Personal Demons

Player Rating5.55/8

"#158 overall, #8 for 2013"
based on 109 ratings since 03/15/2013
played 2,564 times (finished 125)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length7/8

"It keeps going and going"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

A professional wrestler grapples with more than physical opponents in this tale.
With supernatural beings clamoring for control of our protagonist...will he be able to get his life on track, advance his career, and keep from losing his mind?
Only time will tell!

(This game has a mix of action, humor, romance, and moral decisions with a modern day setting with paranormal themes.)

**This is my 1st game, so any input would be greatly appreciated.  Any questions or comments...send them my way!  Hope you enjoy it!**

There are 4 ranked endings for each character.  2 Top Contender endings and 2 Champion endings for each.  For the ultimate completionist...you'll need to beat the game 6 times!

Player Comments

Wow! :D I'm not a fan of wrestling or anything, but this storygame was certainly entertaining. ^-^

You had a good storyline with all the right points. Though, you didn't build up much suspense. I wasn't excited for the Championship, and it didn't seem like the character did anything toward winning the championship except conquering/not conquering his inner demon.

While you have great dialogue, your descriptions are a bit lacking. Oftentimes in the story, I would find myself lost - WHERE is the protagonist? What's around him? You did have a few brief sentences here and there, but that picture wasn't painted. I didn't have a good idea of what the setting looks like.

Vixen seemed to be simply an object of affections. When going to the movies and having dinner, I had no idea how to imagine her. While you wrote that Will had a nice time, it didn't really feel that way. You did a lot of direct characterization for Vixen, and it doesn't really tell me much about her.

Will and the inner demon was an interesting idea. Though, I think the idea of directly "choosing" if he overcomes his inner demon defeats the point of it. The inner demon is supposed to come out when the character lacks control, not when the character "chooses". Obviously, one would choose to overcome them (both ways are a good read).

The fighting was linear, as mentioned in the other comment(s). I understood how it worked - the Champ's impression of Will gets better the longer he lasts - but it made it a bit annoying to have to go back. Also, you gave a small description of each of the moves sometimes. Try giving descriptions every time because I have no idea what they are! I ended up having to randomly choose between two choices, which makes thinking about the best tactic pointless.

Otherwise, your grammar, spelling, and dialogue is excellent. You have some action scenes and some contemplative scenes. Your writing is good, but just work on descriptions. Your storyline fits together nicely and works well as a complete story.
-- Crescentstar on 3/5/2017 10:57:52 PM
The game is certantly good, but there is one major drawback that stops it from getting a 7/8.
The battle scenes are completely linear. It's either good move or bad move, and it doesn't allow for more events. I'd suggest using a scripting mechanic to factor health, and allowing for more then one move to work. Other then that, the game is great, especially for wrestling fans. Not one myself, but I have a friend who'd enjoy this game immensely.
6/8
-- Aman on 3/17/2013 11:31:53 AM
Piledriver...

The story was great and the details, particularly in the wrestling battles, were more than enough. However, it derailed me from giving higher reviews because it was too short. But still, you deserve a decent rating for that good effort, which although did not become the best story, also did not become the worst story.

5/8.
-- AgentX on 3/4/2017 6:24:45 PM
Wow. Amazing!
-- Bob Dilas on 3/1/2017 9:11:23 AM
WOO! STRIKER IN BEAST MODE! 8/8!
-- Tim36D on 4/4/2014 5:22:34 AM
Awesome. Just pure awesome. You're a really good writer! You should make more! ;)
-- Il_Maestro on 9/1/2013 6:09:45 PM
Excellent game, I was confused about why I was being assisted by the "friend," but overall enjoyable.
-- MythicBowman on 8/19/2013 2:23:08 AM
Great game! It brings me enlightment. I truly loved the way it was written. Write a sequel.
-- steveo on 4/22/2013 9:59:27 PM
Second read thru...awesome . Diff choices demon path crazy
-- ethereal on 4/2/2013 3:09:58 AM
Well, an intriguing story to say the least! A bit linear in some places with the choices which made me disconnect from the story. I believe an indication about the "demon" should've been made much earlier. Overall, it was still enjoyable.
-- Nia on 3/29/2013 1:39:23 AM
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