
Very engaging, great writing
on 6/2/2012 11:45:19 AM with a score of 0
Love this. =D it was very fun, the only problem was that while the whole time I was trying to blow up everything it seemed not to work and even send me on a different path. This bug makes it more or less a great thing to poop on... =D
-- Nightshade on 5/31/2012 9:36:34 PM with a score of 0
A story that can make you feel fear and manages some time travel in a smart way.
on 5/31/2012 1:29:00 AM with a score of 0
Wish I remembered my G.D.
on 5/26/2012 11:54:05 PM with a score of 0
Should have more mystery
-- K on 5/24/2012 12:08:37 AM with a score of 0
pretty good, but confusing
on 5/15/2012 7:31:50 PM with a score of 0
even lightspace needs to stop t a reststop once and a while
on 5/13/2012 2:59:19 PM with a score of 0
Weird... but nice...
on 5/7/2012 11:25:25 AM with a score of 0
Hmm...I don't think the people rating this story so low understand it completely.
It's worth about a 5 or 6, the writing being good, but it is quite easy. And easily confusing, although the overall story isn't quite too difficult to follow.
I beat it in 10 minutes, and yes, I read everything that happened to me.
on 4/24/2012 8:28:11 PM with a score of 0
it's amazing and very exciting very good i love it:) it is better than reese's cups lol
-- bells23 on 4/17/2012 11:40:49 AM with a score of 0
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-- griZz on 3/6/2012 3:55:59 AM with a score of 0
this was indeed one of the best games ever!!! i killed some pirates, charlie got injured, caused the light space incident, saved myself, met my grandaughter... ha, i'm satisfied... very satisfied.
-- kidre3 on 3/4/2012 8:45:00 PM with a score of 0
I haven't been on this site for about a year, and I've really missed it. This story is awesome, fun to play, and doesn't get dull, this is really worth it.
-- Gabriel on 3/1/2012 1:05:41 AM with a score of 0
Pretty good game, even though it was pointless(seeing how the whole adventure in the future was forgotten.)
on 2/26/2012 1:15:12 AM with a score of 0
I actually made it through this time! There's suspense, there's action, it's mentally stimulating, and the end was very fulfilling. Loved it!
-- Alagan on 2/20/2012 6:35:14 PM with a score of 0
I died, but it was still pretty fun!
-- Alagan on 2/20/2012 6:10:10 PM with a score of 0
Quite good. It'd be nice if there were skills involved for when you actually understand what is happening and so on.
on 1/26/2012 6:47:40 PM with a score of 0
Great Story! Great Game!
Good: The plot was really good. I loved the Space Odyssey feel of it all. The pictures were really cool too. The items looked good as well.
Bad: Nothing I can think of... maybe a map of the ship would be better, but it wasn't needed.
Ugly: Nothing I can think of. The game is beautiful ;)
This is one of my favorites.
on 1/25/2012 3:45:22 PM with a score of 0
Very cool Sci-Fi - fun fun :)
on 1/9/2012 4:04:20 PM with a score of 0
i loved this story it really made me feel like i was making progress in somthing and then mindf****d me at the end it was amazing and wish i could rate it higher
on 12/17/2011 2:50:55 AM with a score of 0
I love time travel. That's all that needs to be said!
on 12/14/2011 5:29:41 PM with a score of 0
I got the good ending, i think. It was kinda fun
on 12/11/2011 10:36:05 PM with a score of 0
-- Kory on 12/1/2011 7:25:55 PM with a score of 0
this is a good story dont shoot the pirates
-- goonie on 10/29/2011 9:26:00 AM with a score of 0
on 10/13/2011 9:37:42 AM with a score of 0
very good. i got a little confused for a min but it was well written so i could navigate round properly. i really liked this one. i wonder is there is more than one good ending?
on 9/28/2011 10:05:49 PM with a score of 0
I really like science fiction stories. I have ever read many book and seen the movies which talk about science fiction stories. I don't have a lot experience about that. I think that the people will reach the time in the future. And we can travel through the time. But, we don't know yet. My opinion, to perform about that we need to know more about univers, planet, light,math, physical, chemistry,etc.
