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1. Reason's why, 

Even though we may like to fuck, Honesty is the best policy

We may have run out of luck, But we are a butler of good quality

We will not lie, And my love for sex will not die

Honesty is always first, In a butler of our level

Our luck may be cursed, But lying is for the devil

Literally no clue

Ok well what if I don't make poems that have to do with.... you know

Okay i understand you guys do not like my poems that were a failed attempt of humor.

Honestly it’s more of a case nobody likes you in general at this point.

Nah, we did this with Spazzler (Or whoever that fucktard was from Inkle) as well and we eventually banned him.

Since it looks like the other poem and its response thread got deleted, I'll repost this response (good thing I saved a copy,) though it has lost its impact now:

Poetry is not mere spontaneous rhyme;
The structure has grammar, rhythm, and time.
The contents are more than just vomiting lust,
In plebeian prose designed to disgust.

Poems are the music of laugher and mirth,
Elysian mysteries touching the Earth,
Melancholy strains of longing and grief,
And ballads of heroes defying belief.

Poems shape the thoughts that would otherwise flee,
They inspire, they challenge, they move us, they free.
But you gushed up words straight from your scrotum,
Don't disrespect art and dare call that a poem.

Ah, I see! Everything just got moved. Makes sense!

Look I will stop making poems and contributing in general if it really disturbs you guys this much

In order to stop contributing you would have had to been contributing in the first place.

Good one you got me there.

Your enthusiasm isn't lacking, it's just that you seem to post a lot by impulse without looking over what you have written. What you likely meant as clever comes off as merely dumb and crude because of this.

Just some general advice:

- Think things through.
- Read over what you write a second time.
- Proofread, or at least attempt it. Errors and typos will creep through, but one should at least attempt to punctuate and use complete sentences.
- Repress the temptation to go for cheap jokes.

Have you ever seen the Despicable Me movies? There are a lot of clever jokes in them involving sarcasm, wordplay, or situational comedy. There also are a lot of (intentionally) juvenile jokes in them. Basically, don't be the mindless minion laughing because someone said the word 'bottom' and carrying around a fart gun. If you insist on acting that part, people will treat you as if you are a mindless minion. If you want people to see your words as funny or clever, then put some thought and effort into them. Strive to increase the amusement and intellect of collective humanity when you write or joke or persuade, not to kill the brain cells of anyone reading.

I'm not sure if that makes me feel better about it, or worse, lol. When I was in high school, people just got a piercing or tattoo to be edgy. They didn't reject the English language.

But on the positive side, at least Dave isn't railing about English being a racist artifact of sexist, cis-normative colonialism and demanding we all speak Esperanto.

Look Mizal and Camelon. I realized my grammar was terrible, so I know pay 159 dollars a year for Grammarly to correct my spelling and grammar. So I understand where you're coming from, but I have the number one ranked proofreader in the world behind me, and I do double-check. I don't do things to be a rebel in the community cyoas. I do it because it's what I would legitemently do and if it makes me different, so be it. I have no problem with being the only odd one out on this site.

You can't have sex AND not lie, it doesn't work that way.

(I have no idea what this thread is about)

There once was a man named Davefaster,

Who was very bad at forming a metaphor,

He spewed out a rhyme,

Wasn't worth a dime,

As he kept choking, on his own bullshit faster.

That was actually intentional to give more focus on the last line 

https://www.google.com/url?sa=t&source=web&rct=j&url=https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Perfect_and_imperfect_rhymes&ved=2ahUKEwiPtPmvg-vkAhWz7HMBHbsCC2YQFjAAegQIAxAB&usg=AOvVaw3I2xwfem4wkQG-Z1BZtL9s

They're called imperfect rhymes check the link out 

Yeah I know, just wanted to point out my intention for using that. Sorry if I came forward as too strong : P

Half rhyme or imperfect rhyme, sometimes called near-rhyme, lazy rhyme, or slant rhyme, is a type of rhyme formed by words with similar but not identical sounds. In most instances, either the vowel segments are different while the consonants are identical, or vice versa.

I kinda assumed that the "phor" and the "er" sound the same in the ending of the words(similar to believe and perceive, where it's 'eve' and 'eive' or 'sky' and 'high' ); 'meta' and 'fast' obviously don't. Maybe my pronunciation is off

Ahh that's the problem. I was taking metaphor syllable-wise like this 

meTAphor 

Was assuming the first to be unstressed second stressed third unstressed, following the iambic style of the whole poem. 

Yep, true that. Thanks for bringing this up appreciate it. 

I usually pronounce the 'phor' just like a 'schwa' actually. If the 'o' is distinct that can cause a lot of problems. 

Like in phor the ph gives an 'f' sound and 'hor' is pronounced like somewhat of an 'her' like how you pronounce 'err'

So metaphor is pronounced like 'meta-f-err'

If 'o' is distinct it could become 'meta-fo-er' ? I doubt I can even say that lol 

Or maybe 'meta-f-or' where the e is completely removed. This sounds more possible is that how you pronounce it? 

I think I got it now. Thanks!

It sounds like me-ta-forh for me now when I say it out loud though. I'm bad with 'r' s

Well, I think I was doing just that lol. So you could assume that a Mark Twain character wrote that Limerick, lol 

There once was a man named Dave-y-faster, 
Who dabbled with a rhyme that caused me to wonder,
About his incredulous metaphors,
And humor-induced snores,
That made me stare, wide-eyed, at this world's eighth wonder...

A foolish young cultist, Davefaster,

Talked smack to his eldritch slavemaster,

His master cried, "Mortal!

I'll open a portal!"

So Dave was consumed by grave Hastur.

Beautiful!!! I say we make Gower our resident poet laureate. ^_^