-- Lam on 9/25/2011 4:19:16 PM with a score of 0
It IS BETTER THAN A REESE'S CUP!
-- Seth Jaworski on 9/13/2011 1:04:59 PM with a score of 0
it was really good. i luv the ending! in the middle it was slightly cofusing. also, i think u should use lil more pics. so we can get an idea about wat the grand daughter looked like and stuff like that. but overall good.
on 9/3/2011 4:57:51 AM with a score of 0
A bootstrap? I really didn't see that coming (lol)
As far as time travel stories go, I think this one's quite good.
on 8/24/2011 9:25:55 AM with a score of 0
lol @ Sakuni.
on 8/13/2011 8:48:43 PM with a score of 0
This was ok. At first it was great, but then it got boring. There was excitement, but I would like it better if you were right-2-the-point. I rated it a: Slightly Better Than Homework. Sorry, but got 2 say the truth. By the way, one of your pictures, was, lets say not the right way. Hope I was slightly nice!
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-- 8Sakuni8 on 8/13/2011 8:44:26 PM with a score of 0
Nicely done, I did notice one grammar error, but that's all, The logic of the paradoxes was driving me round the bend a few times too.
on 8/13/2011 9:02:10 AM with a score of 0
confusing and fun all around!
-- Fireplay on 8/11/2011 3:07:24 PM with a score of 0
-- josh on 7/28/2011 11:39:32 AM with a score of 0
Very nice. I'm working on a story with a time mage in it right now and I've gotta say planning it makes my head hurt. And remember, kids, a time paradox can only be truly solved with another paradox, or Link.
on 6/17/2011 12:42:20 PM with a score of 0
A rather good game, I must say. Very interesting. I enjoyed it very much.
-- Magus on 6/9/2011 2:27:40 PM with a score of 0
That was surprisingly difficult to navigate, and a little annoying at times. Still, it's a decent game worth playing.
on 5/29/2011 12:54:56 AM with a score of 0
I really think adventure stories are awesome and i would like to read another one. I came upon this site by means of "I just wanted to find a story i could choose to be in and decide what happens." I kinda didnt like how it was kinda leading me to force a choice every now and then and maybe there couldve been more choices but i love all kinds of stories like this. I loved it.
-- Chase on 5/26/2011 9:31:20 PM with a score of 0
Great Game! I loved it. One thing though. At the end, you forget what happened, yet your grand-daughter told you you talked all about it. thtat kind oof ruins it, dont you think? still, great game.
-- Alavander on 5/18/2011 2:06:26 PM with a score of 0
on 4/29/2011 9:56:36 AM with a score of 0
Nice interesting story, gotta love time travel.
on 4/23/2011 12:07:25 AM with a score of 0
i think its perfect good stroy a strange twist(when u find out about the women is you granddaughter) but i can improve on some more deatils and you need more ways to die and after awhile i sorta got stuck like didnt let me into the cargo area or the ships gallery but its very fun to play and a earlier commet said its like star track i agree im not saying u might have copy star track but it seems like it i hope u make more of these storys good work and thanks
-- evan on 4/18/2011 10:41:14 PM with a score of 0
Cool story, I was surprised I didn't find it confusing at all
on 4/10/2011 1:28:16 PM with a score of 0
Very good story. Quite abstract and unique. My one criticism is the inconsistency in the memory of the event. At the end, there is merely an image in the pilot's head of a girl, whereas earlier in the tale, when meeting with your granddaughter, she tells you how you used to talk about the event (which I assume from this means the pilot remembered it well).
Small problem in an otherwise excellent story.
-- Max on 4/9/2011 11:01:19 AM with a score of 0
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-- Jon on 3/18/2011 5:52:42 PM with a score of 0
Excellent story thats well written and put together. Recommend this to just about anyone.
-- Matt on 2/22/2011 1:40:58 AM with a score of 0
Was a decent enough read. Finished it a little prematurely, however. Mainly down to my choices, of course.
-- Stu on 2/5/2011 2:40:10 PM with a score of 0
I came across this by accident,& I thoroughly enjoyed it. Keep up the good work! You're very creative!
-- GBS on 2/5/2011 12:21:00 AM with a score of 0
It is okay.
on 1/25/2011 6:39:10 PM with a score of 0
This game is really awesome! You know, unlike the others it have an history that to understand it you must think about it a little! This game requires your full attention too since only one wrong option and you're done for good! Really like it and i really recommend it!
-- anonymous on 1/17/2011 11:15:34 PM with a score of 0
Wow. That was really good.
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on 1/9/2011 10:01:48 PM with a score of 0
A very enjoyable experience indeed. Many Thanks. Debra
-- Ms Debra I Clason on 12/2/2010 6:30:48 PM with a score of 0
Entertaining scenario. Not difficult, though, and is there a way to wrong? I only found one death route.
on 10/5/2010 4:11:46 PM with a score of 0
I liked the mindbender aspect of the story, trying to keep up with the time-travel conundrum. I enjoyed there being so many choices, and the writing gave good visuals when there weren't pictures, like the description of the scene outside the cockpit when Andromeda was docked on a planet. The granddaughter interaction was pretty interesting. There was one problem, though, and that was the contradiction with saying that you must get out alive since your granddaughter remembers you telling a story about this time you were stuck in Light Space, but then several threads end up with you dying. And then at the true ending, you only remember the granddaughter's face but nothing else about what happened -- this doesn't make sense if later you are telling the granddaughter this story. The only other thing I would change besides clearing up these contraditions is to not describe the transition betw
on 10/5/2010 1:15:01 PM with a score of 0
It thrilled me from the beggining to the end. Congratulations.
on 9/24/2010 12:24:28 AM with a score of 0
I did it! Amazing story going along with the game it is the best i've ever played!
-- me on 9/13/2010 2:03:10 PM with a score of 0
Very few actual branches but a good read.
on 8/31/2010 7:13:14 PM with a score of 0
I got trapped in an endless loop in the galley/cargo bay and had to restart.
on 8/13/2010 10:36:13 PM with a score of 0
This is a great example of how to construct a great adventure! Instant deaths are very rare, but every action has a consequence, even if only slightly. The story was very well written and original. I had a blast.
on 6/12/2010 12:33:54 AM with a score of 0
Original Concept... Very nice story... two thumbs up!!!
on 4/23/2010 7:49:44 PM with a score of 0
Normally I'm not into sci-fi, but this was wonderfully done.
on 4/8/2010 11:28:57 PM with a score of 0
Very cool! Interesting premise, and you carry it out very well.
on 1/18/2010 10:10:25 PM with a score of 0
THat was cool! very trippy.
on 12/4/2009 1:43:04 PM with a score of 0
An awesome game!
on 11/2/2009 11:04:38 PM with a score of 0
Wow... I love time travel paradoxes. Perfectly done, and well written.
on 10/29/2009 1:09:14 PM with a score of 0
This is awesome. The only thing it needs is a sequel! THAT WOULD BE AWESOMER!!!!!
-- qwew80 on 10/11/2009 8:26:37 AM with a score of 0
Brilliant. I love how you mixed just the right amounts of bizarreness and coherency. Wish it had been longer, though. And perhaps even a bit more bizarre?
But, a great story! Time well spent.
-- Brian on 9/9/2009 1:45:29 PM with a score of 0
Great idea. Could use a little bit more development, though.
on 8/22/2009 2:21:04 AM with a score of 0
Love the time travel, but it could get confusing. This really reminds me of Star Trek. Anyway, I'm glad I finally won!
on 8/1/2009 9:53:50 AM with a score of 0
Love the time travel, but it could get confusing. This really reminds me of Star Trek. Anyway, I'm glad I finally won!
on 8/1/2009 9:53:49 AM with a score of 0
Wow, confusing. How did you come up with all of the time-shifts and stuff? I honestly couldn't handle that kind of thing.
on 7/27/2009 2:54:29 AM with a score of 0
Whoa, awesome. Confusing too. Weird how you somehow fixed time and the LSJD accident never happened, but your granddaughter knew about it.
A (time) wizard did it?
-- Vinegartaffy on 6/10/2009 7:18:25 PM with a score of 0
Sweet story man, got alot of good ideas for the future...but maybe the computers in the future cold have safeguards against using tow coordinates at the same time. either way nice game loved it
-- John on 1/21/2009 7:25:42 AM with a score of 0
on 10/17/2008 8:18:05 PM with a score of 0
It was a wonderful story, good ideas of time travel in space. One problem though, THERE IS NO GRAVITY IN SPACE.
on 7/17/2008 11:12:32 PM with a score of 0
on 2/20/2008 8:02:16 PM with a score of 0
Wow. That was wicked. Yup, inter-dimensional/time travel is confusing. Great writing, great atmosphere, and even though there were a few characters, they were really interesting. This is just superb.
-- Nimitz_15 on 2/18/2008 6:47:58 PM with a score of 0
great story...really nice...
-- tgan3 on 11/25/2007 7:03:44 PM with a score of 0
This was a very well thought out and well written game. defiantly a good game to play.
on 11/4/2007 11:28:28 PM with a score of 0
Above average story.
Cons: One page didn't have any choices. The items didn't seem to be of much use. The spatial descriptions were a little too difficult to keep up with. Just something about the writing style that was more confusing than interesting.
Pros: Good plot. Good pictures. Good length.
Could have done better but it's not a bad piece at all.
-- urnam0 on 10/27/2007 5:22:57 PM with a score of 0
on 10/22/2007 8:18:02 PM with a score of 0
WOW...Oh my goodness, WOW... I am speachless... That was so cool...
One minor problem, though: At one point "I" (the main character) considered whether "I" had done something that, really, I had never done. I don't want to spoil any details for future players, but I'll PM you, tsmpaul, if you don't know what I'm talking about and would like to. Again, amazingly great game. I wish I could rate it a 9.
on 10/16/2007 6:38:34 PM with a score of 0
Good pictures, good game! Usually I dislike games with too many sentences and paragraphs, but this is not to long and not too short, reminds me of my first CYOA book.
You are a inspiration
-- dracortez on 7/6/2007 6:58:50 PM with a score of 0
pretty cool. i can see why it made best rated game. The pictures were really sweet, too.
on 6/21/2007 3:34:15 PM with a score of 0
on 6/6/2007 12:47:25 PM with a score of 0
Wow. This is really another great science fiction story (not that I would expect anything less from tsmpaul). The distorted pictures add to the effect. I experienced some confusion in the parts right after I met my future granddaughter, though.
on 6/2/2007 3:52:16 PM with a score of 0
Great writing, nice use of pictures, 8/8 anouthger great game tsm paul
on 5/20/2007 5:14:29 PM with a score of 0
Very nicely done! Also well written.
-- BigDaddy on 4/17/2007 5:17:15 PM with a score of 0
wow that was some gd story stuff. Great vocab :)
on 4/11/2007 3:41:22 AM with a score of 0
Wow...how do you make such incredibly good games??
on 4/4/2007 2:53:03 AM with a score of 0
8/8 Easily. Good work Tsmpaul, very good work.
on 3/30/2007 12:47:30 AM with a score of 0
Very Good, Great work TSMPAUL!!!
on 3/29/2007 11:01:01 AM with a score of 0
Having re-played this, I decided it's an 8 not a 7. Apart from this game, I have only ever rated a game 8 once (Mommy).
on 3/24/2007 12:58:52 AM with a score of 0
some of the best writing and creativity on the site. im impressed.
on 3/23/2007 5:57:50 PM with a score of 0
Awesome story! 8/8! It deserves an award of some kind. I like how you used the feel from The Object of moving through time. Hope to see more in the future!
on 3/22/2007 8:39:05 PM with a score of 0
Another terrific game, sir. Well worthy of an eight.
on 3/22/2007 5:55:45 AM with a score of 0
AWESOME! 7/8! I urge every sci-fi lover on this site to play this game. It involves Time Paradoxes, Space Pirates and some awesome writing.
on 3/22/2007 4:15:12 AM with a score of 0